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Twilighted Rose


I bring in a dark twisted story with moments in between. Lovers lost. Friendship destroyed. Hope never found. Let's see where this takes us.

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Twilight is on a mission. There are twelve missing ponies to find, whether they be dead or alive. But what she finds will destroy everything she believes in. The Equestria she knows is not all that it seems. But there is one who will set everything straight.
"It is said that history is written by the victors! And the victims' bodies are lain in a bloody heap, left to be forgotten. Well, I have seen through the victims' eyes and seen the lies you have spoken! No more... No more will your lies infect me! "


Cover art done by Sonadow2865
https://www.deviantart.com/sonadow2865/art/The-Seventh-Light-873458878?ga_changes=1&ga_submit_new=10%3A1615945338&ga_type=edit


Editor/ beta reader Gboyd
editor Silverstone28001

Chapters (39)
Comments ( 330 )

Not bad some, error there but not bad :twilightsmile:

Well this I wrote over a year ago so it might have so more errors than intended. I do have many more chapters coming up

Honestly, it seems like a good story so far, the only thing I don't necessarily like it that Equestria doesn't seem like the type of place to use cursing as normal as it is here, about the only one I could understand was Cadence from stress, other than that, it's a good story that I fully intend on reading!

So basically the Alicorn's are like the caribou

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What do you mean by that?

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They are basically enslaving the Unicorn Earth ponies and Pegasus

im enjoying this so far keep up the good work

Ain't No Rest for the Wicked

“You called me Cornflower,” she growled as a pair of shears appeared above her head, “I don’t make idle threats.”

HAHAHAHAHAHA:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

“You called me Cornflower,” she growled as a pair of shears appeared above her head, “I don’t make idle threats.”

RUN SOMBRA RUN!!!

“You called me Cornflower,” she growled as a pair of shears appeared above her head, “I don’t make idle threats.”

He just realised at that moment Sombra knew...
HE FUCKED UP

Do the rest of the Mane Six appear in this story?

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Yes they do. I just have to fit them in.

The hunt has begun

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That's a good background music for this chapter! Thank you

Nice chapter as always! ^^

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Why thank you. It's very much appreciated that you have read and liked my story. Just few quick questions. How did Anteras make you feel? And out of the three new characters which one do you want to read more about?

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Personally? Anteras is on the mild horror side, although I find no like for this character too much (I blame my reading the Fallout Pony series, evil alicorns never rub me the right way). She makes me feel a tad uncomfortable (the spider scene) yet peaks my interest of any further plans she may have. As for the new characters, Zepha is who I would want to read more about.

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I am glad to hear that you don't like Anteras. It makes my heart feel happy that I conveyed the emotion I was going for with Anteras. I'll let my editor know that you love Zapha ( aka her character) and yes you will be able to read more about her when the story demands it.

“I said that it was the only way!” she cried. “You wouldn’t do anything! You are the invincible, unkillable embodiment of Harmony’s power. The only way to weaken you was to take the only thing you cared about. And that was my good friend, your mate, Midnight Star! I had no choice! You would have stopped me from putting up that barrier!”

You actually did had a choice but you weren't willing to accept the consequences of it.

I like Midnight's moxie.

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Thank you!! Somebody gets it!!!

Going to be honest, that alicorn sounds like the Murderous Moppets from The Venture Bros. in my head.

Comment posted by Twilighted Rose deleted Jul 7th, 2020

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Thank you for letting me know I'll try and fix it

“Just… carry me. I can’t move a muscle,” I slurred as sleep washed over me. I could have sworn I heard him say ‘as you wish’ as the darkness swallowed me up. But that was preposterous. The Keepers don’t have personalities. Right?

Why did this make me laugh so much?! :rainbowlaugh:

Eleven... he called her 11 names that weren't her own... BAHAHAHA!! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: Oh my gosh! :rainbowlaugh: I had to recount the names 3 or 4 times! :rainbowlaugh:

“You called me Cornflower,” she growled as a pair of shears appeared above her head, “I don’t make idle threats.”

YOU BETTER RUN SOMBRA!! SHE'S GONNA CHOP YOUR HAIR OFF!!

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Fun fact: I lost count of all times he called her a different name. Thank you for counting them!

“There is the Discord I know!” a black and red alicorn proclaimed as it stepped out from the shadows onto the balcony. “Welcome back, Uncle. It has been a long time, has it not?” The alicorn smiled sharply.

I KNEW IT!! I thought, if Harmony and Discord were BOTH made by the Void, wouldn't that make them siblings in a way? And I WAS RIGHT!! HAHAHA!! HUZZAH FOR MY TEMPORARY INTELLIGENCE!!

Edit: *realizes I just finished the final chapter* Oh no. No no no no no no! NOOOOOO!!! WHY?!?! :raritycry:

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Don't worry I got more coming!!! I just have to convince my editor to edit and learn how to self edit at the same time! This will be fun

NO!!! I FINISHED IT AGAIN!! :raritycry:
Also FIRST READ AND COMMENT!!

I have to to say, this is by far my favorite take on Sombra.

“Fluttershy, are you Discord’s girlfriend?” Sombra asked. “If so, would that make you my future aunt? Would it be alright if I called you Auntie?”

OML!! THIS IS BEAUTIFUL!! I LOVE IT!! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Great chapter! I loved it, also 'fy nghariad bac' translated to 'my bachelor girlfriend' on Google Translate. Lol.

Lol. When I wrote that I found a website that says differently. But Midnight is the singles. So....

Aww~ I regret that I'm late (so late T^T) but I'm glad I came! This is soooo CuTe!! :heart: I love Twibra (or with this story would it be Midbar - Midnight X Sombra??) Oh, I also found out that 'fy nghariad bac(h)' means 'my little love'. SO FREAKING CUTE!!! :heart::heart:

I am so so glad that you love my story. Every time you comment brightens my day. Fyi I really am trying to find the most adorable pet name in Welsh. Don't worry about being late as long as you read the story it is fine. And thank you from the bottom of my heart for reading my story.

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