Twilight Sparkle is delirious from lack of sleep; Rainbow Dash is Rainbow Dash. They fight crime. Sort of.
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So, this was an interesting experiment for me. It actually dates back quite a ways, though I've only recently finished it up for posting. The original concept was to have the whole thing narrated by the villain without directly mentioning anything that would reveal them, but that didn't last long. In practice, it became more of an exercise in being as blatant as possible and seeing how long I could keep it up before people catch on, and in that, I think I succeeded. At the very least, I had fun writing it.
Wow, that's pretty good.
10003416
Well now I just feel stupid, seeing as I didn't figure out what was going on until it was spelt out for me.
Half-jokes aside, I really enjoyed this. It seems a bit mislabeled (In particular, the presence of a Comedy tag and the lack of the Dark and AU tags), but the fact that that's my biggest complaint speaks for itself. Nicely done!
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Ah, well, the comedy tag is one that's given me a lot of trouble before since I tend to put quite a bit of humor into anything I write, but it's never the core goal. Labeling it as Dark… might work. I considered tragedy but didn't feel right about that either. Maybe I should just set up a poll?
10003612
This are just my thoughts, but I've always thought that the Comedy tag only really applies if the story's premise/main goal is comedic in nature. Sure, this did get a few chuckles out of me, but they mostly came from the first half of the story when Twilight and Rainbow were lightly ribbing each other, Twilight out of tiredness and Rainbow out of exasperation. It felt natural; or, at least, it didn't feel full-on "comedic", if that makes any sense.
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Yeah, well, I guess part of it is that I kinda actively dislike the kinds of comedies that have no actual meat or point. Mostly, though, it comes down to whether I think it should show up in a search for comedic stories, and I've gotten questions from people in the past about my removing the comedy tag from my other stories, so I figured I might as well include it.
Anyway, I did go ahead and add the Dark tag, at least, so that should at least be warning enough so that I'm not misrepresenting it. Personally, as the author, I think the second half is pretty funny as well, but that's me
Amazing
Certainly didn't guess it was Twilight, good job on that front
A hoard of friendship. That really is so Twilight.
Yo this story's got me fucked up.
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I normally refer to those as "shit fics"
This is honestly the kind of stuff I should expect myself to be reading close to midnight.
Whew, that's a hell of a potential hook for another story. I think one of the scariest bits is that Celestia implicitly condones her actions.
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That would have been very reminiscent of Agatha Christie =)
Also! Your profile picture is particularly apt for this story.
Would you believe me if I told you I just happened to be listening to the Portal 2 soundtrack while reading this?
And then all the ponies grouped together with Alondro (who by this time had evolved into the Joker) and learned how to kill Twilight slowly for the next 100 years as revenge for doing this to them.
Because, yeah, she made a shit-ton of enemies.
This is short-sighted, narrow-minded, stupid-insane Twilight. Which means I have to make her suffer and die for lowering the standards for proper mad geniuses.
Well, that was interesting. :D
Sort of, indeed.
10003612
Well, having a few jokes and being a comedy are different things. I suppose the Dark Tag covers a multitude of sins, though, so you're probably fine now.
bleh.
Your description and tags are utterly worthless to this story
See, now I'm convinced it's a member of the Moon Guard. Fate loves making Twilight eat her words.
So is this multivariable friendship calculus? I never got past integrating one-on-one interaction functions.
Nags as hags is a brilliant ponification, as is the truth behind it. Poor Zecora really could use a conversation partner.
"Like the charcoal you had for breakfast?"
"I had breakfast?"
Oh. Oh. This wasn't at all what I expected. Brilliant work all around. Really, I should've been more suspicious when Fluttershy never showed up again. Thank you for this.
Welp, this is gonna leave me traumatized for a week or two. I finished reading this on my break at work and coworkers were asking what was wrong with me afterwards.
Thanks, I guess.
I loved it, how dare you.Brilliant and honestly unexpected, although in retrospect... I've got to say you achieved what you wanted.
I wonder, how will the girls react to what happened? How will ponyville or all the others in the periphery of those affected? The friend of a friend that got nabbed because they knew someone from ponyville but no pony else they knew you taken? Applejack with her cousins? The princesses, if they didn't agree before? So much more can come from this one. Ok, maybe just an epilogue or so. Dunno if we're going to get it though.
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I really like this story. I agree it needs a sequel , I want to see a giant half dragon twilight and the future ponyville and how everyone handles it.
That was an interesting story and I totally didn't see that coming
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Well played.
This is brilliant!
That... does not sound as bad as they make it out to be.
The latter parts of the story reminded us of The Thousand Year Romance of Clover the Clever.