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Carmine Craft


Just a shoddy writer, now with an okay profile pic :)

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So there I am, suddenly existing, not remembering a thing about who I was before. Fortunately I didn't loose all of my memories, just the ones that were personal. Context of my remaining memories suggests I was this thing called a human, but now I'm just an imperial pegasus in a world sorta similar to a TV show I have memories of. I wonder if these memories will actually be of any use.


Hey, I'll be updating this later, after we have reached the "well established" check point, and I know how to word it better. The tags will also change basses on them being needed in the story.

Cover art is on the way, but for now, just enjoy the writing, or don't, but i hope you do!

:on hiatus for world building, the co author is slow :derpytongue2:

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 43 )

loose is the opposite of tight
lose is the opposite of find.
Learn this.

The things on my back twitched partway through my attempt to get to my feet, the weird part about that is that I felt it, as if these extra somethings were a part of me. This resulted in calm and rational questions.

'Wha-the-fu-?!'

I panicked and slipped off the strangely large surface of the bed. My hands and feet clacked against the tiled floor, and gave out from underneath me, I hit the ground with a thud and a moan, rubbing my head.

Truly, the calmest and most rational of responses :moustache:

More approaching clicky-clacky steps, and I just then realized that my eyes were closed. My eyes had been closed the entire time. 'How the fuck did I not realize that my eyes were closed? it takes a special kind a stupid to forget you have eyes.' I mentally chided myself for my ineptitude, and decided to fix this mistake.

Yes, yes it does :moustache:

"G-Glitter?" the woman's voice asked hopeful, by the sounds of it, the question was either directed at me, or someone in close proximity to me.

The first thing that came to mind when I read Glitter was: GLITTER BOMB, I don't even know why :pinkiecrazy:

I felt the last of my rational mind dying in the corner.

Ehh it wasn't being to helpful anyway :trixieshiftleft:

"O-our little filly," the husband said, nearly inaudibly. Whenever the mother spun around and I could actually see him, he looked so happy, like he had just been told his wife beat cancer or something.

Nah not his wife, his daughter did :trollestia:

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CRITICAL SYSTEM ERROR. NARRATOR.EXE HAS FAILED AND MUST RESTART.





also UPDATE TO WINDOWS 10 OR WE BRICK YOUR COMPUTER
-Microsoft

So our hero is related to a bat? Dream-seeker or night pegasus, I wonder.

My pointing became more frantic, which earned another round of chuckles from Cobalt and the mare. "Jeez, you'd think she's never seen a thestral before," Swift joked.

I guess having thestrals in the family line explains the excessive sensitivity to light :trixieshiftright:

This is nice.

Great feel to the characters and personality of the MC

Hope you continue

'It's the same stuff! Why did she refuse to drink? I-'

Embarrassment :moustache:

Thus we made our way to the kitchen, with me still atop my mother's head. It was nothing fancy, cabinets, a stove, a fridge, countertop, dumb fluff carpeting - seriously who carpets a kitchen? - and a wooden table, I jumped to that when we were near enough.

Of it's gonna be fun when she figures out she's standing on clouds :trollestia:

"B-b-but, she can't be an imperial! Her father and I are normal pegasi!"

Yes, but your mother is an imperial (gonna want to know more about that later) which makes it very easy/possible for her genetic traits to be passed down to your children.
Also Glitter as more sensitive eyes, and probably ears as well, due to Cobolt's thestral heritage :moustache:

'Why am I a padawan? Better yet how is it relev-' My question would have to wait, because my hooves just touched the carpet, and when I was released from my mother's grip onto the floor, I didn't stop moving. There was about forty five seconds of white, and a whooshing noise one would associate with falling. Then there was open air, and a forest down below me. I looked around in a panic, above me there was nothing, except for the massive cloud I just fell through, I could even see the hole.

...huh... guess the brain only downloaded the physical instincts, not the magical ones... that's gonna be a problem :applejackunsure:

"Its possible she just doesn't have that instinct." Red String Shrugged with her wings.

Yeah, Brain really bucked up there :moustache:

"I'm going to make a special trip to Canterlot,” Red Strings stated quietly. “Somepony needs to inform the princess about the potential dangers this brings up.

You have direct access to the ruler of the nation? :trixieshiftright:

Hey, I see you’re trying to fly. Want me to help?

Hello, you condescending, sardonic fucker of a paper clip... *growls*

"I have Several questions" ... 'There's another few to add to the list.'
I laughed at this!

"Hah! I'd like to see them try! I'm just a sweet little granny, why would anypony bother?" She chuckled. "Ah, if only they knew …

Getting really curious about her occupation :trollestia:

The sun suddenly zipped beneath the horizon, and the moon was brought up in its place, coulda sworn it shot me a dirty look as it ascended into the heavens.

Heh :pinkiecrazy:

"Don't you finish that sentence Bubbles," Red Strings threatened with a mischievous smile. "It's my duty as a grandmother to spoil my grandfoals." She swept up her daughter, son in law, and me, after a moment, in a hug before departing.

And I have the feeling you have/had a pretty well paying job :trixieshiftleft:

So protagonist is getting settled in. And annoying possessed deities. Good chapter!


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Get an upvote for using a new feature.

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Could you explain what this new feature is? It just looks like a blank comment to me.

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That was a joke about the blank comment; I've seen several people doing that lately. I'm guessing it's a site bug, so I was pointing out to the commenter that it didn't go through.

I really like the direction this is going. Making everything ever so slightly different from the show makes it so much more interesting in my opinion.

I'm really curious what might be the consequences of her interaction with nightmare moon. It's never smart to mess with a dream master, next time the nightmare might not be as easy to overcome, but then again, nightmare moon might be limited to Glitter's own fears, and being without memories certainly would make it difficult.

What exactly is the "well established" check point?

"What do you mean?" I felt like I was missing something, but it probably wasn't important.

It probably is :moustache:

Don't question it, it's Pinkie, down that road leads to headaches and more voices in your head.

Sounds like a party :pinkiecrazy:

Comment posted by edgar_allan_pony deleted Feb 12th, 2020

Rather curious about the purpose of the timeskip. What from the first four chapters will become important later, that had to be shown in infancy, before the rest of the story?

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We kinda flip back and forth a bit.

I don't actually know why, it was just fun to write!

Pink pegasus stillborn activated with a soul transplant? This will be fun...

Interesting that her introspection takes the form of a psuedo personal assistant AI.
Nobody finds her reactions strange yet, perhaps the glow of relief has yet to wear off...

Heh. Was wondering when she'd realize what everything was made of.
The assistant has been traded for a snarky Jedi, just peachy...

Interesting, they don't have Cutie marks.!

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They don't? Huh, crap, forgot to put those in, I'll get on that soon.

Interesting way to hide her foreknowledge. Pinkie is playing along...

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It was just never noticed by the main character.

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Oh, then it might have been intentional, couldn't really say at this point, I wrote this month's ago.

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On that last part of your comment, yes she has direct access to the ruler of the nation, everypony does, its just she will have to wait in a line

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Then git to writing will ya?!

I know, I know, I'm not that selfish. Just picked this and Nightmare stories and I like them both. Hope you'll get back to them eventually.

You have replaced RD with OC, haven't you? At the start of this chapter I actually thought she'll replace Rarity and Pinkie or AJ end up secretly unicorn to keep the balance, but this may work even better.

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Nah, all mane six are still here, this is just pre cannon.

Unfortunetly, this story gas not stood the test of time with me.

I'm okay with the "past" chapters, but ill probably be rewriting the "present" chapters.

My co author is finnaly getting close to finishing retooling his OC, so this story might start moving forward!

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I just expected Dash to be there since she moved in not much later after Fluttershy in the show as I could recall and they were close friends while they lived in Cloudsdale. So, it surprised me that she wasn't mentioned in "present" chapter at all. You published only one, so it were too early for such guesses.

To be honest I'm more interested in "Time & a half" since I always liked HiE which end up as Nightmare Moon. Shame majority of them are short while long are on hiatus for years. So, I hope you get back to it first. XD

BTW, replace "didn't loose all of my" with "haven't lost all my" in the description when you get back to this story.

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Time and a Half is being worked on, the main problem is that I just got a job, and I'm only now finding out how little time that leaves me with to write and draw, do enjoyable things like that.

It's above 3k now, and I'm just letting my muse take the chapter as far as it will before editing and posting.

This is very interesting! I look forward to seeing the world you build.
As an odd little aside, "Noctís" is the name I use in my AU to refer to Sombra's tribe, omnivorous unicorns with a slightly curved horn. I never thought about a downturned horn, but it really suits Rarity! As does the unicorn greeting. Formal, yet adorable!

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Eheh, we've also got Sombra's tribe in here! My co author is using that for their main character, and their kinda uncharted of writing half of the twelve tribes info, so I'll be sure to point them out, as soon as the story it up!

On a side note, this chapter, along with other the two unlisted adult chapters, make me gag, so I'll be overhauling them.

They'll come up when this stories cover art, so, yeah.

oh hell, because the cloudwalking instinct wasn't ingrained in her mind she'll be able to enable/disable it once she learns how to do so... Possibly even control it so she can sink part-way into the clouds.

Which now makes me think of Sheldon from Big Bang Theory when he was in the ball pit swimming around and popping up at random. Except this time it'd be a cute little filly swimming through clouds and popping up at random lmao

Holy hell, eighteen year timeskip...

That kinda killed my enthusiasm for this story.


Edit:

We kinda flip back and forth a bit.

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Ah, alright... Well, guess I'll just wait for more chapters then

This is a very fun start for a story. I am definitely going to read this.

I would definitely like this story to keep going!!

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