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That was pretty damn cool. Not too sure about Twilight saying she was a deliquent but otherwise, this is one of the best slenderfics on this site. Probably because it doesn't insist on using its POV and retains a lot of ambiguity as to how much its stalking her.
Basically, this was good.
Not bad for a short story. I've always enjoyed the Slender Man myth and this was a good take on it. I do, however, feel that perhaps Twilight Sparkle wouldn't have gone out this way... but either way, I give it a thumbs up for good writing and for using Slender Man. :P
>>1071024 The book part I just created, as for Slendy, go to youtube, and look up these three people: Marble Hornets, Tribe Twelve, and Everymanhybrid. Everymanhybrid's videos are hard to keep track of, so go to the wiki to find out what order they go in. Have fun being scared!
>>1071094 That's my intentions when I write dark fics. I LOVE the feeling of mystery and grim vistas. I hate those pointless bloodshed stories, mine are strictly psychological, or at least leave room for hope. I'm glad you like it, you're not the first person who doesn't like dark stories to like mine. They're pretty light as far as grim dark go.
>>1071114 Have you seen Tribe Twelve's videos? He shoots Slendy with a 9mm. On Everymanhybrid, they run it down with a car, and Even tries to beat it with a baseball bat. If you haven't seen their videos you definetly should, they're far more badass than Marble Hornet's videos though all three of them are epic.
Well actually stuff within the ecosystems fight, Tant being the good critters and Shaen'Loke being the evil. Like Loke rats are basically supposed to be great viral and bacterial vectors, spreading diseases among humans. Tant, like Hustin (Imagine a wolf with bright red eyes) basically kill Loke and do other stuff as part of their biology. For example, a Loke tick infects humans with a disease. A Tant flower metabolizes a cure, and then a Tant bee goes to the flower and picks up the pollen with the antitoxin in it. The bee then stings people, curing them of the disease. As for the ocean, there is terrible stuff in the ocean. Shark Loke, Octopus Loke, Squid Loke, Deep Terrors (seven eyes on each side, looks like a sea slug and a kraken had babies) and Snakes (There is a more direct translation but I don't have it right now but they basically get impregnated by other species of Shaen, and then they wharf themselves on a beach to deposit the basic army of monsters.) You also got Metal Weavers, superhuman warriors with incredible powers, Shaen called Mron which are basically lizardmen with or without wings. Also terrible punishments like Contemplation (First and still used as a way to prevent certain Shaen'Woa, Shaen parasites, from reproducing to new host. Then it became a severe punishment. Imagine having your eyes, teeth, and limbs cut off. And being kept alive. That is Contemplation.)
Husked Man's Image for the cover. You may shit bricks.
Is but the husk of a man.Until you give it Shadow Blossom, it's basically sort of like a living zombie... only wants to eat live prey, stupid as hell and angry at almost everything. After Shadow Blossom, holy crap run. You can slay him if you touch him with metal touching something with a soul, and he'll barbecue.
Also, the Tant and the Shaen were created by powerful near godlike beings just to fight each other. Other Loke:
-Beetles with human skull-looking markings on their backs that scream like women when they die
-Carnivorous trees that ensnare their prey with great bloody fibrous tentacles.
-Vampires that spread disease and rape people.
-Pipers, things that eat filth and basically expel clouds of poisonous/disease causing gas through hollow bone spike on their backs.
-Shaen'Woa who turn their human host into a running machine that needs so much oxygen that when it assumes control it breaks the host's jaw and rips off its nose to allow more oxygen into the lungs.
>>1071289 Thank you!
>>1071303 I'm not the first one by far! Mine is just the first one not to use a narrative style.
>>1071300 I think if you do, it should wait until the site is back up so you can post a link to it. The storyline behind it sounds like it would be confusing without just explaining everything in the story.
Slendermane, Slendermane, all the foals tried to run
Slendermane, Slendermane, to him it's part of the fun!
Slendermane, Slendermane, dressed in darkest suit and tie
Slendermane, Slendermane, YOU MOST CERTAINLY WILL DIE!
(Creepy childish laughter that makes your scalp prickle) 
do not pursue me, do not look for me.
Image: http://content7.flixster.com/photo/13/98/21/13982137_gal.jpg
Nice story.
I'm not really looking to be terrified right now so can someone give me the lowdown on Slenderman and the book. Is it a "he comes for you after you read it and then you can't destroy it" thing?
And does anyone else think Slenderman sounds like the Silence from Doctor Who? Just saying.
>>1073063 Yeah, he's a scary mother fucker. I hope you enjoyed it though, creepiness and all!
>>1073220 Thanks Slender Mane!
>>1073797 Thanks Mister Man!
>>1073909 I might be making a sequel, it will be in the same kind of letter, diary, note format.
>>1074428 Yeah, I've noticed that most Slender Man fics are average, and I never imagined that this one would be this popular.
>>1074796 If I do another, it will by Luna's story.
Great story, Just wish I could read it better with my derped eyes.
Serious Answer: This was a wonderful story, I read it to my child (do not worry she actually enjoys these kinds of things) and we both loved it.
I really, really, really, really, hope you make a sequel about Luna like LiquidHobo said.
Okay, so this story wasn't meant to be a series, but I've decided to make this into a three part story. I've done the best I can to adapt it into a series format, and I hope you all enjoy! Pressure's on now
, I had no idea this would be so popular.
If I've made any mistakes, please let me know!
>>1076643 XD, yeah, the thing about Everymanhybrid, is that there is a lot more action. They attack Slendy with a bat, run him over, chase The Rake with knives and machetes, punch possesed people, do karate. It's pretty fucking badass. Scary as hell, but awsome.
Luna, kill that fucking son of a bitch once and for all. 
And now that I've said that, I really hope Slender Man doesn't come after me now.
>>1076908 I have, and I started playing right when they added the fucking fog. The most I've gotten is five. Also, Marble Hornets isn't the only Slender Man channel. There's also Everymanhybrid, and Tribe Twelve. If you watch Everymanybrid, go to their wiki, because their videos aren't numbered so it can be confusing.
>>1077294 There's only one more left.
>>1077016 I've done the same thing. When I was writing the second chapter of Aliens, I had just finished watching Marble Hornets, and Tribe Twelve, and I kept seeing shadows in the reflection of my soda can. After throwing it away, I would see them reflected in the phone screen. I said fuck it, and went to my bed, locked the door, and fell asleep with the light on. And there is NO shame in that when it comes to Slendy.
>>1077729 Right, I think I'm going to do the same thing because I swear to god man, I keep seeing a figure in the corner of my eye and every time I try to look at it, it disappears. 
Also, when do you think it's worse time to see Slender Man? When you're by yourself or when when there are other people around and you're the only person that can see him.
I see you manged to hit the spot here.
This much attention with about two thousand words. (Amazing words, if I may)
All I can say is:
Image: http://i.imgur.com/x5GwX.gifAnd I'm saying this as a fellow Slenderman fan (If you can call us "Fans") and a writer of a Slenderman story. Yours seemed to have something mine missed.
I'll be most excitedly waiting for more.
>>1079550 Thanks man! I think it might be the simplicity of it. It's a characters thoughts, emotions, and reactions being told out to explain a story, all in the past tense with no back story. I had no idea that it would be this popular, and I wrote it off the top of my head in about twenty minutes! Oh, and thanks for my first Gif!
Simplicity strikes again...
The curiosity of the mankind. The secret of success. And you managed to wake it up. I'd post that gif again if I just hadn't.
The best ideas are those that just pop into your head. My story was one of those, and I think I could consider it as a mental jackpot. At least in my standards.
But yours is reaching the borders of a physical one, total of 1,000 views. Best of luck for in achieveing that.
And you're very welcome. I have too much of those gif's, just lying around in the dark corners of my computer, waiting to be pulled out.
Keep writing, and you shall become something great!
>>1079661 About 90% of my story ideas are thought of when I'm listening to music. As for simplicity, my second actual novel's main characters are exteremly simple. They are two teenage siblings that have no education, and have lived their entire lives in the metro tunnels of London. It takes place roughly thirty five years after the end of the world. They're thought processes are complex, but dialouge and actions are simple. They are compulsive, hot headed, and fear the unknown. It's slow coming because I've never written characters like this, but it's one of my favorite pieces.
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