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Foal Star


Peace for Ukraine!

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This story is a sequel to Discord's mother comes to town


Fluttershy has been a draconequus for a year but she hasn't really used her chaos magic. This has caused an issue where now her chaos magic is bursting from her body and causing her to be more aggitated. After a few incidents where she unleashed her power Discord sends her to chaos therapy. In which he created a world for Fluttershy to unleash all her chaos magic without consequences and where she can learn to control her power. But will Fluttershy remain clam and sweet or will she turn into a mistress of chaos.

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 29 )

This looks interesting. I can't wait to see more.

Sharon roared in anger and shot magic at a Rainbow dash who was then turned into a giant scoop of blue colored ice cream in a glass bowl with caramel drizzle and rainbow sprinkles all over.

Who's Sharon?

:D BEST STORY EVER!!!! whats gonna happen next?!?

This chapter had me :rainbowlaugh: but also had me :rainbowhuh: but the update had me a whole lotta :pinkiehappy:

I know this is just a sim, but I don't think it'll be safe to bring Flutters back to original Ponyville anytime soon. :twilightoops:

I was actually hopping to see more baby Discord.

It feels like your underestimating Discord a little. he’s got way more experience then Shy.

good story so far. :yay:

Well, that escalated quickly. How is Discord getting out of this now?

I kinda want to see film and flam, and even blueblood relatively back to normal as well.

This chapter got interesting and weird quick :pinkiecrazy::pinkiehappy::twilightoops:

I was laughing quite hard throughout this chapter

Aww, I really liked this. Also? Are you doing those bonus chapters? If not, this fanfiction is pretty much complete.

I approve of the sadism in this chapter, yesss...

Okay. I appreciate you going for a plot twist.
But this doesn't make much sense.
Ponies would react more to seeing Blueblood zapped.
Celestia wouldn't be trigger happy before they'd actually done anything.


Gilda wouldn't randomly pop up out of nowhere and bad mouth Fluttershy for no reason whatsoever.
Mayor Mare wouldn't randomly declare war on rabbits.

Did you use AI to help write this?
"Discord stomped his claw" while he was a billy goat and had hooves.

Calling Fluttershy a pegasus while she hasn't been one for the entire story.

Repeating descriptions in place.

While the pacing feels all over the place. I want you to feel satisfaction at not only finishing a story, but finishing a SEQUEL, always a much harder challenge once the novelty wears off.

I was up till 5 AM reading your two stories, and then go back to reading them again when I got up back 5 hours later. You held my interest, congrats.

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Yeah these older stories might be rough thanks for reading.

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