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Jhoira


Time to write some fanfiction! Yay! If you have any thoughts comment! I find reading them fun!

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Rarity is very pleased when Applejack sends her a love letter, but when Sweetie Belle gets her hooves on it she is very unhappy, and Rarity discovers some things that make her unhappy as well.

I couldn't find the source of the picture, if you know it please tell.

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I reversed image searched it back to Texas Uber Alles Tumblr

He reblogs images, so it wouldn't be his.

But my internet is just slow, so from Texas you should be able to search through his Archive find the pic and see where he linked it from.

Hope that helped lol.

This was adorable.

Congrats! You get a like. Again...

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Huh, I tried a reverse image search and didn't get anything, I'll have to try again later, thanks.

This is cute. It could use a bit slower pacing and some cleaner grammar. It's quite nice otherwise!

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Hehe, well it wasn't meant to be long. And eh, grammar. :D I did write this after a sleepless night so I should probably go back over it some time.

A comedy of apples.

Rarity sat back, grinning from ear to ear after having read the beautiful love letter that Applejack had written just for her. She smiled and was considering how best to thank her marefriend when she heard an, "ooh! What's that?" Her eyes widened as the letter was enveloped in magic and started to escape her. Her hoof flew up but only managed to catch the very bottom edge of the letter, a small tearing sound and Rarity frowned as she came out with only a small sliver of the paper that said "jack" on it.

Needs capitalization there. Both stories do seem to have some grammar issues, all of them not that bad but improvable.
I'd try something like this: 'Rarity heard a reading sound and frowned as she only retained a small sliver...'

Rarity stared a before she started to run after her. "Oh dear oh dear oh dear..."

The 'a' could be removed.

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Hehe, yep, that was a mistake! But the other is just that I have an odd writing style. ^.^

You should try some of my others, these I really should go over and edit these old ones, my newer ones are better as they've actually received editing.

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