First? Good story!

>>10769841076984 Thanks!

Always up for a good Twilestia, well done!

On another note. Sequel. Now.

>>10770981077098

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Hoooo pony. This is gonna be interesting...

Im gonna kill you for that last line...

"Shouldn't you buy me dinner first?"

Most amusing.

>>10770171077017

I'm writing on a tablet, so imagine that picture with smoking a cigar, the word brilliant underneath. Okay?

Because that is what this is.

>>10771411077141 Yes, yes it will.

>>10771431077143 I *might*, key word *might* consider doing a sequel on what happens when she goes to Canterlot. It'll probably be a short story of a few chapters. I haven't decided yet, it'll depend on a lot of factors.

>>10771541077154 Indeed.

Yay, new book.

I just realized this thing is complete...what the heck,that last line didn't help either

Anyway,it was cute but this definitely felt like the first chapter of a bit longer story.

Clearly, any sequel should focus on Twilight's hunt for this tasty new book, and her fury at her mentor for lying to her about it! Manipulating her for tawdry ends! The shame!

This was a good first chapter for a longer story. As a stand-alone work though, it doesn't hold up. It's not just open ended, because that would imply an ending of some sort.

>>10772921077292>>10775521077552 I meant this story to be a prologue to all the Twilestia stories that start with Twilight getting a letter than Celestia wants her back in Canterlot. I never meant it to be a full story, though I am thinking about writing about what happens when she goes to Canterlot in a sequel. This was never meant to be a full fic.

What do you mean 'Luna had a lower rank than Celestia'?

Are they not sisters who rule equally?

>>10785801078580 Pertaining to the command over the Royal Guards. Even in the canon you can tell that Luna isn't exactly equal in all respects. As the pig from Animal Farm said "All animals are created equal, but some are more equal than others," sorry if I got it wrong.

awesome! love the last part with bibliophile-twilight

>>10771431077143

One chapter to rule them all. One chapter to find them. One chapter to bring them all and in FiMfiction bind them.

>>10788851078885

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why is it complete...it doesn't feel complete

>>10776551077655

Oh,I see...

"Yay, new book!" <- Cute as Hell!

Also, I hope you'll give this a sequel. Your writing is great, and I love the way you made Celestia react (RUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUN). You got me intrigued :D

there needs to be more of this.. I must know how this went Did they get together!?! arrgh you... you are too good to leave this at just this.

>>10788851078885

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I've been on the popular stories list for 20 hours!

>>10776551077655

'Never meant to be a full fic'

Thats what they aaaalll saaay.

'I never meant to kill the guy, I swear!

Or 'I never meant to steal the car! I just forgot to pay, is all'

You've done the crime,  and now you gotta do the tiem.

MOOOOAAAR PL000x!

>>10824451082445 Having a sequel to this is becoming more and more of a possibility.

>>10771761077176  Want more, please?

Hey that was pretty good.  I always enjoy Twilestia fics, as well as stories featuring plenty of interaction between the two royal sisters.  

I'm curious; did you try running it through a prereader first?  I ask because there were some minor grammar issues.  Nothing major--it was mostly just using a comma where perhaps a semi colon or period would have been better.  Also, in Celestia's letter it would either be "Dear Twilight Sparkle, my faithful student" or "My dear faithful student.."; otherwise it sounds kinda awkward.  But like I said it's mostly pretty minor.  You don't have to have a prereader, obviously; it's just an option, especially if grammar isn't really your thing (and trust me when I say it's definitely not my thing--I typically only notice mistakes when they mess with the flow of a sentence).  

But nice job and keep up the good work!

>>10833481083348

Special Thanks to: That_One_Brony, my awesome prereader!

>>10833751083375

I'm going to bed now.

One obvious typo i found:

She immediately knew where she was, the statue was kept right outside of the thrown room

Unless its a room where they throw stuff or something... sounds like a really interesting room :D

And the last sentence made me think of it turning into a rapefic

>>10849681084968 Well that's embarrassing.

Edit: I didn't read the whole comment. Last sentence; LOL.

And I want it now. Not tomorrow. Not after breakfast. Now!

Andy Dufresne is missing pony?

>>10852301085230 All we need is a giant poster of Rita Hayworth.

>>10852401085240

I mean, seriously, how often do you really look at a colt's horseshoes?

You can't end it there! That's just lazy writing!

>>10925081092508 To everypony asking for a sequel:

There will be a sequel, focusing on Twilight's adventure in going to Canterlot, how she deals with her mentor manipulating her, how she deals with the book being a lie, and whether Twilight reciprocates the feelings for her mentor. The title will be Where's My Book!. And the tags will be [Romance], [Slice of Life], and [Comedy]. And I will update the story with a link to the new story when it has been published.

why wasn't i informed about this? also, i'm curious about if this fic had... any help in the... "secret" part? *wink wink* lol. good read!

>>11084341108434 OMG I am so happy you like my story!

Edit: What do you mean by "Help", because I suck at interpreting people being subtle.

>>11085901108590meh, nothing. forget about it.

>>11086601108660 Tell me god damn it!!

>>10771201077120

yay.

One little typo:

>access its authenticity

I believe that should be "assess"

"Yay, new book. Yay, new book. Yay, new book!"

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>>11430571143057Can't see pic.