A/N:
Undergoing of a revive attempt, all chapters that haven't yet rewritten are unpublished and no longer unavailable. SteelHooves, officially now underway side by side with my other story here
I WAS suppose to be dead. But it seems fate has chosen me to live in a world where the war never happened. Why am I here or how did I get here is an answer I cannot answer nor it will be answered. After my death, I was dumbfounded as I am in the past and at the same time, different Equestria.
I don't know what happened, but maybe... just maybe. I can redeem my past self in this new and peaceful Equestria.
Chapters (1)
This is Interesting i will follow.
A couple of typos here and there, but otherwise well written.
Can‘t wait to see where this is going.
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Not bad, but there's a detail that confuses me a bit: why is Twilight described as a unicorn if just a few paragraphs before Applejack mentions her coronation?
Was that just a distraction or it was just Steelhooves not noticing her wings?
I don't think Twilight ever actually ascended in the timeline that Steelhooves remembers until after Little Pip managed to successfully separate her from Trixie - right before she died to a megaspell bomb (if I remember correctly).
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oooooh and just when i was thinking about alternate paths for FoEs story to take and you happend to have picked one of my favorite charicters...
[other ideas i had been thinking about were a 'what if' idea for the final battle with redeye where a twist of fate caused ole redeye to get what he wanted...just not in the way he wanted! ]
I've always been waiting for a story in which FoE characters go to our known timeline, and I hope this makes a trend.
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Thank you! Hope you're interested till the end.
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I don't have an Editor so I was worried if my grammar or something is messed up. English is not my primary
Thanks.
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Thanks!
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Whoops, I forgot about that. But then again, you gave me a Story Idea on the next chapter.
So yeah, unintentional story plot ideas.
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Yes, Twilight never did ascended in the original FoE.
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AND MORE THOU SHALT GET! After I'm done with my exam that is coming in two weeks that is.
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I know right? I was too, waiting for that kind of fic. But then again, I was inspired by this fic.
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I hoped that too.
Aand, sorry for the late reply. Been busy.
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theres one thats inverse to that one that started recently too where princess twilight, starlight glimer, and sunset shimer end up int he wasteland
its rated mature though so i think [not 100 percent sure] that im not allowed to link it
its called Fallout Equestria:Travel Through Dimension
I'll bet Twilight's gonna try something to pry Steelhooves' power armor offa him and just poke his body for sick research.
I like this.
Misses the point
Given the general appearance of ghouls, if Steel Hooves' actual appearance was ever revealed, the local ponies will most likely assume that he had been through a horrible (and possibly magical) fire. One that left him dependent on the armor he will not take off.
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He is fused to his armor, he cant be uncovered as a ghoul can he?
This is a really good start, im excited to see more
So, he's invited for lunch but due to him being a Canterlot Ghoul he's unable to eat (both because he doesn't need it and because the armor is fused to his body); wouldn't that make the Apple family suspicious or at least curious?
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If he's still a ghoul, the very fact that he can't take off his armor would probably make other ponies suspicious and eventually force him to reveal his past.
"What's not damaged?"
air conditioning is fully operational
you just started and you already put this on haitus?
what happend?
Luna's going to lose her lunch after watching Steelhooves' dreams.
I forgive you.
Loving the story keep up the amazing work
the great war refers to the apocalipsis , not the conventional war that preceded it
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"War never changes, princess. We just became better at killing."
I hope we'll see our favorite Ranger using his arsenal in the future
"Friendship is magic, but having a loaded grenade launcher never hurt either."
Don't forget to point out any errors you may or may not find.
And also, first.
Need.....moar...
I like it.
The chapter is not bad, but it feels a bit rushed. Furthermore, I think that Twilight's letter is a bit messy and confusing, which doesn't really fit her character. I suggest you to re-write it in a more linear and less convoluted way, maybe following the chronology of Twilight's interaction with Steelhooves (first meeting --> description of the stallion --> second meeting at the market -->final considerations/worries).
Shouldn't it be "our" subjects? I mean, they both rule Equestria.
I don't know, after talking about the destruction of their world in an alternate reality, I'd expect a more somber atmosphere. Plus, why didn't Celestia mention Twilight's letter?
You mean:
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Luna: "Wow, never mind he's an undead soldier whose body is literally fused with his power armor that comes from a grim-dark dystopian future, when he was alive he was really hot. I would totally bang him."
I'm pretty sure Steelhooves still has a body that looks like charred jerky underneath that power armor of his.
9307883 Hey man, thanks for pointing all that stuff out, I gotta agree; Inspiration Hype + Time Pressure are a recipe for a disaster. Should've known that, welp lesson learnt. I'm gonna blame my computer being broken because I have to go to a internet cafe and write there. And also my laptop is broken too so, horray for me.
Anyway, gonna rewrite it soon, and after that our Favorite Ranger is gonna hibernate for awhile because I'm going to move on to another story. In the meantime, I'll see you all later.
This one is for fun
Totally what I had in mind when I'm writing this in the attempt to eased the mood.
Anyway, most thing was changed now, hopefully its improved.
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stress can be an oddly powerful fuel for creativity, although - at least in my case - the result is often a crude draft that needs more work before it's ready.
Don't worry, I know the feeling. I often end up writing during my exam session too
The story per se is not bad, just remember: quality over quantity. It's better to take your time to adjust the various details rather than rushing to get the job done as soon as possible.
This story is good. However it feels a bit rushed especially with this chapter. There are quite a few spelling and grammar errors throughout the chapter. On a different note while I feel that the princesses reactions were believable I do find it a bit odd that Luna accepted his explanation so easily considering that there are vast differences between the fallout equestria timeline and the canon timeline. She first met him in his head. Wouldn’t she first think that he was simply insane and had concocted a elaborate fantasy. Wouldn’t she come to Ponyville at least to try and confirm his story by examining him and his impossibly advanced power armor before accepting his story hook, line, and sinker?
I don't know what's wrong, but I am kind of dumbfounded by the cancellation of the story.
Also Booooooo!
Why did you cancel this story?
And thus, to begin anew...
I really enjoyed this last time. Nice to see that you’ve given it another go.
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This was a result from a coin flip a few days back when contemplating which stories I would continue
Your Grammar could still use some work. You ocaisionally mix up „was“ and „were“, for example.
Other that that, it‘s nice to see that this story is back!
So i reckon steelhoves will have an appropiately emotinal response when meeting big mac this time
IT'S BACK!! I was so upset when this story was first cancelled, you have no idea how happy I am to see that you're giving this story another go!
you have my full attention.
So just like before....
Just the one chapter so far?
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The update on this story is postpone for a few while, until I got my bearing sorted, that is.
I'm focused on other stories currently.
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