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This story is a sequel to Rainbow Unicorns: Boast Blasters
A mysterious figure shows up in town, which leaves many of the local ponies frightened. The next day, after chasing the figure into The Everfree Forest, Rainbow and the others each wake up to find themselves changed in strange ways. Can the six of them find the figure and get her to remove their curse? Or will Rainbow and her friends be stuck changed this way forever?
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I LOVED the chat between Maud and Celestia in this prologue. The characterizations were wonderfully done and I really liked the little details about Maud knowing something about Magic Crystals that even Celestia didn't AND one of Pinkie and Maud's sisters being a bat pony. After all, depending on how much unusual blood is in the Pie family, it would mean Pinkie's being a unicorn while Maud is still an earth pony makes A LOT more sense .
I am definitely going to be looking forward to the story proper.
And I hope you and your family have a Happy Thanksgiving. :-D
Of course, if I remember correctly, Twilight Comet DID passingly mention Zecora back in "Griffon Grief" (I think that was the title of that particular "Rainbow Unicorns" story). I think it was when she was talking to Gilda about how the ponies of Ponyville don't have much experience dealing with other species. I'm paraphrasing (probably), but I'm pretty sure the line was something along the lines of "the closest thing they have seen to another species before Rainbow and Spike moved here is a zebra that they are all afraid of".
Of course, a possible line for later:
"That's the zebra I told you about, Rainbow. The zebra almost everyone in Ponyville is afraid of. I've never met her face-to-face, but I've also never seen her do anything evil enough to deserve the fear. So, until I see hard evidence that she is really up to something majorly bad, I'm going to give her the benefit of a doubt. Of course, I'm ALSO not going to intrude on her in the event that she just wants peace and quiet."
Okay, sorry about that. Got off on a tangent there for a second (sheepish grin).
Anyway, once more, Happy Thanksgiving to you and yours.
Oh boy.
How interesting.
This will be fun.
Nice chapter. I really enjoyed getting a new installment in this series. That said, I found one tiny part you may want to edit.
Unless the story's being told by the Prophets of Bajor, that should probably be deleted.
monotonous, perhaps?
I can't believe I read the entire series today.
Well, great job on the latest chapter of this story. I LOVED the scene with Spike and Rainbow after Spike's awkward moment of reflection concerning Twilight but before Zecora's arrival into town .
Rainbow: Seriously, girls? You weren't THIS afraid of Nightmare Moon.
Spike: OR the Ursa Minor.
Twilight (after freeing her mouth): Indeed. Yet you're racist enough to be afraid of a zebra?
Rarity: Excuse me?! Racist?!
Twilight: Yes. Racist. You're afraid of her JUST because she is different and that is being racist. We have no solid proof that she is doing anything evil and yet this entire town treats her like she is literally worse than Nightmare Moon!
Flowershy: She lives inside the Everfree. Even *I* only live NEAR it.
Rainbow: So? We have ventured into the Everfree a couple of times and came out all right.
Spike: Even those idiots Snips and Snails gone in there once and came out in one piece - barely.
Applejack: There is a HUGE difference between that and actually living there.
Okay. Sorry about that. Got off on a tangent again. Sincerest apologies.
Anyway, I will very certainly be looking forward to more of this.
Nice chapter. Look forward to the next one. That said, I found a couple minor things you may want to edit.
"Then".
And that should probably be "didn't".
You're nice.
She has a point.
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If you're asking if I meant that, no. Large amounts of the Equestrian government run fine without her. For instance, Ponyville has a Mayor who deals with local political matters, and we have seen delegates which indicate that most other towns have something similar. Chancellor Neighsay also demonstrates that she does not interfere with existing government institutions such as the E.E.A once they have been established. As such, while she does have some political obligations, a majority of Equestria's government takes care of itself, allowing her to focus on more immediate matters, and responsibilities as a teacher and principal.
All I can say is, great job on this latest chapter. The exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. I particularly liked Twilight's point out for Applejack falsely blaming Zecora for something that semi-regularly happens anyway , Twilight and Rainbow's argument concerning curses and Spike accompanying Apple Bloom on the attempt to talk to Zecora .
For Poison Joke Effects, Rarity, Applejack, Flowershy and Pinkie could have the same ones as in canon, with Rainbow either getting Twilight's canon effect or getting turned into a giant (as a reversal of Applejack's effect), but Twilight Comet, instead of getting Rainbow's canon effect, could either have her wings removed entirely (as a reference to her future Generation 5 counterpart being an Earth pony) or get turned into a stallion.
Of course, I can completely understand if you either don't like the idea or have another/better idea.
She isn't amused.
Even now she is having precisely NONE of this shit.
Priorities Rainbow Dash.
That sounds like an extraordinarily bad plan.
What do you think?
So similar curse to Twilight.
What.
Sounds about right.
I'd be laughing too, not gonna lie.
Excellent job on the exchange, characterizations and future chapter set-up in all the right places concerning Rainbow and Spike. Indeed, Spike DID have a good point about contacting Celestia and that was actually a creative twist on Rainbow's "Poison Joke" effect.
Rainbow: "Supernaturals"? Well, as much as I hate reading, this book MIGHT have something on curses that can give us a good clue as to what happened. (looks over the book) Really?! Nothing on ghosts, goblins or curses? Just a whole bunch of stuff on strange animals and plants. Twilight and Flowershy might like it though. (mockingly) Like this "Poison Joke" stuff. It is said to have unpredictable effects on ponies. (thinks for a second) Wait a minute?! Unpredictable effects?
Okay. Sorry about getting off on a tangent again.
I imagine.
Nice chapter as always. One minor thing.
Shouldn't that be a question mark?
Excellent job on (most) of the alterations to the "Poison Joke Effects" particularly Pinkie's "random sound effects" and Twilight's "backwards speak" . At any rate, the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. Of course, now I'm wondering what happened to Flowershy (as she is the only one of the affected who DIDN'T appear in this chapter), even if I know that is going to be answered in the next chapter .
At any rate, I DO have a possible idea for MUCH later in the series: Thorax actually left Chrysalis's hive two decades sooner than in canon and met Cadance shortly after she ascended. Over the years, the two became REALLY good friends, even to the point of eventually becoming lovers. Ultimately, Thorax gets MUCH stronger (not just from SHARING love with the Alicorn of Love herself, but also from learning to develop a backbone without losing the niceness). Of course, since the guards don't have any unicorns strong enough to cast force fields around an entire city in this universe AND they already know about the existence of Changelings (due to Thorax becoming a good friend of the court), that means the Royal Guards are FAR more on the alert here and Chrysalis will need to rely on a much sneakier approach when the "Canterlot Wedding" analogue in the "Rainbow Unicorn" universe rolls along. I mean, just because Shiny ends up with Luna in this universe doesn't mean Cadance doesn't deserve SOMEBODY good.
Unless, of course, you already have other/better plans for both Cadance AND Thorax (which, admittedly, is VERY possible).
At any rate, I will, obviously, be looking forward to more of this story.
That has to suck.
So, the Poison Joke made Fluttershy turn into the Chinese version of Winnie the Pooh in Kingdom Hearts III. Interesting. Also,
For some reason, this is the tune I picture coming from her.
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Those first few seconds, yeah.
VERY good work on this chapter (which, I figure, is either going to be the last, second-to-last or third-to-last). The exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up in all the right places. I LOVED the reveal of Flowershy's Poison Joke effect as well as Twilight's bits of "backwards speak humor" when she was celebrating being right AND the "Grammar Nazi" bit with Apple Bloom and how things actually went slightly more reasonably than they did in canon though the Mane Six are STILL going to need to help get the remaining ingredients for the antidote.
So, yes, I WILL look forward to the finale.
So... Limestone's a pegapony, isn't she?
Because at this point, every pony race needs to have a pie sister representative.
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That makes sense.
And it would ALSO make JUST as much sense for one of the Pie sisters' grandparents (either maiden OR paternal) to be a changeling (presumably from a DIFFERENT hive than the one Chrysalis ran). Having a grandparent capable of at least passing for any one of the pony tribes would go a long way toward explaining how each of the four Pie sisters could be a different pony race while still passing for semi-normal. In addition, Pinkie being a quarter changeling would also provide additional motivation for her usual behavior. After all, wouldn't you be more likely to earn positive emotions by being as fun-loving and helpful as possible? And being a quarter-changeling would also create additional justification for Pinkie's knack for making the impossible look easy (i.e. the more close friends she has, the stronger her magic is).
Okay. Sorry about that. My mind went off on a tangent again and I came up with a probably-pretty absurd theory.
Morons.
Right, unicorn. Forget that.
Sounds refreshing.
Backwards.
Indeed.
VERY good job on this chapter. Well, the general problem was fixed and all the work on the characterizations, exchanges and epilogue set-up are all well done in all the right places. I especially loved the lengths Rainbow went to in order to get the town to listen concerning Zecora.
Anyway, I am very certainly going to be looking forward to the true finale. :-D
So, was limestone always going to be a pegapony, or did my comment influence that choice?
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Since the beginning of the story. I ended up writing the story to completion before posting the first chapter.
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well... baby cakes suggest that racial traits can be inherited at least 6 generations back. Great-great-great grandfather. Pinkie just happens to not have a family tree as much a family kudzu.
Excellent job on this epilogue chapter. :-D I LOVED the check-up on Shiny, Luna and Pinkie's sisters. The exchanges, characterizations and future story set-up are all well done in all the right places (particularly the scene between Marble and Limestone when Marble announced her decision to join Luna's new guard).
So, yes, I WILL very certainly be looking forward to more from this universe (as well as the Shinyverse, but that's another matter).
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Yeah. I suppose you have a good point about THAT. Thanks very much for pointing that out.
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to be fair, there is nothing (apart from future author fiat) that Pinkie doesn't have changeling ancestry... or kirin... or just about anything.
Ballsy move.
I would imagine.
She KNOWS.
Or not.
So, does the poison joke turn Blueblood into Bluebelle?
VERY good job on the final chapter. The exchange between Celestia and Blueblood was really good. And, I must admit, I DID get a laugh from seeing Blueblood catch a whiff of the Poison Joke and Celestia struggling to recall the name of the flower .
All in all, very good job on the story (INCLUDING the epilogue) and I will definitely be looking forward to more of your work.
BWAHAHAHAH!! That's GENIUS!!!
Great story. Shame we haven’t gotten anything else relating to this AU. I’d love to see more.