In the wake of her coronation, Twilight Sparkle worries that the tides of life and responsibility are pulling her away from her friends.
All in all, it's not the ideal time for a mysterious force to suck all the colors from Ponyville.
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A Man Called Horse
Ceci n'est pas un poney.
A Man Called Horse
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This is real neat. Well-paced. Strong voice. Doesn't have that fanfiction feel to it. Interesting premise with good execution. I want this to get a lot of notice.
Why aren't there any genre tags?
There's a real tight story being told here -- I can guess at the shape of some of the pieces, but have only a faint idea of the big picture. Really intriguing, mysterious stuff. All these little side details, I get the feeling won't be just background colour (ha ha!), since there's already been so many little seeds called back to. You just don't see that in fanfiction, since so many authors wing their multi-chapter stories and many others don't have the skill to be subtle about their future plans, but yet here we are. There's real craftsmanship here; looks like a fun ride ahead.
Hm. Description and comments are intriguing. To the Read Later list this goes!
This is way way way more compelling than Discord's nonsense episode.
All right, that's it!! Off the Read Later list, onto the Favorites! I love stories where my favorite characters remember who they really are! /)
Seriously, why does this story not have more views and thumbs up? It's fantastic!
Wonderful story. And Celestia's conclusion about Twilight makes me even gladder that I favorited it.
Thank you for writing it. 
Absolutely perfect, refreshingly original. I knew I wouldn't be disappointed at all with where this story was going to go. Brilliant use of the blank spaces and disembodies voices talking in the void, fancy tricks one can use outside of a real book thanks to technology that are too often misused, but here were thematically appropriate and remarkably effective, especially the chilling 'nothingness' just before Twilight wakes up. This is one of the best stories on this site, and I don't say that lightly.
a beautifully crafted story, and a wonderful concept. Aces Perfect to this one
A universe of magic that still has black holes... very odd.
What came first:
The magic that connected the elements or the elements that formed the magic?
The answer is, of course, 'Yes!'.
This should be far more well known than it is. The plotline is great, the descriptions vivid and the consistent references to both previous points in the story and episodes in the canon series makes for a believable and consistent plot. The attention to detail on aspects of the characters- for instance, Pinkie's mane, gives you a pretty good idea of how everypony is feeling without outright telling us, which I always appreciate. The story was original and intriguing, and I like how the ending actually makes sense- too often a story just ends off illogically without any real sense to it, making the reader feel as if it was just made to plunge the ponies into a situation outside of their comfort zone. I appreciate how you've put some real effort into making this story tie together, and the last chapter, which is so often the worst of the lot, was actually my favourite in this case. The use of colour and spaces helps the reader really get into the story, while still being with purpose- the story doesn't just have colour for the sake of having colour. There are a few minor spelling and grammar mistakes, as well as a couple of words missing, most of which are probably just the result of editing afterwards, but nothing that detracts too greatly from the story and most can simply be fixed by proofreading afterwards. The description was great, especially during Twilight's dream, and the attention to detail allowed the reader to get really into the story. Though it wasn't as vivid as some books I've read, this actually served this story in a positive way, allowing the reader some room to make their own judgement as to what the setting may look like. I personally loved this, and would highly recommend it to anyone wanting a good, satisfying read that'll hit you right in the feels.
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So, I just stumbled upon this story today. As of this comment, I have not yet read it, but there is something I would like to say. Please keep in mind that I've only read the description and comments so far:
SON OF A!!!
As anyone who might visit my profile would probably notice, I do not currently have any stories posted. I did, however, have an idea floating around in my head that was extremely similar to the same premise as this. Now I probably won't even bother, because if the comments here are anything to go by, this is vastly superior to anything that my own lackluster imagination could ever conceive. Now I know how other people probably feel when they find out that their own story idea has already been done...
You will likely hear from me again, once I manage to find some time to read this story and post my thoughts. Pinkie Promise.
(I might even try to think of something to say for each individual chapter...)
Despite my slight outrage just a moment ago, I am certain that I will enjoy this this story.
Hey, I just posted a review for this fic. In case you are interested, it can be found here.
Overall, I was very pleasantly surprised by this story. It is unique and intelligent, and despite having some issues with how the plot progress, I found it a very good read. Also, the writing is excellent.
This was very enjoyable and very different from most stories on this site. You should be commended. I like how you tie everything together and how we have to tales of discovery and that those two also tie together. Very effective.
I especially like the scenes with Pinkie and Rainbow Dash as they are fairly emotional.
I love this scene with Pinkie and Rainbow Dash. It has a lot of emotion and I like how Pinkie tells Dash how she is inspired by her and that Dash also inspires others.
It is totally just my brain putting in pieces that are probably not there but it seemed that those two have quite a connection going on in this story and Pinkie seemed very distraught that Dash left (more so than I think she would). It would make me wonder if there was something going on behind the scenes or if Pinkie wanted there to be something. Once again probably just me but either way I really like dynamic.
Also this chapter alone has made me favorite this story though the other chapters are really great too. Thank goodness I read that site review so I could find this. You write really well and I will check out any other materials you may write or will write.
Well, at least everpony will still recognise Zecora.
Wow, that delivery. I wasn't sure where the story was going, but I read that line:
and everything just fell into place. Bravo.
Nice work, this could be a canon episode.
The lack of genre tags is probably one reason this story is not better known -- these days it would be tagged [Mystery], I'm sure. For most of its length, I really enjoyed this fic: it's nicely paced and uses its characters in a satisfying way. The Lyra sub-plot is a lot of fun and you have some great turns of phrase -- "theater of unease", for example. It's an easy like, and misses a fave simply because I didn't like the last chapter as much. I found that considerably overlong, and the coloured text annoyed me as well. Nevertheless, an interesting take on the importance of colour to Equestria.
I'm well and truly and hooked now, both for the mystery and the interpersonal drama.
One bit that looks like a possible mistake:
Green light? If that was intentional -- because the connection to Canterlot means that magic wasn’t affected by whatever made Ponyville grayscale? -- I'd expect somepony to comment on that solitary spot of color.
I'm guessing it was "[...] at least..."
This story was so beautifully well-balanced, it feels like it could've been its own 60-minute special following the end of Season 3! I feel this deserves so much more love and attention than what it currently has..