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Twilight Velvet has never really understood her daughter-in-law. Princess of Love? That seems a little shallow, even to a secret romance novelist. So when they end up sharing a train to the Crystal Empire for Hearth's Warming, things are a little bit awkward. When the journey is faced with disasters natural and supernatural, their fragile relationship will be tested to its breaking point.
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Or to sum up Cadance's real problem with Twilight, and Celestia and Luna for that matter even if she doesn't say it:
She's jealous. Jealous of the fact that they actually contribute something to the world while she, doesn't add a damn thing.
Not that I hate her character. But that's what I got from that rant.
I'm going to guess that Straight Whiskey is Hemingway. Four Legs Good has presumably written at least one story whose protagonist was named Boxer.
In any case, wonderful character piece for both leading ladies. I especially love the editing spell. It's basically just magical cut-and-paste, but it's presented in an awesome and suitably arcane way. It's like Sunset Shimmer's journal; yes, it's effectively magical SMS, but it's really cool magical SMS. Plus, I'm a sucker for anything involving higher dimensions.
Thank you for this.
I have two questions. What exactly did Cadance do to tell the station to hold the train?
...And what was the bit with the diamond dogs?!
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Yes, they do contribute something to the world: countless mistakes and screw-ups they keep dumping on someone else to take care of because they're too incompetent to do it themselves.
And she's totally added something! Her baby, the Destroyer of Worlds.
When you know shit's getting serious.
Telepathy to station master.
Nothing I can talk about in the comments section of an e-rated fic.
Maybe I'll write the scene some time.
This is a terrific story! I loved the interaction between these two and it was a different take on how I thought their relationship would be, which made it even more interesting and enjoyable.
Their mutual revelations at different parts in this tale made them more relatable and real, as well. Coming together during the battle with the space tear was awesome!
I'm sure it'll be a knotty situation.
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You get the idea. :D
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Nailed it.
Oh, me too! That and trips to the pony realm of the dead.
I like it weird, and I like it morbid.
Thank you for liking it!
Honored by your presence in my comments section!
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Thank you so much! And thank you for your help on it!
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It was very much an honor and my pleasure!
I warned you I was going to do this.
You know what that is? That's a bolt-on.
So, teleporting without cleaning up behind yourself rips holes in space-time and summons the Great Old Ones. There's just one problem: either Equestria should have been eaten by Cthulhu long before now, or sompony already knows how to prevent this and they've been sleeping on the job.
It sounds like Starswirl invented teleportation. Unless he got it perfectly right the first time, he made a few wrinkles along his high-traffic routes, and had to figure out how to clean it up. Even if he didn't, I can't believe no enterprising young foals have ever figured out how to make a cut-rate version, and left a mess everywhere. So somepony, sometime, had to take notice that things need untangling every so often. Either that, or somepony was making damned sure the foals never tried that shit again.
Case A: there's a bunch of unicorns somewhere, probably in the Principality Transit Authority, who are supposed to be straightening out spacetime every so often. They didn't do it. If things are bad enough that the Crystal Empire - Canterlot hyperspace corridor is fucked, things have well and truly gotten out of control. They need to be sacked, and probably brought up on charges.
Case B: there's a bunch of ponies somewhere, probably in some Guard formation which Doesn't Exist, who are supposed to be keeping ponies from doing shoddy spellwork that puts Equestria in danger. First they try talking to ponies, telling them that they're messing with things they don't understand, and if they don't forget all about that spell, something bad is likely to happen. If that doesn't work, they're exceedingly likely to slip in the shower and break their neck. Tragic, really. If the Guard doesn't catch them in time, well, that crater where a town used to be was probably caused by some beast breaking out of Tartarus again. No such thing as Great Old Ones. Don't ask questions. Nothing to see here. Anyway, whoever was in charge of cracking down on unlicensed teleports is probably in a shallow grave in the Everfree right now. Hopefully her successor will do a better job.
[Yes, that's the ponified Monster Control Bureau from the Monster Hunter International books. Shoot me. They're fun.]
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Curses I didn't believe you.
But the reason this hasn't happened before...
Wait, it happens so often in my stories it occurs in porn. For slightly different reasons, but still. As bolt-ons go this is like the Lego space ship wing; I use it on everything. It just happens rarely enough that local authorities are able to deal with it. Because the hyperspace monsters aren't Great Old Ones; they're more like scavengers. Very big scary scavengers. I world built them a lot in Life After the Blitz.
Anyway, the 'home brew teleport spells' thing didn't happen until now for the same reason we didn't have steam engines in 1 AD: because it didn't occur to anyone to use the technology for something besides toys. It just didn't occur to ponies to start playing with super powerful spells until Twilight Sparkle's 'I don't give a shit let's take this apart and see how it works' attitude became fashionable. A paradigm shift is what I'm talking about here.
Anyway this is all a 7 AM ass pull and I should have actually read that essay you linked to. Am I getting to the point in my fanfic where I need some detailed world building docs? IDK; that shit's boring. But maybe.
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Because this is neither the time nor the place, I'll refrain from continuing a debate on this and arguing why this isn't remotely the same thing, and I'll instead go with "because the author said so, that's why". But that's totally an ass-pull.
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I freely admit I have no idea what I'm doing.
Democracy in my Equestria?!?! More likely then you think!
Though that spartan society reference is top notch. Although i would say its more the fact that they used their wealth to influence decisions.
Whelp, another Outer God taking an interest in the planet now. How fun.
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Technically (I’m going to say that now; it’s so me irl) it was the Theban Band not the Spartans.
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I meant the
That totally sounded like a reference to Sparta and its system of women inheriting the mens wealth on their death. (though much of what we know about their system comes from biased anti spartan sources and guesswork).
There was a group of the wealthiest spartan women who probably had some influence on politics. But politics itself was still a "strictly" male thing even then.
Wealth can get you only so much without direct influence.
What a wonderful story! I loved the characterization work here, as well as how Velvet and Cadence bounced off each other. The little bits of magic world building were also really inspired.
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Thank you so much!!
Mother of whores! XD
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Thanks for the review! It has helpful feedback.
she can tho, there was no specification as to how far teleportation can go. twilight can teleport through equestria at breakneck speed with relative ease and so can her UNICORN pupil starlight.
cadence is the ALICORN of love and light, only outmatched in terms of magic by celestia. and even then we dont know the true extent of her power. there are plenty of things we can bring up to prove this however.
all in all i dont really get why you put that in. wouldve been better if it wasnt brought up
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Clears throat.
Points hoof at this:
Really, darling, I appreciate the attempt at constructive criticism, but do try to keep up.
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oof, sorry 👉👈
ty for the response tho
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NP! Sorry if I was too rude, I get like that sometimes.
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no its fine ❤