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When they were fillies, Applejack was a lone farmer and Pinkie Pie was a party animal, and that was the unlikely beginning of a rocky but fruitful friendship. Yet as both ponies will soon discover, there's a little play in the work and a little work in the play.
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Very cute and well-written, with great characterisation and a convincing storyline. Great work all-in-all.
Excellent; I think this is your best story yet. You really got the young/playful innocent feeling just right.
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Such great, encouraging feedback! Thank you all very much for your positive comments. You've made my day.
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Oh, that was fantastic! You really got Pinkie spot on, and AJ reacted to everything so well... Good job. Very good job.
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Thank you very much for the nice comment!
In particular, I'm glad you complimented my portrayal of Pinkie Pie, 'cause she was a tough one for me. I wanted to capture her cheerfully innocent whirlwind personality (especially when she's at the party) and fashion some unhappy and morally uncertain conflict out of it (the secret revealed in the last chapter). Apart from its comparison with AJ's leaving the farm, having Pinkie run away from home to better express herself seemed a good compromise, as I could easily imagine her doing it less out of selfishness and more out of a childlike failure to fully think through the consequences.
Thanks again!
My God, this sounds adorable. Will read.
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Thanks! I hope you enjoy it!
This story reaches dangerous levels of under-appreciation...
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It's very kind of you to say so. I'm glad you liked it.
This is a slice of life story in its purest form.
I could picture the characters voices in my head as if this was an episode.
Great Job! This story great!
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This sort of comment is music to my ears. High praise indeed! Thank you very much for the compliment.
This is great. You set up a wonderfully homey slice-of-life scenario, which makes the seriousness of Pinkie’s secret all the more surprising. I especially like the bit where AJ calls on her Manehattan manners when she apologizes--I don’t recall seeing that in any other fics, but it makes perfect sense here.
I feel like the bit about the "Spirit of the Sands" flew right over my head. Is that a reference to some other story?
My only criticism is that your writing for AJ's accent leaned harder on eye dialect than I prefer. I know the right way to do it is debatable, but I think rendering "What do you mean" as "What d’yer mean" is a bridge too far.
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The Spirit of the Sands isn't a reference to anything, or at least it's not one I made consciously. It was another figment of Applejack's imagination, suggestive of a much broader mythology she's thought up for herself than "I'm a sheriff and I beat up bad guys". Considering her "wild west" leanings and the magical nature of Equestria, it seemed an appropriate little detail to add in.
As for the accent, I can only say mea culpa. The pre-reader pretty much said the same thing. Especially in a fic that features accent-swapping, I wanted to make the slang country mode distinct from the prim-and-proper Manehattan mode, and erred on the side of exaggeration (that said, "d'yer" seems OK to me, as I can easily match how it should sound to how it's spelled). Still, I'll have another look here and tone a few of those down; I did edit them once, but a few others must've slipped through my last round!
I was right, this was adorable. Thanks for writing. :)
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And thank you for the comment.
Always a delight to see people enjoy my efforts.
It's cute how AJ made apple-bucking a game. Then Ponks had to go and point it out.
That was sweet.
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Thanks for the comments.
(Even if I don't usually expect any for my older fics anymore... 
I honestly just forget about them over time.)
really adorable start to the story hehe
cuteness overload bzzt Does not compute