Confused On Why Scootaloo is mad and distant, Applebloom reads through her own diary to see if she can piece together why Scootaloo may be upset.
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At first I thought, "perhaps she's upset at Apple Bloom because Apple Bloom is the kind of friend who reads her friends' diaries without permission," but it seems I misread that "her" and assumed it was the wrong girl.
About the story itself:
First, it threw me off badly when even Apple Bloom's diary was written out in a thick and over-the-top accent. More importantly, though, I feel there just wasn't enough meat on this story's bones to give it any real impact. Three diary entries and a small amount of Apple Bloom's bitterness and curiosity weren't enough to make the reader care about the ending—which, I think, needed to be more than those few lines long.
It wasn't bad enough to downvote, but it needs a lot more substance to be an interesting story.
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Thank you. I will go do that. I appreciate the advice :D
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I plan to make a prequel of this where it's Scootaloo reading her own diary instead of Applebloom reading her own diary. More of the story will be explained there. I do appreciate the advice though :D