This story is a sequel to What Mistakes Tell Us
The Dazzlings are caught in a fearsome blizzard while dealing with a terrible illness. They try to reach their house, but the harsh elements and poor health cause them to faint in the snow.
It would have been the end of their story. But, fate had other plans, which involved people that, under normal circumstances, they would have avoided as much as possible.
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Cover Image: By MintyDreams7
Current Spot in the Friendship is Worth It Timeline:
When Life Gives You Snow...
Holidays Unwrapped
The Hearth-Warmers of Canterlot High
Spring Surprises
Chapters (7)
Where can I read Holidays Unwrapped and Spring Surprises?
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Holidays Unwrapped is the last Equestria Girls shorts collection from Hasbro (before they canceled Season 3 to make way for G5).
As for Spring Surprises, I updated the description to provide a link to that tale. Thank you!
Why do I have a feeling this is hinting at a certain winter special?
Agreed. There was a lot to work around the Movie Club premise. EqG in general could've made great use of more attention.
Very much enjoyed this chapter, it was a lot of fun. Love that they're being drawn together organically if only because of rivalry. It's quite believable. Love Sonata's characterization the most so far.
Thankfully I finally found the time to read your story Gj, and it's lovely. I adore stories that promote "goodness of the heart" so this has been exactly down my alley. And your writing, grammar, and syntax are all really clean and wonderful to read too.
Entirely criminal that it's flown underneath people's radar. Likely just due to optics and metrics, like maximizing exposure by parcing your chapters out slowly and things like having a striking cover art. If I'm not wrong, the story released with a few chapters already written right?
Regardless of how you choose to promote your story, I'm thankful I've gotten to read it. It won't affect things almost at all since I myself don't have a lot of followers, but I'll be sure to showcase it on my user page in case someone does manage to stumble upon it. And I already forsee myself elevating it to my library of golden standards once it's done or has more chapters under its belt. Again, great stuff! Looking to find out more since I'm practically blind for EqG on specials and comic related things so Adiago and her sisters are basically new to me, but that just adds to the fun so far.
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Thank you so much for the review!
I am glad you are enjoying the story, particularly how The Dazzlings are handled, given the premise of the story being what it is. I have A LOT to say about it as well (come on, I'm writing it!), but I'll wait until it is finished before I give all of my thoughts.
I will say this much though, before the end:
I am SUPER glad (or totes glad, as Sonata would put it) that the relationship between the CMCs and The Dazzlings is coming off as organic so far. The last thing I want is to make it come off as unnaturally forced. That has been hard to pull off, since we are dealing with two trios that could not be more different from each other!
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Yeah, I started off with three chapters already written. I initially wanted to post the whole thing in time for Christmas, but I didn't want to rush through the story just to make that deadline.
Also, the fact that the brony who brought Chrys into the fandom has enjoyed my work makes me mighty happy!
That was a good story goodluck with the rest of it.
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Aw shucks, that's quite the compliment! I write my stories with the express purpose of imparting something to others. Whether that be a message or maybe just the feeling of joy, if someone can gleam something from my work, I'm happy. If nothing else, I'm very grateful that you hold me and my opinion in high regard, especially since what I said can be seen as surface-level blanket statements. But I really do mean it! I quite like When Life Gives You Snow. I should also mention I enjoyed the short Heart-Warmers of Canterlot High, and I have yet to find the time to sit down and read Spring Surprises, but now I definitely need to elevate that in my free-time tasks thanks to this one.
Since I don't know the Sirens very well, I can't comment too much about story-specific things without feeling like I might make a fool of myself. Though so far, I'm enjoying the interesting dynamic between them. They remind me a bit of Paper Mario: The Thousand Year Door's Siren sisters, if they were in some universe were the other two had a bit more affection for their younger sibling. Which I'm all for, 100%.
But what I can comment on is your writing style, since I have nothing but good things to say. Reading through your story, you actually surprised me a number of times with your verbiage, choice of words, and phrases. Nothing is repetitive. No high-vocabulary words seem out of place and can be easily deciphered with contextual clues for younger audiences. And your narrative and dialogue flows smoothly and naturally. It seems like the work of a long-time author! I should know, I used to write professionally for a living once upon a time.
I often talk about what constitutes a good rated E story, since I'm a firm believer that there's an incredible art in the making of. I would call this story so far a prime example of that. To make decency, love, and the goodness of the heart the epitome of a story's message without hamfisting it or making it seem overly childish, yet remaining accessible and enjoyable to every age takes real skill.
This is getting a little long and for the sake of not flooding your comment section, the last thing I wanted to mention is that I wholly think your writing is above mine. I've been pampered by professional editors and proof readers for my real work far too long over this last decade, so my skills have definitely waned. It's probably a bias since one can get tired of their own writing style, but I definitely think so. Anywho, looking forward to reading more of your stuff, GJ!
It’s quite the lovely song. Davy Jones is definitely one of the best characters in the Pirates films. My favorite is still Jack, but because of deep-lore like that whole bit about his soul being worth several hundred souls to Davy, due to him releasing hundreds of slaves and becoming a pirate because he wouldn’t, by any means, sell slaves. There’s a deleted scene in the movies that has him saying “People aren’t cargo, mate” I think too, which adds to that notion.
If all of that is true, that drunken veneer of his that can be seen giving way to moments of heart and self-sacrifice at times are all part of his hidden morality. It’s understandable why they didn’t mention anything about slavery due to it being a Disney film, but it would’ve been such wonderful extra layer to Jack’s character. For a movie series originally meant for kids, the producers made something truly amazing.
Anywho, wonderful chapter GJ. I liked that little ringtone gag. And also that part where Sweetie Belle gets to see Rarity again. It’s nice to think that she really loves her sister.
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Yes indeed, Sweetie Belle has TONS of love for Rarity!
I also see that, you, too, are a brony of culture when it comes to films!
Seriously though, I'm glad you are also a fan of the Pirates films. The CMCs would be hugging you for that! I think Apple Bloom would agree with your take on Jack Sparrow (and gush over his choice to save those slaves while she's at it).
As for her fascination with Davy Jones, let's just say that Apple Bloom got her love for layered characters from somewhere and leave it at that for now.
Yes, that song of his is a BANGER!
That was a good chapter.
That was a good story goodluck with whatever you write next.
Sonata is the best. Loved every interaction with her. Sometimes, it takes an unrelenting well of positivity to make us see the most important things in life. Also, love the set up for the future! Unlikely allies. Definitely hoping to read more of the siren sisters.
Wonderful story, GJ. I really gotta sit down and read the new chapters of Spring Surprises next!
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Thank you, pal! I'm glad you enjoyed the story!
The relationship between the CMCs and The Dazzlings is the very definition of unlikely, which made putting them together in one place a fun scenario to write for.
As for that set up: oh man, do I have plans for these girls!
I look forward to seeing your thoughts on Spring Surprises!
soon..." Adagio*
"No!" She*
Sirens!*
and-"*
us!" She*
Everything will die one day, even you three.
fool..." she*
storm-"*
Sonata!" She*
Sparkle," was*
they're-"*
fine," Sci-Twi*
done?" She*
wrong" Adagio*
"But wh-"*
Because you three needed help. You might've caused trouble for CHS, it wouldn't seem right to let you suffer.
us..." she*
horrible!" Cried*
We get it Sonata...
You'll likely be sick again numerous times for the rest of your life.
You and me both.
Counterpart, Adagio, not her twin.
means...!" Adagio*
bas-"*
can," she*
they-"*
need," she*
one." Adagio*
you-"*
quickly got each of the sisters*
Seriously Twi, you didn't think this though.
more!" She*
friendly..."*
You might change your mind on the friend part.
crazy." Aria*
Dagi?" Aria*
we?" She*
lead," was*
club..." Adagio*
times..." noted*
That was my guess, lol!
money!" Aria*
before..." noted*
veggies !" She*
detail..." she*
nicely," she*
answers," she*
milk!" Apple*
you!" She*
it," she*
never..." Adagio*
up..." noted*
There's clearly more they're not telling them, that's for sure.
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Given who the CMCs are talking with, it makes sense for them to keep some things close to the chest.
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touché
darling!" Exclaimed*
well..." she*
y'all." She*
her!" Apple*
impressed," she*
Siren-cicles!" She*
What?!?
time..." Aria*
They're-"*
Not really. Sometimes there isn't one.
sense," Adagio*
even-"*
that!" Adagio*
She then answered*
Showtime-"*
Disney+!" Exclaimed*
I know the feeling. I can't stand that song!!!
know..." Apple*
Same here AB.
here!" She*
catch!" Adagio*
interested," Aria*
Chest!" Yelled*
End!" Aria*
"NO!" Cried*
movie..." noted*
bad..." Sweetie*
medallion," stated Elizabeth.*
gold..." responded*
Time Turner?
villain!" She*
Sonata..." was*
"Indeed?" She*
impressed," the*
LIVES!!!!" She*
She named it!?!
soon..." Adagio*
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Time Twirler! I meant to say Time Twirler! Let me fix that!
EDIT: Annnd fixed!
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ohhhhhh.
Damn it Sonata!
wor-"*
Thx captain obvious.
singing!" She*
Everyone has*
be," she*
hoooooome!" Declared*
Technically 7, Adagio, Sci Twi has powers too you know.
QUARTZ!" She*
gasp at the smell she had discovered.*
key," Sonata*
tacos..."7 she*
simetimes!" Adagio*
Sci Twi does have powers Adagio.
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The Sirens, at this point, don't know about Sci-Twi's magic. I don't think she ever used it in front of them in the show, actually.
together!" She*
dar-" was*
human?" She*
that," Adagio*
not." She*
look on utter seriousness on her face,*
wouldn't mean eating with THEM!" She*
eat," she*
Just be happy you tried one.
Ok?
closely. As they did this, Pinkie asked them*
lmao!
Oh?
carin'," was*
Mistakes aside, I really enjoyed this. Probably give it a 9/10.
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She didn't.