" Greater love hath no man than this, that he lay down his life for his friends. "- ainz ooal gown
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Nice grammar, kid.
Yeah I am not the best speller and with grammer. i am just glad i get a story out and it makes me happy even if it is hated i still love it no matter what :).
alright, I fixed the grammar I hope its all alright. also if anyone would like to ask questions about this story I would be happy to answer. :)
Liking the story so far, bits of grammar and missing commas and periods, but for the most part enjoyable. Keep it up.
Added this to my reading list.
Interesting story I like it
I feel like I've seen the artwork before?
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where have you seen it my friend?
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I do not remember
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Ah
Dumpster fire.
Wow, okay, good story. If I may, I would want to point out things that could possibly help with your writing in the future.
Remember; new character, new paragraph. Always have some space between whenever a character is speaking or the story goes on to describe a different character to the one before. I'll put NP, which stands for New Paragraph when it's nessasary. For example:
Notes:
1. New paragraph for whenever it talks about a new character (wherever they're talking or it's a description of someone), a new topic, time and place.
2. Names always have capital letters, including titles. For example: Princess Celestia.
3. You always clap your hands together.
But the story overall is really good and interesting. I wish you well on your future projects. Stay awesome.
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thank you and i do wish to make progress any help is alright even notes if i got the characters right so anything helps :twilight smile:
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Always happy to help, hun! *boops*
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yeah, my friend helped me make that. its Fear before he transforms into his newer form