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  • E When The Field Becomes Fallow

    I love my brother. I know lesser mares would've quit by now. When he boarded that train to the changeling territory, he was still Macintosh. When he came back he was still the same, but... different.
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  • T A Pony Walks Into A Bar...

    A Ponyville bartender tends to the booze-related needs of Ponyville seven nights a week.
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  • E Birthday Wish

    Scootaloo just wants one thing for her birthday; something Rainbow is determined to make happen.
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  • T As The Songbird Sings

    Not even 40,000 leagues can stop the Songbird's drive to protect. Except, perhaps, the Lutece twins.
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  • 5w, 6d
    Watch movie, write ponies.

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  • 7w, 2d
    Previews of my next updates!

    Why haven't I written anything, you ask? But I have! I updated a story followed by a whopping 73 people!

    *sigh*

    And I have added to some fic updates, such as Mac Unhitched and Regression, and even a little bit of pony bar time!

    But, real life work is taking all my time.

    I'm sorry guys, I really am.

    It seems like I've just got so much going on right now. Like I went from 0-60 in under a few days time.

    I'm not quitting, or anything like that, but, I figure I'd let you know the progress on some of the things I've been working on.

    Hell, I'll even include a preview or two!

    As the Songbird Sings:

    The Monster From the Forest

    "Call for backup immediately! Get the entire division down here, now!" Sargent Shield said, rushing out the door, brandishing his spear as it hung in his magic. Once he rounded the corner of Fluttershy's cottage, he recognized the mare they were looking for.

    "Miss Fluttershy! Get away from that thing!"

    The Songbird stepped forward, causing the earth beneath their hooves to tremble. He balled his fists, revealing the razor sharp blades on his gloves.

    "Mr. Bird, please don't hurt them!" Fluttershy cried

    Sorry songbird fans, That's all you get! (because that's all there is :''(

    Macintosh Unhitched:

    Mac was up before the sun the next day. If the madame wanted this stallion dead, he supposed he had no choice. He had wrestled with the moral dilemma of killing a pony not connected with his mission.

    Ah suppose this is just another stop on the way... he thought, dressing himself in the dingy room given to him by his new employer. A shuffling sound distracted him. A newspaper slid beneath the door with a note tied around it, a last known location of his target. He took the paper, removing the note and stowing it in the pocket of his duster. He tossed the paper on the bed, but took a second glance once he caught the headline.

    ARMY OF THE SUN SWELLS RANKS! POWERS TAKE SIDES! WAR IMMINENT!

    Mac's jaw hung slack as he scanned through the opening paragraphs.

    The kidnapping of a vital part of the equestrian national defense six months ago has finally warranted a swift and just response from the crown. The army of the sun's ranks continue to grow as recruits flock to punish those who would commit crimes against the kingdom.

    The lawless territory newspapers usually had a pro-equestria slant, but Mac couldn't doubt the truth in black and white. He knew at the outset of his mission that it would only be a matter of time before word of Rainbow's disappearance became public knowledge. Once that happened, he knew the Princesses would have to do something.

    He would have never guessed that something was rebuild the Equestrian army. Further down the page, a picture of his wife and son stared back at him. His time was running out. Mac knew an invasion would only complicate things.

    "Another ponies' blood on your hooves."

    Mac cut his eyes to the old victorian chair in the corner. The light from the lantern didn't quite reach, though there was no need for it. He knew who was sitting there.

    "He knew what was coming. I gave him the choice."

    A bright red point of light rose, and then rested on the chairs arm as a cloud of smoke veiled the shadowy figure. "You sure didn't hesitate, did you?"

    Mac hated when he showed up. "You know what happens when you hesitate."

    A scoff echoed from the corner. "Yeah, I do. So, have you thought about what I said?"

    Mac's face twisted into a snarl. "Ah ain't a murderer."

    "You don't think so?" The figure leaned out of the shadows. "You know what murderers do, don't you?" Mac stared back at his dark companion, a reflection of himself. "They kill. You've killed." His dark passenger sat back, taking another drag of his cigarette. "Connect the dots."

    Please don't read in to how a hooved creature could hold a cigarette without fingers. I sure didn't.

    Regression:

    Princeps Autem Solis

    The full moon is due tonight. It is identical to countless nights before, only this time, there is a tension I've not felt in many hundreds of years. Something is wrong. A storm has been brewing on the horizon, and I fear my sister knows of it as well. What's truly worrying, is that she refuses to acknowledge it. The impeding worry covers her like the heaviest cloak, and yet, she pretends everything is fine. She may ignore it, but I believe I know what is coming.

    The blades are coming. Another case has been reported in Manehattan. The EIA has been exceptional at concealing the cases from the general public, but they're mounting. They can't be hidden forever.

    Celestia refuses to renew the covenant. We renewed it once before. Discord, Celestia and myself all gathered in the Hallowed Ground. It cost us dearly. Epona can be a cruel deity. She demands so much from us to keep our children safe, to allow them the same gifts that we have enjoyed.

    I'm afraid my sister's tolerance for the renewal has disappeared. I cannot lay blame upon her. It is truly a dreadful process, to be renewed. For the kingdom, it is good. Wonderous, no doubt. The lethargic are granted energy, the sad are given joy, and the angry are given peace. But for us, there is naught but misery. A torment beyond comparison, beyond the mere words of any language awaits us for every bargain struck with Epona. Our life, the lives of all creatures on this planet flow from her, and through her. It is only through her grace that we live, and it is only fitting, that through her grace, we should recede.

    A Pony Walks Into A Bar...

    Trixie

    Another time, a unicorn in a cape and wizard hat wandered in. She held her head high as she entered, the hat dragging across the doorframe. With a swish of her magic, her clothes hung themselves on the hatrack.

    All I've got. Still thinking of a story for Trixie.

    That's not all of it, but there's a sample of some of what I've been up to. Fans of the various stories, what did you think?

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  • 15w, 2h
    Your old pal is going away for a bit again...

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Twilight finds all this studying of magic rarely lends itself an opportunity to use it. Until a certain arrogant unicorn shows up to tout her abilities. It's the perfect opportunity to show the town her magical prowess...almost too perfect.

First Published
12th Dec 2011
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12th Dec 2011
#1 · 149w, 5d ago · · ·

Criticism is always welcome, and your thoughts are greatly appreciated! I love hearing what was liked and not liked, so please don't hold back. I can take it I promise!

#2 · 149w, 5d ago · · ·

When I read this in Fanfiction.net my first thoughts about this were: fffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-:flutterrage:

:rainbowhuh:so... all this time Trixie was an artificial magic being with a lifespan of 24 hours... no wonder why nopony ever heard of her before and after the Ursa minor Incident:rainbowderp:, in the words of the original author of that particular spell book: GOTCHA!:trollestia:, and Great Job Twilight :twilightblush:

Great job with the fic, I just hope this becomes a series!, it have the potential of that, specially with Twilight trying to covering up her true involvement in this, also this would explain the whole Lession Zero in wich probably Twilight didn't want to use "Trixie" again in a desperate attempt to write a friendship report to Trollest- I MEAN Celestia.

#3 · 149w, 5d ago · · ·

That sure was an interesting and original take on "Boast Busters". I liked it.

I would like to see an Epilogue to the story. Something like Twilight comforting Trixie in her final hour.

#4 · 149w, 5d ago · · ·

I thought it was good, but I think its a bad writing choice to flat out mention events that will happen in the future. Other than that good job.

#5 · 149w, 5d ago · · ·

>>63024

Thanks! I had fun getting this kinda insane theory out of my head. I thought about continuing it and addressing Trixie's final moments, but that would probably happen after I get done with my other multi chap fic. thanks again for the positivity!

#6 · 149w, 4d ago · · ·

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No, you–

This is–

You did not just–

...

You did.

I applaud you. But yes, I agree blatantly referring to future events kills the immersion.

#7 · 149w, 4d ago · · ·

>>63769

when you say future events, are you referring to the lesson zero reference or the reference toward the end about beating trixie?

Fin
#8 · 149w, 4d ago · · ·

Neat idea!

though I agree with Jacky2734 the final hour of Trixie would be VERY interesting to read about.

if not that then it be sad thinking that she just died out in the woods somewhere...

                                                                                                      -Fin

#9 · 149w, 3d ago · · ·

Aww at the end, its really cute.

The rest is Twilight playing mad magician.

Like the rest ,hope for some epilogue that will cover the final hours of Trixie and  Twilight learn something important, she cares about Trixie at least a bit so it should be a bit hard to see her "die".

#10 · 149w, 3d ago · · ·

>>65297

glad you liked it! An epilogue is in the works, but it may be a bit before it comes out.

#11 · 149w, 3d ago · · ·

This is dark, but I loved it.

#12 · 149w, 3d ago · · ·

>>66468

gracias Mr. Potato!

#13 · 149w, 2d ago · · ·

>>63798

Yes, I'm talking about the Lesson Zero reference. To just mention the want-it-need-it spell is fine, but by flat out mentioning that Twilight will use it, you disrupt the flow of the narrative.

#14 · 149w, 2d ago · · ·

>>68364

Offending passage removed.

#15 · 138w, 1d ago · · ·

This is an excellent short read.  An interesting twist that puts boast busters into a different perspective, but the implications of such a book of spells existing are terrifying.  I can see Celestia needing those spells in the past (you need every trick to fight the spirit of chaos).  I can even see Celestia creating ponies to help the mane six learn a lesson (that's my new head canon to explain the one shot characters: Trixie, Flim and Flam, Pipsqueak, Gilda).  Sure, she made it so Twilight would find the book and learn a lesson about the dangers of playing god, but we never find out what happened to said book.

I hope Celestia took her book back, hiding it away in a vault to never see the light again.  One book with all the tools needed to take over the world.  Mind control the masses, create an army of merciless soldiers, make your own harem.  Even if Celestia does store the book in a Raiders of the Lost Ark-esq warehouse, Twilight still has the Lust it, Need it spell.  That alone is enough to cause severe consequences.

My word Maximus, you've doomed Equestria.  It's no longer a matter of if, but when.  So enjoy your cattle drives Big Mac.  Enjoy your ice cream Scootaloo.  If anything comes from this doom, it's Soarin's vengeance.

-Pontius Possum

#16 · 138w, 1d ago · · ·

>>278779 I actually thought about following this up, or making a 'book of secrets' type fic in a similar manner to 'Twilight finds magic book and tries spells not meant for mortals to try' type thing, but it'll have to wait till after all my other stuff is finished.

#17 · 137w, 6d ago · · ·

I saw you wrote this.That means insta-track!

#18 · 137w, 6d ago · · ·

This story! It's both amusing and, in my opinion, a little sad. I can't imagine an Equestria without Trixie.

#19 · 137w, 6d ago · · ·

I dunno. It doesn't sit right with me. The concept is sound, but the execution has a few holes in it. It feels very much unfinished. This relationship wouldn't just change the meaning of the episode, but every single thing in it as well. It's not enough to just say she was feigning ignorance the whole time; this would lead to some deep and vastly conflicting emotions in Twilight every step of the way. Watching her friends get humiliated, getting cold hooves and backing out, then having to step back in and prove herself anyway, and finally watching her 'daughter' flee, humiliated... that's some powerful stuff, and it shouldn't just be glossed over. This is a great setup and it's not enough to say that the payoff is what we've already seen, especially with added layers upon layers like this.

It also raises the question of why Twilight was studying Ursas after the boast, when it was her who came up with the lie in the first place... but that's not so important right now.

Unfortunately I don't know if there's a way of filling in the gaps without giving us a blow-by-blow recap of the episode, which would get old fairly quickly. You may have backed yourself into a corner on that count. But as is, it just leaves me unsatisfied.

#20 · 137w, 6d ago · · ·

>>285035

This is essentially my feeling as well. I just... can't buy it.

#21 · 137w, 6d ago · · ·

Well  written short story will track for the epilogue.

#22 · 137w, 6d ago · · ·

I really would like to see a sequel now. How hard would it be for Twilight to make Trixie real?

Oh, wait, I just realized the implications for Twixie. This is the path to Nightmare Sparkle, isn't it?

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Wow. You don't mess around, do you. Not only have you hinted at Lesson Zero, you've turned our hero into Twilight Frankenstein.

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My brain is full of... I dunno. Freaky!

#31 · 137w, 6d ago · · ·

It's horrifically wrong. It has Twilight violating every possible moral and ethical principle: deceiving and humiliating her friends, imperiling her hometown, engaging in unethical magic... and for what? A covert way to show off her magic?

Stories that rewrite the main characters as evil pricks immediately get the thumbs down from me....and only an evil prick would do what Twilight does in this fic.

#32 · 137w, 6d ago · · ·

>>286324 Meh. :ajsmug: I just write for fun, whether or not it sticks rigidly to canon, I don't really care. Thumbs down me to your heart's content.

>>285035 Yes, this actually was another quick write I did that was initially just the idea of Twilight creating Trixie. If there will be an epilogue, it'll be after all my other fics are finished up. As you said, I've written myself into a bit of a corner, but having said that, I do enjoy a challenge. I may amaze everyone with the epilogue or fall flat on my face, but writing is a learning experience, and I'm always learning. Anyway, what it was supposed to be overall was just a light-hearted (looking back now, a dark tag may have been appropriate given the philosophical implications) episode-ish romp through a random thought I had one day. I like to think it was that.

#33 · 137w, 4d ago · · ·

The idea seems interesting, although I must agree with the others saying that it somehow doesn't fit Twilight. Nevertheless, it was an interesting read. Certainly puts Trixie in a different light. It would be great to see the epilogue of it, if there's any work on it. :twilightsmile:

#34 · 137w, 3d ago · · ·

That book's author seems to be insinuating something. Secretly-tyrant Celestia at the very least, some more direct other stuff at most. As a one-shot, this was good. Very non-canon of Twilight, but that's one of the things fanfiction exists for.

#35 · 137w, 1d ago · · ·

Trixie is a golem? :rainbowderp: Did not see that one coming.

I like this, though. Thumbs up.

#36 · 133w, 1d ago · · ·

I think this needs a sequel.

#37 · 88w, 2d ago · · ·

I'd be wary of casting that "lust it, need it" spell on yourself or anypony you care about. I can't help but think of one time when a blog of Scootaloo based off Ask Pinkamina did a brief interactive text adventure (I wasn't there while it was going on, but there was a transcript). Somebody had the bright idea to have Smarty Pants cast the want it, need it spell on Scoots, after which point no course of action was discovered that didn't end in Scoots getting raped to death. So, moral of the story: when making yourself magically attractive don't overdo it.

Interesting idea.

#38 · 70w, 3d ago · · ·

Twilight created Trixie? :trixieshiftleft: I believe it. Good story :twilightsheepish:

#39 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·

I liked it...and kinda didn't? (Yeah, that's weird I guess.)

It definitely feels like something that could happen, but it does kind of make Twilight look bad in a sense. I am glad that she had second thoughts on this idea, though. I guess it's that moral grey area that is tripping me up. Makes you think.

(Still gets a up vote for being creative though! :twilightsmile:)

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