Space Star is a alicorn who has voices in her head. She lives with Twilight Sparkle in The Castle Of Friendship. She would do anything for Twilight, she would even fight for her.
I look at the description and right off the bat I’m rolling my eyes. I see the word count and I wonder “is anything even happening in the chapters?”
As someone who loves reading AND writing, this story worries me by those factors alone. I’d strongly suggest looking up the term Mary Sue, why it’s not appreciated by most people(biggest thing I can quickly offer is it gets boring when a character is so perfect nothing goes wrong), and while I don’t suggest reading it, look up the controversy surrounding the story My Immortal(quick note again, character is introduced as overly powerful and perfect so there is no room for the character to develop). I’ll read it after I finish sleeping, but this story raises several flags. The only thing that offers me a Glimmer of hope(ha!) is that as your first story you could legitimately be trying to improve. Just...the minimum word count isn’t there to stifle you. It’s to stop you from spamming micro-chapters that lend nothing to the story. Something that ends up frustrating readers and leading to that lightsaber of a like bar to head to the dark-side.
8664891 If it’s one or two, the viewer-count takes you into consideration. If you’re looking at it, the viewer count will be 1-2 depending on how many tabs you have it in. I personally tend to keep two open during writing so I have one as my text editor and one showing me how it looks as a finished product.
8665206 ok. I'm updating every chapter at the moment. so, I will eventually update chapter 5. which I will take your feedback into consideration when I do update chapter.
Space Star. Honey. It's been like three hours, hon. You don't have to be eating dudes out here. Like, maybe try eating dinner before you go? Pack some lunchables or something.
8673312 8673315 Wait, hold up. Did I miss out on her eating someone? Then again, I probably would've said "But the last chapter said she wasn't a cannibal anymore!" so I can't be mad.
The addition of the Lunchables makes this delightfully absurd. I imagined Star just snuggled up in her sleeping bag like a toasty cinnamon roll, just nibbling on a cracker from her Lunchable with a content face.
The new chapter is out!
I look at the description and right off the bat I’m rolling my eyes. I see the word count and I wonder “is anything even happening in the chapters?”
As someone who loves reading AND writing, this story worries me by those factors alone. I’d strongly suggest looking up the term Mary Sue, why it’s not appreciated by most people(biggest thing I can quickly offer is it gets boring when a character is so perfect nothing goes wrong), and while I don’t suggest reading it, look up the controversy surrounding the story My Immortal(quick note again, character is introduced as overly powerful and perfect so there is no room for the character to develop). I’ll read it after I finish sleeping, but this story raises several flags. The only thing that offers me a Glimmer of hope(ha!) is that as your first story you could legitimately be trying to improve. Just...the minimum word count isn’t there to stifle you. It’s to stop you from spamming micro-chapters that lend nothing to the story. Something that ends up frustrating readers and leading to that lightsaber of a like bar to head to the dark-side.
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If it’s one or two, the viewer-count takes you into consideration. If you’re looking at it, the viewer count will be 1-2 depending on how many tabs you have it in. I personally tend to keep two open during writing so I have one as my text editor and one showing me how it looks as a finished product.
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I am going through and editing all of the chapters right now. I just finished editing chapter one.
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ok. I'm updating every chapter at the moment. so, I will eventually update chapter 5. which I will take your feedback into consideration when I do update chapter.
I got 44 fans now
8665301
I will read your story.
8664608
your feedback really helped!
8665352
I enjoy the feedback. I will be back on in 1 hour
Why does this story have so many dislikes? I mean, it can't be that bad, right? ...Right?
8665991
It’s not bad.
8668598
id be a raider or a wastelander. you can use my oc.
8668598
but, you gotta mention my story so people know where my character is from
should I write a ddlc fanfic
Space Star. Honey. It's been like three hours, hon. You don't have to be eating dudes out here. Like, maybe try eating dinner before you go? Pack some lunchables or something.
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lol. ok
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Wait, hold up. Did I miss out on her eating someone? Then again, I probably would've said "But the last chapter said she wasn't a cannibal anymore!" so I can't be mad.
The addition of the Lunchables makes this delightfully absurd. I imagined Star just snuggled up in her sleeping bag like a toasty cinnamon roll, just nibbling on a cracker from her Lunchable with a content face.