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currently suffering from the curse of improving just enough to hate what i just wrote, then starting over again

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[I swear this will be continued... eventually]

Time Turner goes missing: the Tardis doesn't return one day. Or the next day. Or, the day after that. After a week passes, Derpy and Dinky lose all hope of ever seeing him again. Then, things go from bad worse. Nine hundred years ago, Princess Celestia passed a law about custody suits, which contained a fine-print technicality that had never applied until now. The technicality was that if a single parent had a debilitating disability, they lose custody of the child to the state. Unfortunately for Derpy, her clumsiness and lazy eye were officially filed as symptoms of a mental illness. So, the FPS, Foal Protective Services, is forced to wrest her daughter away, much to the chagrin of the entire town of Ponyville. But, they won't take this lying down.

Cheerilee, who minored in law while she got her teaching degree, headlines the defense in the custody case. Can the unity of a town keep a shattered family from breaking even further? Or will the bonds between a mother and daughter be severed permanently...?

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I like how this story is going...have a thumbs up! :derpytongue2:

Story is fun to read! Glad to fav and thumb up it!

Its good so far, but yeah, The authors note sort of throws everything off. Maybe an idea is to set up the authors note as a separate chapter. However, this chapter does set up the story nicely. Well, at least I thought so. This would be my second story I have read with Dinky and it seems to fit her personality, as for Dr Who (or Hooves (the official name now) or Whooves) I seen the show but haven't read any story with him.

:derpytongue2: so far so good! I'm. Alsoo a Dr.who/hooves fan, since you asked, and, all be it short, I'll be eagerly awaiting the next chapter. Oh, ps: this is my first comment on this site :twilightsmile:

Good!! I'll favorite this to know when moar chapters come up :raritywink:
But I think what Dinky wrote only fits on about one page. Depends on how she writes, though. :pinkiesmile:

You have my attention. :moustache: Now, amuse me.

This...is...BEAUTIFUL:fluttercry:

Doctor who fan also, good story u get one strawberry came. WARNING may contain mass a mounts of secret ingredients

PMC

Title- Okay
Description- Very Interesting
Story-:raritycry: It's so good!

Consider yourself tracked

Thank you all!
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Sorry about the Author's Note. The whole drama with my other story has pretty much blown over because I fixed it, so you own't see anymore out-of-place A/Ns. However, I will always have a sentence or two before and after every chapter. It's a nervous tic of mine to say at least something. Perhaps if I get more involved with the story and start writing entire chapters quickly enough, I'll skip them altogether.
This isn't the plot setup, it's a bit of backstory behind Cherrilee's motivations later on in the story. And, it's a jumping-off point for the real plot setup chapter.
Do you know enough about Dr Who to give a reason as to why he'd disappear?

945590
Do you know enough about Dr Who to give a reason as to why he'd disappear?
First comment? Yay, Eye sew speshal!

945655
Well, I got it from estimating the size of parchment, then cutting out enough paper for it, then writing out the essay- getting all the spelling and grammar wrong- with my left hand (I'm right-handed), and then seeing what I got. It was about a page and a quarter.

945699
I hope sadness and depression amuse you, then.

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946005
Strawberry came?
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JK, I know you meant cake. YAY CAKE!
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Not that cake.
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Better.

Do you know enough about Dr Who to give a reason as to why he'd disappear?

954448
I know the title's a bit cheesy. Can you help me by renaming it?

PMC

No no no no, I don't think your titles chessy, I was just trying to show my graduale intrest and love for you story. Sorry for the missunderstanding.:derpytongue2:

954778 Oh, okay. You're forgiven.

No! Please, take your time writing. I don't mind waiting a week or two or if we have to, 3 weeks. And sorry, I meant character set up, such as showing how their personalities will be. And what do you mean about Dr Who disappearing? Like why are there different people playing Dr Who? Everything I know about him comes from Wikipedia.

955596
I don't mean I'm feeling rushed. If I get really into writing something, I won't stop for hours, and if I do that, the Author's Notes will shrink and disappear.

Ah, I know what you mean now.

Oh, I meant if any fans of the show would be interested. Never mind about that then, I just thought you'd watched the show.

954673
Auto correct doesnt recognise cake and cupcakes as words

954673
Actually, I meant amusement in the kind of thing that makes me feel sad about being happy, yet happy about being sad.:derpyderp2:
It's complicated.

956573 Yes, I know. I use an iPhone myself. DYAC!!!

956958 Ah, you've got the backwards emotional responses. I've sort of got that, only it's anger at happiness all the time, and contentedness at sadness leading up to happiness. I'm only comfortable if there's conflict. :pinkiecrazy:

Well, I'm not as knowlageable as the real who fans, but sometimes. He dosn't have full control of the T.A.R.D.I.S. ( hope I got that right I forgot the acronymn's meaning time relitive something something.):rainbowhuh: But as as I was saying, one time he helped a six year old girl and told her he'll be right back, only to return twenty or so years later. Amy pond I belive. Her name was.( I haven't been watching lately.):facehoof:

959722 That's okay, I'll find someone on the net if none of the readers are fans.

:heart:I LOVE IT. whenever i fill down im going to read this.:heart:

954673
This is assuming he has access to all time lord stuff still.


He could accidentally erase his time lord memories and make himself a proper pony ( at least he thinks he is) with a fog watch.


Or the TARDIS could go screwy with him inside sending him through the void/howling, sticking him in a parallel world waiting for the TARDIS to recharge.

A big case of D'AAAAWWabetes right here.

961890 How awkward, I'm using your profile pic as the story cover... But still... Yay, a reader!

962591 Well, I need him gone one way or another. I had someone else message me in the subject- can you message me so I can cross-reference you two together or something?

967270 Ha, I've never seen that term before! That's really clever- here, have a :moustache:! Lol, love it! Oh, and thank you.

967728
Subject? (is new to fimfiction)

968423 'The subject of... Imaweener' "I'm a weiner?" 'Ahahaha, classic...'
But seriously now, I meant someone else messaged me about this. You'll want to take it up with him. So, message me so I can put your username on a message to him, then you two can talk about who gets to write it.

968607
Uhh if it's writing don't leave it up to me.. Poor descriptive writing.. Unless its a skeleton of a story then sure.

968750
Oh.
Well, it's entirely optional to my story. It's just a possibility for a Doctor Whooves fanfiction. that parallels this one. Sorta like the MLP/Pikmin crossovers written from Carrot Top and Derpy's perspectives, both written by different people, different characters, but the same story.

How .......... nice :facehoof: forget that :derpyderp1: :derpyderp2: :derpytongue2: :derpytounge1:

Special wrestling huh? XD

I demand you write more! :flutterrage:

2005905 I'm doing as much as I can on all my stories. Unfortunately, I only get a sentence or two at a time before crippling writer's block sets in and I can't go any further without three hours of staring at the screen and wracking my brain to think of how best to say what I want to say. But, do know that as long as I draw breath, I have the will to finish.

2009103
As long as you write more within a month, Im fine :twilightsmile:

Missing closing tag.

Great chapter! Can't wait for more :pinkiehappy:
I noticed some errors, like some random /'s in this chapter. Other than that, once again, great chapter! Awaiting the next one!

*Gasp* :pinkiegasp: This was AMAZING! I cant wait for more! :pinkiehappy:

If you need help continuing this story, feel free to contact me because I really want to see this awesome story finished.

If you still need a Doctor Who fan, I love Doctor Who!

And I really like this chapter. Dinky's so cute!:rainbowkiss:

Hey I wrote this. Y'all know what would be a good idea? Me continuing where I left off on my new page.

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