Warning: The following story is currently unedited.
For the first time in eighty years since the death of Mrs. Harriet, the abandoned mansion is being explored by a small crew of filmmakers, set to make a documentary of their exhibition. The huge mansion, sat alone miles from the nearest town in the middle of winter, has been the muse of many haunted house stories in Equestria, but never once has anyone been granted permission to go inside... until now.
Director Oatberg, historian and writer Lost Scroll and narrator Iris Lens are set to explore the mansion, but get lost within the maze of hallways, rooms, and forgotten sections. Hearing and experience things that they can’t explain, they begin to wonder if there was some truth in the legend of this haunting place.
This story is a gift to my good friend and fellow writer: Milo_Chalks and his coltfriend.
Inspired by the history and historical setting of the Winchester Mystery House in San Jose, California.
Why not get an editor, then?
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Simply because everything from the editing, to the art work, and even the YouTube readings, is all done by volunteers. Every editor I’ve gotten was not because (for the most part) that I asked them, but because they wanted to. If I’m going to have an editor for any given story, let it be because they enjoy the story itself, and that they can see it to improve it when I wasn’t able to. Plus, I’ve learned for experience that not every editor will be there for you, so it’s best for them to come to me and not the other way around.
The end of this first chapter... terrific. I always like it when seemingly minor occurrences like that actually foreshadow much bigger occurrences later on.
At least, I'm pretty sure that's what it meant, because admittedly, when it comes to mysteries, most clues typically fly right over my head...
This is a quite promising beginning. The scenario puts one in mind of older adventure games like Shadowgate or Radical Dreamers, and I am quite interested to see what your intentions are for the house in itself. Stories like this that are done well can make the setting live and breathe as a character in itself and are always worth reading.
I look forward to seeing more.
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Wow! What a great first chapter! I am loving this so far and big thanks for dedicating this fic to me. To our friendship!
(I might have to do the same now)
Dang, what a way to go. Good dose of chiller!
Surprised to see there aren't more views on this, up or down votes either...
or maybe this story doesn't really exist! Dun dun duuuuuuun
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The thumbs rating thing has just appeared now. So they exist now.
Dang, for a second I thought she was gonna make it.
Overall I loved this story, I found their dismissal of events a little annoying but the atmosphere and descriptions were fantastic!
As you mentioned in the intro this story is unedited and very much made for some rough reading in spots. That being said, this was an interesting read. I really enjoyed the idea of a sentient, malevolent, non-Euclidean space