For the past few months, Spike and Rarity have met for tea, but this will be the last time they do so for quite a while.
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I see what you did there... although some of them are also gingers.
I guess I'll have a coffee as well.
That was extremely hard to read. I always feel terrible for the little guy when this particular situation always arises. It's always bitter as well, just like coffee.
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True.
Hahaha! I can't wait to read this! SOON
Edit: And now I've read it! This was really fun, a little meta-fiction nod to my own work, and I really appreciated Spike's status being discussed in this story. It's something I'm working to address right now in the current chapter, as I write!
This actually inspired me a bit. I have some ideas. Thank you, B. You rock!
Oh, and since I'm your editor:
one or two missed/dropped words, tighten up the paragraph structure, and one case of Spike using a word he probably wouldn't use. Rarity would say somebody "was feeling ill", but Spike would probably say "they're feeling sick". Overall, though, this is really decent work. First person gives you the room to play around with prose that I think you desire, and you handled it well.
*insert 500 word response of how it was very good and inspiring here*