A stranger with a spell that makes his actions seems reasonable and acceptable to anyone affected arrives in Ponyville, and immediately sets about making all of Equestria accept his lewd acts as something completely normal.
While this WAS certainly an interesting first chapter, Night should have kept RD as the dominant one and Flutters as the submissive. Because Rainbow Dash ending up as the submissive one in any kind of BDSM-like relationship occurs WAY too much.
Not bad. I like the scenario of infiltration and stealth. It adds a bit of realistic tension in what is otherwise a pure power fantasy. He's injecting himself into their lives without completely overturning their existing lives. He just adjusts things so that he is there also and not a full on harem lord just yet. A very promising start.
While this WAS certainly an interesting first chapter, Night should have kept RD as the dominant one and Flutters as the submissive.
Because Rainbow Dash ending up as the submissive one in any kind of BDSM-like relationship occurs WAY too much.
Not bad. I like the scenario of infiltration and stealth. It adds a bit of realistic tension in what is otherwise a pure power fantasy. He's injecting himself into their lives without completely overturning their existing lives. He just adjusts things so that he is there also and not a full on harem lord just yet. A very promising start.