Shining Armor is a young adult and taking an interest in mares. A certain mare very close to him can help him in a very special way. Incest. Clop in every chapter.
I was a bit confused about who was talking at some points in this chapter
"Not at bad, still not great, not happy, but I'm coping, I think. Anything else I should know about mom? If you had to say there was one key thing behind all this, what would it be?"
Is one example.
There is one big thing that does not make sense to me. Why does Eventide Velour even exist? In the chapter "baring-it-all" Velvet says that she is a "side effect" of the magic she is using but that is just one big why? There is also the fact that the reason Velvet "went out" in the first place is to "scratch an itch" she has. So if she cannot feel or remember the times then how is that solved?
I was a bit confused about who was talking at some points in this chapter
In the highlighted bit, it's clearly Shining. He talks about mom, and he was just asked how he's doing. He is the only logical choice.
There is one big thing that does not make sense to me. Why does Eventide Velour even exist? In the chapter "baring-it-all" Velvet says that she is a "side effect" of the magic she is using but that is just one big why? There is also the fact that the reason Velvet "went out" in the first place is to "scratch an itch" she has. So if she cannot feel or remember the times then how is that solved?
Alright, Makuta, you got me. I didn't really plan this story out particularly well from the beginning. I'm doing some revisions in earlier chapters to bring it more consistency. As for how Velvet gets satisfaction from Velour's encounters, well, there are many ways she could. Most important is that it's the same brain and body. Given that sexual feelings are linked to hormone levels, Velour having some fun is going to naturally impact Velvet. She also uses the idea of the differing clients as her own personal masturbation fodder. Lastly, being wanted is a hell of a drug. Velvet is also quite an unreliable person. We don't have Velour's side of her own creation yet. That's coming up eventually. The closest to the truth I can give is that Velour is the mare Velvet fantasizes of herself as. Desired, full of agency, sexual, an exotic lady of pleasure and class not bound to the petty daily bullshit of a mothering middle class housewife with an absentee husband and two children who very much depend on her.
Oh you bet. There's gonna be a lot in the next chapter. We're not quite yet through act 2 yet, but it's close. There's still plenty of exploration to be done for Velour and Night.
8944967 Plenty of story to go, Burn. Plenty of time for all kinds of things.
I'm coming to Bronycon, Captain. Thanks for the amazing comments. It's ones like this that really make the whole writing process feel oh so worth it. There's actually going to be more Night Light next chapter and he's going to be important through to the end of the story. I wanted their relationship more like a true to life ailing marriage between people who really do love each other but are so fed up they don't quite know the sky from the soil anymore. This is actually an attempt at writing a serious and quality story while putting a clop scene in every chapter; heard it couldn't be done. Told my editor to hold my beer. LOL. I did have to tag it porn, and it is porn, just with a plot to the plot. Anyway, what did you think of this latest chapter? I'd love to hear from you on it, and the next chapter is coming out in a week or two.
8987516 I did figure out who was talking but the questions "I can't help you? Take a load out?" are not the same for me as asking "how are you?" so I was confused.
Well, I feel like an idiot... I read the first chapter of this when it first came out, gave it a Like, but I forgot to check if it was complete or not. I assumed (Like a dummy) that it was.
Now I just happened to come across it again and I'm greeted by a drama/feelsy bundle of multiple chapters. I still feel stupid for not knowing it continued, but I sure am glad it did. It went from a funny one-shot to a soap opera with the sex tag used at least twice a chapter.
Your style is unlike anyone else I've ever seen, and it makes this even more enjoyable. And I will be favoriting this so I'll know when it updates this time, for fudge sake.
Ah well, sorry for the delay, I've been really busy with IRL stuff lately. However, you're quite welcome for the comments; a story like yours deserves them! As for the newest chapter, I really enjoyed it. I loved the scene in the restaurant where Velour answers the questions that Shining and Cadance had for her. It was both comedic with Velour trying to seduce Shining while giving him information, and Cadance was quite funny as well. My favorite line of the chapter had to be, "Are you sure? Poppy can shoot him." I really enjoy these little quirks you give Cadance.
I did, however, feel bad for Cadance that she pleasured herself to thoughts of Shining Armor, only to exit the bathroom and find him nailing Velour. I sense a threeway or Cadance taking Shining for herself coming fairly quickly.
Though, now that Shining has more knowledge, I'm hoping he can have a heart to heart with Velvet and they can bury the hatchet and try to return to their old lives, and I still hope to see Night Light and Velvet rekindle their love life.
Your comments are wonderful. The next chapter, after way too many delays relating to stuff like being IRL away from a usable computer for the past 3 weeks, is coming up very soon. I can't wait to see what you think of it. The married couple are going to be a focus of the next upcoming phase of the story. I plan to focus on him again very soon.
Cadance is one of my favorite canon characters to work on. She's a princess, but seems to have a lot of hidden depth to her -- she's decidedly masculine girly in a way. She's a flexible character with smarts, empathy, and facets. There is no stereotypical Cadance line as there would be with someone like Rarity or Fluttershy. She doesn't have any consuming quirks like most of the mane 6 that would pervasively dye how she must handle something. There is so much nuance in there to work with; she isn't quite predestined to have an outcome she'll absolutely want to see, or to have a repetitive character arc that MUST happen, like Pinkie Pie learning to dial down, or Twiley having to remember to not be neurotic as fuck AGAIN. Cadance instead is just a fundamentally decent person who wants to help all involved, and that can mean considering all the angles and making sacrifices and sometimes taking risks.
I hope you like chapter 10. It's gonna be yuuuuuuge.
Thanks for that, Blessed. If you don't mind me asking, what do you mean by I have a unique style? That's a good thing, I hope. Don't sweat having missed out on it; what matters now is you're reading and enjoying it. Thanks for commenting. :) The next update is right about to drop, so drop your sock and grab your cock. LOL.
"Nuzzling her cheek, he sighed out one single word, "Mom..." "
The moment I rode those lines I was struck. So unexpected, just after a few lines after the end of sex.
It struck like a train going full speed of porn just to wreck havoc and transform into a heartwarming/heartbreaking moment. That line was so perfect to change the momentum without losing the pace nor impact.
Truly, clutched my hearth, something few fics were capable, again, so unexpectedly.
Of course, the rest of the fic was fantastic and fun, but gotta let known this twist of scenery did make an impact.
I haven't read this story yet, but I recognize Twilight Velvet, but who's the other mare in the picture?
8943562
You'll have to read to find out.
Still voting on Shining and the three mares. This chapter just makes this more desireable.
As stated before, Cadence in this story is a good and fun interpretation and can fit with Shining.
Poppy is hard working and is open to exotic and new things. Can also provide interesting set up for guard influence.
Lastly, Fleur, ever the fulcrum with Velvet, she is open and a subsequent truth of whom Velvet is in such a way.
Keep up the good work! Hope to see the threesome and more sexy fun!
Wow! Looks like things ate coming to a head.
I was a bit confused about who was talking at some points in this chapter
Is one example.
There is one big thing that does not make sense to me. Why does Eventide Velour even exist? In the chapter "baring-it-all" Velvet says that she is a "side effect" of the magic she is using but that is just one big why? There is also the fact that the reason Velvet "went out" in the first place is to "scratch an itch" she has. So if she cannot feel or remember the times then how is that solved?
and now the story behind the story starts to come out in the open.
this story is really coming to gather in all the right ways.
Thanks, ya'll for commenting.
8945235
Thanks for the great comment. Now to respond...
In the highlighted bit, it's clearly Shining. He talks about mom, and he was just asked how he's doing. He is the only logical choice.
Alright, Makuta, you got me. I didn't really plan this story out particularly well from the beginning. I'm doing some revisions in earlier chapters to bring it more consistency. As for how Velvet gets satisfaction from Velour's encounters, well, there are many ways she could. Most important is that it's the same brain and body. Given that sexual feelings are linked to hormone levels, Velour having some fun is going to naturally impact Velvet. She also uses the idea of the differing clients as her own personal masturbation fodder. Lastly, being wanted is a hell of a drug. Velvet is also quite an unreliable person. We don't have Velour's side of her own creation yet. That's coming up eventually. The closest to the truth I can give is that Velour is the mare Velvet fantasizes of herself as. Desired, full of agency, sexual, an exotic lady of pleasure and class not bound to the petty daily bullshit of a mothering middle class housewife with an absentee husband and two children who very much depend on her.
8947557
8945006
Oh you bet. There's gonna be a lot in the next chapter. We're not quite yet through act 2 yet, but it's close. There's still plenty of exploration to be done for Velour and Night.
8944967
Plenty of story to go, Burn. Plenty of time for all kinds of things.
8934206
I'm coming to Bronycon, Captain. Thanks for the amazing comments. It's ones like this that really make the whole writing process feel oh so worth it. There's actually going to be more Night Light next chapter and he's going to be important through to the end of the story. I wanted their relationship more like a true to life ailing marriage between people who really do love each other but are so fed up they don't quite know the sky from the soil anymore. This is actually an attempt at writing a serious and quality story while putting a clop scene in every chapter; heard it couldn't be done. Told my editor to hold my beer. LOL. I did have to tag it porn, and it is porn, just with a plot to the plot. Anyway, what did you think of this latest chapter? I'd love to hear from you on it, and the next chapter is coming out in a week or two.
8987516
I did figure out who was talking but the questions "I can't help you? Take a load out?" are not the same for me as asking "how are you?" so I was confused.
Well, I feel like an idiot... I read the first chapter of this when it first came out, gave it a Like, but I forgot to check if it was complete or not. I assumed (Like a dummy) that it was.
Now I just happened to come across it again and I'm greeted by a drama/feelsy bundle of multiple chapters. I still feel stupid for not knowing it continued, but I sure am glad it did. It went from a funny one-shot to a soap opera with the sex tag used at least twice a chapter.
Your style is unlike anyone else I've ever seen, and it makes this even more enjoyable. And I will be favoriting this so I'll know when it updates this time, for fudge sake.
8987516
Ah well, sorry for the delay, I've been really busy with IRL stuff lately. However, you're quite welcome for the comments; a story like yours deserves them! As for the newest chapter, I really enjoyed it. I loved the scene in the restaurant where Velour answers the questions that Shining and Cadance had for her. It was both comedic with Velour trying to seduce Shining while giving him information, and Cadance was quite funny as well. My favorite line of the chapter had to be, "Are you sure? Poppy can shoot him." I really enjoy these little quirks you give Cadance.
I did, however, feel bad for Cadance that she pleasured herself to thoughts of Shining Armor, only to exit the bathroom and find him nailing Velour. I sense a threeway or Cadance taking Shining for herself coming fairly quickly.
Though, now that Shining has more knowledge, I'm hoping he can have a heart to heart with Velvet and they can bury the hatchet and try to return to their old lives, and I still hope to see Night Light and Velvet rekindle their love life.
9027276
Your comments are wonderful. The next chapter, after way too many delays relating to stuff like being IRL away from a usable computer for the past 3 weeks, is coming up very soon. I can't wait to see what you think of it. The married couple are going to be a focus of the next upcoming phase of the story. I plan to focus on him again very soon.
Cadance is one of my favorite canon characters to work on. She's a princess, but seems to have a lot of hidden depth to her -- she's decidedly masculine girly in a way. She's a flexible character with smarts, empathy, and facets. There is no stereotypical Cadance line as there would be with someone like Rarity or Fluttershy. She doesn't have any consuming quirks like most of the mane 6 that would pervasively dye how she must handle something. There is so much nuance in there to work with; she isn't quite predestined to have an outcome she'll absolutely want to see, or to have a repetitive character arc that MUST happen, like Pinkie Pie learning to dial down, or Twiley having to remember to not be neurotic as fuck AGAIN. Cadance instead is just a fundamentally decent person who wants to help all involved, and that can mean considering all the angles and making sacrifices and sometimes taking risks.
I hope you like chapter 10. It's gonna be yuuuuuuge.
8988711
Thanks for that, Blessed. If you don't mind me asking, what do you mean by I have a unique style? That's a good thing, I hope. Don't sweat having missed out on it; what matters now is you're reading and enjoying it. Thanks for commenting. :) The next update is right about to drop, so drop your sock and grab your cock. LOL.
Alright...
Alright. Let's see where this leads.
The moment I rode those lines I was struck. So unexpected, just after a few lines after the end of sex.
It struck like a train going full speed of porn just to wreck havoc and transform into a heartwarming/heartbreaking moment. That line was so perfect to change the momentum without losing the pace nor impact.
Truly, clutched my hearth, something few fics were capable, again, so unexpectedly.
Of course, the rest of the fic was fantastic and fun, but gotta let known this twist of scenery did make an impact.