Shining Armor is a young adult and taking an interest in mares. A certain mare very close to him can help him in a very special way. Incest. Clop in every chapter.
Then she arrives home to find a certain griffin merc who knew her address after stalking her had visited her house looking for a booty call found another male there and proceeded to in Griffin fashion verbally tear apart emotionally and masculinity wise who he sees as a rival male by revealing how much more ..... masculinity he pumps into her with his giant pecker ... no not his beak ...lol... accidentally revealing her breaking his rule about protection and how now he only needs to get rid of that white furred blue haired guard wannabe he's seen her fooling around with lately and make her his. Come on that would be an awesome chapter you know you wanna ... velvet needs to pay for treating night light like dirt. He needs a reason to get angry and the possibility of a divorce should be a huge wake up call for velvet.
9033742 Picture the positioning in your mind. Velour's hands moved from the top of Cadance's thighs to a breath away from fish taco territory, then slipped around to the outside of Cadance's upper thighs, which is the hip. It was a very deliberate tease.
Been reading this story a while, and this chapter has undoubtedly been the best yet. Really hoping for the eventual Cadance/Shining couple and the deescalation of Shining/Velvet/Velour. Don't mistake me, it's hot but not suitable for a long term relationship. As soon as they sort their ***t out the better off they will be.
Never before I have read a clopfic that left me so conflicted while I'm still enjoying it. On one hand it's hot and well written, on the other I feel the urge to slap some sense in all the characters (except for Twiley, but that's because she's still a little innocent cinnamon roll at this point and she's not aware of what's going on).
He looked down, the blush intensifying, “I don’t think so, the drama involved. I know Velour is a gestalt, so it’s not really mom, but…”
Cadance leaned forward. “So yes or no?”
He looked up at her then down at the floor, “Cadance, I’m torn, I don’t have a marefriend. And I’ve found I really like sex. So, I want to. But with everything going on. I would like to continue seeing her, just as Velour, so long as she'll have me.”
... this is like saying "I'll never set my car on fire" only to burn it after changing the license plates. It doesn't matter if the way she looks or her personality are different, she's still your mother!
Twilight Velvet prayed and hoped against all odds that her husband would not be home to greet her and that her son would get there soon.
Oooooh oh oh, Velvet, you can run as much as you want, but it's just a pointless way to try to avoid the inevitable. Ignoring a problem doesn't solve it. Please, don't go easy on her. She may not be the only one to blame for this mess, but she surely poured a lot of gasoline on the fire.
Shining/Velvet/Velour/Cadence With a side of Zebra.
But I digress, the story is progressing into some finely laid issues presented and given details on the finer things of the Prostitution and the Awkward system of 'Asking out'.
I'm enjoying the story, even if the sex is getting a little, repetitive. I'd classify this as a "started for the clop, stayed for the Story" I can't wait to see how this gets resolved!
Well, I'm caught up. Quite a mess they're in. Looking forward to the resolution. As much as I find some of the characters... eh... disagreeable, I'm still invested in seeing what happens to them. So that counts for something, for you, as a writer.
I am a bit annoyed about a attitude Cadence and Velour have about forgiveness and guilt/blame. They are both angry about what Shining did to Sugar Swirl and seems to consider it unforgivable if he had gotten violent with her. But when it comes to Velvet and what I would call abusing her son it is something to understand and forgive. It seems it did not matter if Velvet had warnings before what she did and Shining did not or whatever circumstances there was as apparently: Shining did something worse or could have.
Yes he should say he is sorry and yes he should not have gotten angry at Sugar Swirl but if forgiveness and understanding is fair for Velvet then I think it is fair for Shining too. Even if he had gotten violent.
Yeah, it's still going on. I haven't forgotten, I've just had writer's block pretty bad; it happens to me every so often. I will update for sure this month. I've been having writer's block, I'm sorry and it sucks, so rather than force things and shart out a chapter just to keep the updates coming, I've taken a bit of a break from writing. I want to make a good product when it's ready rather than just crap out the last parts while running on empty and ruin the endgame of the story. A rushed story is forever bad, but a story let to simmer and be refined is ultimately good. The events of the last act of the story are all charted out, all that remains is the implementation. I know ya'll really like this story and I'm honestly really really proud of it myself, so I want to actually end it well rather than disappoint by being hasty just to shove chapters out the door. I'm about 4K words into the new chapter and I'm talking with Sparky about it. Rest assured, you'll get your new chapters. Sorry it's taken for fucking ever.
9342608 hey it's cool, dude I've had some bad writer's block my self so don't stress about it. I just wanted to cheek so I would know wheather to keep this in my tracking folder or move it to one of my other folders
Thanks. I really do feel crappy about taking so long, but I know that ya'll'd hate it if I hammered one out just for the sake of putting something out there regardless of if it held to the quality you've come to expect.
>>kalash93 I just started this story this morning, and I was so interested in where the story was going, I shotgunned the whole thing and just finished "Molting" about 2 minutes ago. I'm really excited to see what the next chapter holds, but please don't feel bad about taking a long time, or pressured to push out the next chapter. I know all about having to take breaks to let your creativity return, and it's something you just have to do sometimes. I'm certainly going to have my eye firmly planted on this one, so you'll have at least one person returning for more, even if it's a year from now. ;)
Thanks, I made a blog explaining it, plus a teaser. I really do feel bad about how long I've taken to get new content out. I'm thrilled genuine to read you marathoned the whole thing and couldn't top. I swear the last chapters will be worthy of a binge from beginning to end.
Then she arrives home to find a certain griffin merc who knew her address after stalking her had visited her house looking for a booty call found another male there and proceeded to in Griffin fashion verbally tear apart emotionally and masculinity wise who he sees as a rival male by revealing how much more ..... masculinity he pumps into her with his giant pecker ... no not his beak ...lol... accidentally revealing her breaking his rule about protection and how now he only needs to get rid of that white furred blue haired guard wannabe he's seen her fooling around with lately and make her his. Come on that would be an awesome chapter you know you wanna ... velvet needs to pay for treating night light like dirt. He needs a reason to get angry and the possibility of a divorce should be a huge wake up call for velvet.
I consider this your Magnum Opus.
Princess of Love got lecture on the relationship lesson? Prove that Cadance is still young.
I'm pretty confused by this bit. What upper things were you talking about?
i can say this is the best chapter of the hole story, you really pored your hart out in this chapter and it came out excellent.
the next story ark is going to be vary interesting to see play out and to see how things pull together with the story cast.
A awesome chapter team.
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Picture the positioning in your mind. Velour's hands moved from the top of Cadance's thighs to a breath away from fish taco territory, then slipped around to the outside of Cadance's upper thighs, which is the hip. It was a very deliberate tease.
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Remember, my confusion was because it said upper things, not thighs.
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Hmm, so it is. A typo that my brain automatically corrected as I read it because nothing else would make sense in the context.
And now I won't be able to stop seeing it either.
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Enjoy.
Been reading this story a while, and this chapter has undoubtedly been the best yet. Really hoping for the eventual Cadance/Shining couple and the deescalation of Shining/Velvet/Velour. Don't mistake me, it's hot but not suitable for a long term relationship. As soon as they sort their ***t out the better off they will be.
Never before I have read a clopfic that left me so conflicted while I'm still enjoying it. On one hand it's hot and well written, on the other I feel the urge to slap some sense in all the characters (except for Twiley, but that's because she's still a little innocent cinnamon roll at this point and she's not aware of what's going on).
... this is like saying "I'll never set my car on fire" only to burn it after changing the license plates. It doesn't matter if the way she looks or her personality are different, she's still your mother!
Oooooh oh oh, Velvet, you can run as much as you want, but it's just a pointless way to try to avoid the inevitable. Ignoring a problem doesn't solve it. Please, don't go easy on her. She may not be the only one to blame for this mess, but she surely poured a lot of gasoline on the fire.
Still voting on
Shining/Velvet/Velour/Cadence
With a side of Zebra.
But I digress, the story is progressing into some finely laid issues presented and given details on the finer things of the Prostitution and the Awkward system of 'Asking out'.
Keep up the good work.
I'm enjoying the story, even if the sex is getting a little, repetitive. I'd classify this as a "started for the clop, stayed for the Story" I can't wait to see how this gets resolved!
Well, I'm caught up. Quite a mess they're in. Looking forward to the resolution. As much as I find some of the characters... eh... disagreeable, I'm still invested in seeing what happens to them. So that counts for something, for you, as a writer.
I am a bit annoyed about a attitude Cadence and Velour have about forgiveness and guilt/blame. They are both angry about what Shining did to Sugar Swirl and seems to consider it unforgivable if he had gotten violent with her. But when it comes to Velvet and what I would call abusing her son it is something to understand and forgive. It seems it did not matter if Velvet had warnings before what she did and Shining did not or whatever circumstances there was as apparently: Shining did something worse or could have.
Yes he should say he is sorry and yes he should not have gotten angry at Sugar Swirl but if forgiveness and understanding is fair for Velvet then I think it is fair for Shining too. Even if he had gotten violent.
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How about no.
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She's getting her comeuppance, don't worry.
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Thanks! See you at the con.
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The story will like end in about five more chapters. Thanks for commenting.
I'm kinda confused. Does this mean Twilight Velvet is the main antagonist of her own story?
I don't hate Velvet but I kinda like that twist.
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wonderfull deep story , its been over a year any updates on the next chapter?
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Over a year? Neigh, the last update was in July!
so, six mouths since th last update, I feel I must ask if this is still a thing?
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Yeah, it's still going on. I haven't forgotten, I've just had writer's block pretty bad; it happens to me every so often. I will update for sure this month. I've been having writer's block, I'm sorry and it sucks, so rather than force things and shart out a chapter just to keep the updates coming, I've taken a bit of a break from writing. I want to make a good product when it's ready rather than just crap out the last parts while running on empty and ruin the endgame of the story. A rushed story is forever bad, but a story let to simmer and be refined is ultimately good. The events of the last act of the story are all charted out, all that remains is the implementation. I know ya'll really like this story and I'm honestly really really proud of it myself, so I want to actually end it well rather than disappoint by being hasty just to shove chapters out the door. I'm about 4K words into the new chapter and I'm talking with Sparky about it. Rest assured, you'll get your new chapters. Sorry it's taken for fucking ever.
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hey it's cool, dude I've had some bad writer's block my self so don't stress about it. I just wanted to cheek so I would know wheather to keep this in my tracking folder or move it to one of my other folders
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Thanks. I really do feel crappy about taking so long, but I know that ya'll'd hate it if I hammered one out just for the sake of putting something out there regardless of if it held to the quality you've come to expect.
>>kalash93
I just started this story this morning, and I was so interested in where the story was going, I shotgunned the whole thing and just finished "Molting" about 2 minutes ago. I'm really excited to see what the next chapter holds, but please don't feel bad about taking a long time, or pressured to push out the next chapter. I know all about having to take breaks to let your creativity return, and it's something you just have to do sometimes. I'm certainly going to have my eye firmly planted on this one, so you'll have at least one person returning for more, even if it's a year from now. ;)
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Thanks, I made a blog explaining it, plus a teaser. I really do feel bad about how long I've taken to get new content out. I'm thrilled genuine to read you marathoned the whole thing and couldn't top. I swear the last chapters will be worthy of a binge from beginning to end.
It was at this moment, Cadence fucking died.