Shining Armor is a young adult and taking an interest in mares. A certain mare very close to him can help him in a very special way. Incest. Clop in every chapter.
OK, Shiny. "Think with the big head" time. Think about the increasingly clingy and manipulative series of messages on your phone. Think about this exchange:
“You enlisted your guard detail to track me down, you came all the way to Manehattan, and had me brought here for a first date?”
“Of course. You know, being a princess isn’t the easiest job in the world. Let's just say you caught my eye. Do you honestly think that I suggested you go into ROC just to see you end up in Celestia's detail? [...] I like your personality, and I've had the biggest crush on you for like ever.”
Next, she tricks you into revealing details you just said you don't want to talk about. Then she tries to blackmail you into talking by threatening to leave and sticking you with the bill, after you just said you don't have the cash to throw around.
Fantastic chapter, I really enjoyed it. I love the Staff Sergeant, and I also really like the way you write Cadance too. The cafe scene was excellent. My only complaint is that the tense and POV jumped around a bit from third person to second person during the cafe scene, which was a bit jarring. Otherwise though, awesome and I can't wait to see how Lurrve Princess reacts.
wow this is how to drop a huge bomb and turn it in to a cliffhanger. some how i see Cadance frozen totally locked up. ram failure reboot required. love the story grate work team.
I feel like she already made the connection of Eventide being Velvet because of the envelope being given to her by Velvet sooooo imma say shes not gonna freak out but be only mildly shocked
I actually wrote the cafe scene for Kalash. Though I did do it in my usual style of present tense. Kalash had to translate it back to past tense, and likely something got missed. Not a big deal. But glad you love the chapter. It was a good one.
8832379 I'll admit I kinda botched it in this chapter and am working on explaining it better next time. Don't worry, Cadance isn't some bonkers stalker. She has some very good reasons to be worried for Shiny and to want to know what's going on with him.
8832924 Thanks, Silverwind. New chappy coming soon. Sparky already told you about what went on with that.
8833362 A couple more days to go until you see what happens next. #GetHype
8833735 A thing to remember about Cadance is she's a smart girl. All of this serves a purpose and she's got the gears in her head working. To what end? Tune in next time and find out.
8837308 You're actually pretty close. New chapter comes out in a couple days so you'll get to see just how close then.
Great chapter, as usual!
OK, Shiny. "Think with the big head" time. Think about the increasingly clingy and manipulative series of messages on your phone. Think about this exchange:
Next, she tricks you into revealing details you just said you don't want to talk about. Then she tries to blackmail you into talking by threatening to leave and sticking you with the bill, after you just said you don't have the cash to throw around.
The correct response to all this is very simple:
Let's see if Cadence finds this wrong or kinky.
Fantastic chapter, I really enjoyed it. I love the Staff Sergeant, and I also really like the way you write Cadance too. The cafe scene was excellent.
My only complaint is that the tense and POV jumped around a bit from third person to second person during the cafe scene, which was a bit jarring. Otherwise though, awesome and I can't wait to see how Lurrve Princess reacts.
wow this is how to drop a huge bomb and turn it in to a cliffhanger.
some how i see Cadance frozen totally locked up.
ram failure reboot required.
love the story grate work team.
Oh to fly on that wall.
Cadence's train of thought just got violently derailed. Went from Meg Lev to 18th century steam engine, all in one go. In the time between heartbeats.
I feel like she already made the connection of Eventide being Velvet because of the envelope being given to her by Velvet sooooo imma say shes not gonna freak out but be only mildly shocked
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I actually wrote the cafe scene for Kalash. Though I did do it in my usual style of present tense. Kalash had to translate it back to past tense, and likely something got missed. Not a big deal. But glad you love the chapter. It was a good one.
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Thanks!
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I'll admit I kinda botched it in this chapter and am working on explaining it better next time. Don't worry, Cadance isn't some bonkers stalker. She has some very good reasons to be worried for Shiny and to want to know what's going on with him.
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Wait a couple more days and find out.
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Thanks, Silverwind. New chappy coming soon. Sparky already told you about what went on with that.
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A couple more days to go until you see what happens next. #GetHype
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A thing to remember about Cadance is she's a smart girl. All of this serves a purpose and she's got the gears in her head working. To what end? Tune in next time and find out.
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You're actually pretty close. New chapter comes out in a couple days so you'll get to see just how close then.
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woot i will be watching closely.
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Sweet i cant wait to read it
Space, the final frontier.
And now even Cadance is OOC.
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Pretty much this.