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This story is a sequel to Friendship is Shining: Family Matters
While everyone is coming to terms with Twiley going back to Canterlot, Pinkie Pie finds herself trying to do too much. Then she remembers an old story that her grandmother used to tell her. Now Pinkie thinks she can be everywhere she needs to at once. Unfortunately, it turns out that the magic comes at a price.
Can Pinkie's friends save her before it's too late?
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Excellent start to your latest Shinyverse story. I can definitely sympathize with Twily concerning how she has (so far) had no luck making new friends now that she's back in Canterlot. And, yeah, I don't blame her for being upset for what Discord did, but at least Luna is trying to be helpful. I have to admit it IS funny to see how quick Twily can go from angry to adorkable.
I'm going to guess that this is going to combine elements of "Too Many Pinkie Pies" with elements of some of the Luna-centered episodes.
And, just out curiosity, will there be a Sunset Shimmer story later on in the "season" that goes into more detail concerning her master plan without revealing too much?
At any rate, I'll definitely be looking forward to more of this story, but will also understand if real life gets in the way for a while.
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You got the first part right, and kind of with the second. Since once the main action starts it all happens over a short period, there's not really much in the way of Luna and Twilight. Only about four chapters with them, the posted included.
In answer to your question, there's not going to be another Sunset story this "season." I am actually trying to set things up for the "finale," which I am working toward with maybe two or three more stories to get there.
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Fair enough. Thanks very much for the answer.
Whoa! Finally, another installment for Friendship is Shining! Awesome! This is one of my favorite alternate universes!
Hm, interesting that Aria Blaze is a royal guard here. Is she taking the role of someone else? Like maybe Cadence?
This is, of course, a great, emotional chapter. I LOVED the chat between Sonata and Shining. The compare and contrast between the two sets of siblings is a great touch.
Anyway, I will very definitely be looking forward to more, but will also be completely understanding if real life doesn't allow you as much writing time as you would like.
Wonder if Sonata's going to find out what's become of Aria?
Once again, excellent job on the latest chapter. The scene with Pinkie and the Cakes was quite well done. And yeah, she's not the only one who is curious as to what her Pinkie Sense is trying to tell her. At any rate, I am definitely going to be looking forward to more of this, but will also be willing to be patient.
I think her Pinkie Sense was trying to tell her not to look into the mirror pool/pond.
I have to say, this is a darn good chapter once again. I really love how Twily's dream went from surreal to scary to heart-warming at exactly the right times. And, yeah, I really got a big kick out of seeing her take some of her understandable frustrations out on Discord's dream self. In addition, excellent foreshadowing for Discord's future semi-redemption.
I'll very definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also be completely understanding if real world concerns and/or lack of inspiration get in the way.
Hm, wonder if that favor card is gonna come into play in a future story as a Chekov's Gun?
Oh no! So with each clone she makes, the real Pinkie loses a part of her existence?!
Yikes! Great job on this latest chapter. Indeed, that was a well-thought-out side-effect to the Mirror Pool's use. Anyway, I have a bad feeling about the next few chapters, but "bad feeling" in the way that's good for story-telling.
At any rate, I'll very certainly be looking forward to more, but will also be completely understanding about the fact that real world concerns have to come first.
Nice chapter, but you may want to edit where you wrote "and" twice in a row.
Twilight being Luna's student would be wonderful, though I have to wonder if Luna would be as playful about Twilight's over eagerness to please and the problems that could lead to?
I have to say I LOVED the chat between Celestia and Luna, and yeah, Twiley becoming Luna's first personal student definitely has potential (especially since it would be a good mirror of Celestia and Shiny in this universe). However, like SPB12, I have to wonder if Luna would have the patience for Twi's over-eagerness that Celly in canon does. Well, I suppose, at worst, it would still be a good learning experience for the both of them.
At any rate, I'll very definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also be quite willing to respect the fact that real world concerns have to come first.
Again, absolutely superb job on this latest chapter. The characterizations (particularly in response to this many Pinkie Pies), exchanges (particularly between Lyra and Bon Bon, the Cake Twins and Zecora and Crystal Heart) and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. I mean,
I know the mess will probably get fixed with the real Pinkie Pie all right and learning a valuable lesson, but it will be intriguing to see HOW.
At any rate, I will very certainly be looking forward to more, but will also respect that real world concerns have to come first.
Well, at least Zecora was able to get the real Pinkie out from underneath the entrance to the mirror pond. Which begs the question: Does Zecora know of the mirror pond's existence?
Nice chapter as usual, but I found I couple minor things you may want to edit.
That should probably be "wouldn't".
And that should be "noise".
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... now I want to find a way to work a jingling nose into a story...
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Maybe a bell gets stuck to a nose ring, or maybe it's around Hearth's Warming and they crash into a door or something, getting a bell stuck up there?
Once again, excellent job on the latest chapter. The exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-ups are all quite well done. I particularly liked Spike and Shiny's reactions to the Pinkie duplicates AND Zecora's appearance with the real Pinkie.
I'll very definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also be quite willing to be patient.
Hm, so the mirror pool works differently in this universe? It's probably cursed. But that still begs the question of how Zecora knows about it, yet doesn't know about a way to get rid of the clones or wake Pinkie from her comatose state.
Hello there. Thanks again for getting the next chapter up. I really appreciate you going to the effort. Once again, splendid job on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up in all the right places. I particularly liked the others' reactions to the info Shiny provided and the OFFICIAL introduction to YOUR universe's Chrysalis (who, I'm guessing, at least at present, is nowhere near as nasty as her canon counterpart [well, either that, or she is A LOT better at HIDING IT than her canon counterpart is]) .
At any rate, I will very definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also be quite willing to be patient.
Hm, Princess Chrysalis? So then, I guess she's not going to be the antagonist of the royal wedding, assuming you do that? That actually begs the question, who will the wedding involve? Shining Armor and Chrysalis, or Cadence and somepony we've yet to meet?
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We haven't met them. Not telling who, but people could probably guess if they thought about it.
Although if they do, I can't confirm, and hope they keep it to themselves for now.
8403368 Well, you've got me stumped. Also, I take it that Princess Chrysalis is not an antagonist in this universe?
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No. She's a member of an allying kingdom.
Not really since she's just trying to save her friend.
Again, great job on this latest chapter. I particularly liked Chrysalis's reason for using the disguise and assumed name as well as the takedown of a few of the Pinkie duplicates. Excellent job on the characterizations, exchange and future chapter set-up in all the right places.
I'll very assuredly be looking forward to more of this, but will also be VERY willing to be patient.
all of the friendship is shinning stories need they own group
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They may not have their own group (and I don't really think they need one), but they do have their own folder in the Blame Defender2222 group.
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ahh that good to knew, it good AU that I enjoy did even see this story come out till found it today as I was reread the others
Four down, who knows how many more to go?
Well, that's another four clones down. Anyway, excellent job on the exchange and characterizations. I particularly liked how Rarity and Spike responded to and planned concerning the situation.
And, on another note, I have a feeling Rarity is fully aware of Spike's crush on her and is trying to set him up with Sweetie Belle as a way of letting him down gently (I.e. "I'm flattered, but you're about a decade too young for me. You ARE, however, exactly the right age for my little sister."). I COULD be wrong about that, though.
At any rate, I will very definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also be quite understanding about the fact real world concerns must come first.
Nice chapter once again. Found a minor typo.
That should be "oven".
Well, at least it was Street Fighter and not Mortal Kombat, because that would've ended very badly.
Once again, excellent work on this latest chapter. The exchanges were quite well done (especially the one where Rainbow and Shiny are discussing - a certain bad situation - and how it still has a good side) as were the characterizations and the fighting-game-style action. And I have a feeling we're getting pretty close to the end of the story (unless I miss my guess, the next chapter will either be the last, second-to-last or third-to-last).
At any rate, I will very definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also be extremely willing to understand that real world concerns must come first.
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Never even crossed my mind. I was thinking of: Street Fighter II; Street Fighter II Turbo: Super Street Fighter II Turbo; and probably a few more I can't remember. Plus:
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There's actually six more chapters, although four have to do with the immediate story-line.
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Okay. Thanks very much for the correction.
Spike's first kiss, and it's from Silver Spoon? Do I smell the possibility of Silver Spoon pining for Spike?
Again, excellent job on this latest chapter. The action, exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up were all well done in all the right places. I particularly liked Silver's gratitude for the rescue (and Spike's reaction TO said gratitude) as well as the little bit of karma concerning Diamond and Derpy getting her chance to shine. And, yeah, I should have mentioned earlier that, well, I DO really like the fact that you are giving a much better reason for the heroes to take the measures they are than Twilight and her friends had in the actual episode.
At any rate, I will very definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also be quite willing to be patient.
Very nice chapter. One minor thing you may want to edit.
That should be "too".
Again, superb job on this latest chapter. I really appreciate you going to the effort to do this. Once again, the exchanges, characterizations, action and future chapter set-up in all the right places. I particularly liked the interactions between AJ and Chrysalis as they are making their plan, the little bit of humor concerning Flitter and that one Pinkie clone AND the conformation that, at least, destroying the clones ISN'T murder.
At any rate, I will very definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also be very willing to be patient.
Nice chapter with one minor thing you might want to take care of.
Pretty sure there's a word missing there.
Hm, do I sense the possibility of Lyra being one of Shining Armor's friends from "Celestia's School for Gifted Unicorns"?
Once again, excellent job on the latest chapter. The exchanges, characterizations, action and future chapter set-up are all quite well done in all the right places. I particularly liked Rainbow and Sonata's chat concerning sarcasm and the implication that Lyra was an old schoolmate of Shiny's . I just hope Bonnie doesn't get TOO jealous if Lyra speaks nicely about Shiny (:-D).
At any rate, I will very certainly be looking forward to more of this, but will also be very willing to be patient.
This chapter makes me wonder if the author has read the Tumblr comic, "Diane, the Clone that Got Away".
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Not regularly. I've read a few of the strips once or twice.