After the events of Rainbow Rocks, Sunset Shimmer sits on a park bench, wallowing about her homesickness and how she is afraid to return to Equestria and confront her past. However, her self-pity is soon disrupted as Trixie comes along, wishing to learn real magic. In the process, the two make up over their confrontation during the Battle of the Bands.
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"So, I asked Princess Twilight Sparkle and her response was: 'Trixie? Uh-huh, no-how, no-way!'"
"So... Trixie senses a little wriggle room there?"
"She also said something about knowing your counterpart and that 'one of her is enough for this infinity'."
"... Trixie should also get the Princess a gift to smooth the transaction."
A very good point. I wonder what the local human authorities would say about pony illegal immigration.
I kind of wished that they had gone into Equestria in this story, but hay, that's why there's the unupdated tourist agency fic of yours, right?
Totally can't wait for that story to be updated by the way, so no pressure.
Sunset: Guess who's back?
Twilight: Sunset! You've returned!
Sunset: That's right! And I brought some friends!
Bunch of ponies: DE-STROY EQUESTRIA!
Twilight: Oh no! Sunset, you've turned evil again! How could this happen?
Bunch of ponies: *suddenly bursts into laughter*
Sunset: Sorry, Twilight.
Twilight: That... That's not funny.
Trixie: Actually, it is. It really is.
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Build a wall around the statue. Make Equestria pay for it.
7937362 That's in-character for Twilight. Doesn't make me wanna smack her less, but it's in-character for her.
Anyway, very nice. Good conversation between the two. Nice to see Sunset realizing that, no, she doesn't have any real wiggle-room when it comes to bad deeds. ;)
7937362 "I hear Princess Twilight REALLY loves quesadillas."
7937434 Imagine Twilight unexpectedly having to face border officials. If she doesn't have prep time, she might go on a Lesson Zero freak-out
7937848 Eh. It's coming, sooner or later. I have four incomplete fics, two of them that I'm hoping to wrap up by the end of March. I want to rewrite the first chapter, but after that I can get moving on that again.
7938039 You...you, I like you. Have your comment upvote
7938083 Yep, thanks! Something I very much like doing a lot of this month is capturing moments I imagine could have happened in the canon show/movieverse and giving life to them.
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Thus announced by Thrump
I really like this story. I would have asked for a sequal, but you basically point us to one in the author's notes, so thanks!
Well, the government of Equestria and the government of Earth are very different things. I mean, one side you have an opaque government that has secret agencies tasked with rounding up strange creatures and locking them up in a hellish prison, and who might be tempted to pollute the other side of the portal by dumping extremely dangerous things through it. And on the other side, you have Earth.
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Hey now, Equestria's not sending us their best! They're sending us their sirens, their megalomaniac unicorns.....
and some, I assume, are good princesses.
is there/will there, be a sequel to this?
I could actually see this happening.
I like it. That was a fine dealing with Sunsets feelings and all that stuff.
This is what I look for in EQG fics. :D
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Thanks for the comment!
I hae always felt Equestria Girls is a lot more open to slice of life than anything else. There's some potential for epics (and I have one in mind I've been struggling with for years), but on the whole it felt to me fics in the high school setting should be more laid-back.
It's funny that you looked at this one-shot specifically. A lot of my one-shots I look back at and cringe as I see spots every paragraph that I could edit. Re-reading this one, it's a lot better on a technical level. There's probably a couple of hundred words that I could trim, but otherwise every line either supports Sunset's character struggles, the conversation between Sunset and Trixie at large, or a couple of separate bits of symbolism that are loosely tied throughout the fic.
That's... that not how greeting works.
"Was the Fall Formal not a tipoff?"
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"I figured that was just Principal Celestia trying to make the dance more interesting."
Sunset thought back to all the balls, galas, and similar events scheduled by both Celestias. "Okay, fair."
(Oh, you addressed that.
"She absolutely plastered it over social media. The meme is already mutating."
"Of course it is."
In any case, brilliant bit of accidentally supportive Trixie. And I do hope she got to go to Equestria at some point, especially if she encountered herself. Trixies meeting each other always make for comedy gold.
I liked this for what it was and had a good time reading it, but it felt... cumbersome? Heavy? Repetitive? I'm not quite sure what the right word is, so lemme explain with an example.
Everything here is fine until "looking angry." That's something we can pick up from the dialogue. The interrobang actually puts in good work here. So to see it explicitly said like that feels off. It feels clunky and repetitive. There were a number of similar instances throughout the story, and they kinda hampered the story's flow.
Like I said, I still enjoyed the story, but I couldn't help but pick up on those things.
Nice fic, I really enjoyed reading this.
Come on Sunset, it's been three years. How much longer are you going to make Trixie wait?Class clowns like Pinkie
I love that line. Really Trixie-like
Sunset's doubts were wonderfully done, and Trixie was surprisingly less egoistic than I expected. A very interesting and ejoyable read