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It's been a month since Sunset and Trixie started dating, and Trixie is dragging Sunset off to CornFest 2018, to meet her parents and see where she grew up. But family isn't always what it's cracked up to be, and sometimes there's a reason to leave home behind.


My own (vanity) entry to the Sunset Shipping Contest: Journeys

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So... what happens if you win your own contest?

JMP

...can your own entry place if you're one of the judges?

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Read the authors note.

JMP

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Ah, apologies. I wrote that from the description page, and hadn't quite read the story or your note yet.

JMP

I can't help but compare Trixie's dad here to Artemis in Albinocorn's stories. Just the same vibes I got. Anyways, this was a fun little story.

That was really cute. It's certainly a different take on Trixie than I've ever seen done before, and an interesting one at that. I wish I felt like Sunset were a stronger character, but my impression of her was that she was mostly a foil for Trixie to play off of. She said what she liked about Trixie, but I didn't feel like her inner dialogue really reflected her words or actions.

Still a charming little story.

Ahem.

The Midwest is NOT all corn.

We also have soybeans and cows.

They moo.

The cows. Not the soybeans. Except around the Gunderson place, but we try not to talk about that.

Let’s not forget the belt buckles. Growing up in Kansas if the guys didn’t have a large buckle, chances were it doubled as a bottle opener.

Hay. All of the hay.

awww....

This was cute. Keep up the good work! :twilightsmile:

I love how Sunset casually mind melds three people, triggering an avalanche of emotional revelations, and then just peaces out.

What? I grew up in the midwest. There's nothing but corn.

I live in Nebraska, A.K.A the corn state.

Meanwhile, back in Equestria, Starlight Glimmer's eyebrow is twitching. Somepony is using a mind-reading spell to circumvent a knotty personal problem, she thinks indignantly. That's supposed to be my thing!

I really like the idea behind Sunset using her powers to cheat with emotional problems. We need more of that.

A fascinating take on Trixie's backstory. Cornville rings true as a place where people live rather than just a set piece created for the protagonists to explore, and Trixie's history there feels real. Nostalgia and an old environment can do strange things to a person, peeling back layers to reveal parts of them you never knew existed.

And Sunset cheating her way to an emotional resolution was fantastic. :rainbowlaugh:

Thank you for this, and best of luck in the... er, well, thank you for it. :derpytongue2:

Why do you run a contest if not for naming yourself the winner?

Oo, I like this one. Might actually be my favorite story by you! Too bad that it's your own contest :twilightsheepish:

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Lol, heard there was a Cucumber Festival once. Where don't ask was years ago.

This Sunset seems a little bitchier snarkier than I recall from the show, but it’s not altogether unfitting, especially when thrown into a situation like this.

Shucks, was this ever corny. Better than anything I could cobble together though. :rainbowlaugh:

Ok, that sounded funnier in my head.:derpytongue2:

A nice little piece, you did a great job making the OCs come alive and they really demonstrated Trixie's duality well. Sunset was also great all around.

Pfft, Sunset complaining about a measly four-hour car ride? What a lightweight.

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And worse yet, some small part of Sunset was annoyed that the girls were just plain bad at it. When Sunset was a bully, she had standards.

Sick fuckin' burn. XD

Which was somewhat impressive, considering that the audience was mostly aged four to nine, and some of those little bastards were shrill .

I need this on my wall. XD

Shit, that was great. :D

You did great. And hey, you even made that fire look like part of the show, without getting the fire department involved.”
Trixie scoffed. “I think the flash paper in my wand must have gotten misaligned.

Gee, I wonder how that happened?

She grabbed the first prop she could find, a magic wand of sorts, and the tip came off, revealing some paper stuffed inside. With a shrug, she put the tip back on and tossed it into the open trunk.

Going back home can be painful. Good story, flows very well.

Trixie pursed her lips and looked up. “Really? What happened?”

Sunset happened. Just like Starlight made her past terrible.

I love the Dashing and Amazing Jack Pot, he's dashing and amazing. Now I want a whole story about Beatrixe leaving home, tracking down her father, learning from him, and becoming the Great and Powerful Trixie we all know and love.

It's funny because I grew up in a town almost exactly like the one in this story, except it was the more northern part of Midwest. So instead of Cornfest it was Trout festival, and there were a lot more pickup-driving bearded men who treat shotguns the same way they treat a fishing pole.

The amount of corn is this fic is slightly distressing.

And I'm from the Midwest.

A burst of light and blue smoke filled the room. When Sunset finished coughing, she looked up to see Trixie’s father standing above them. No longer the disheveled man sleeping on a couch in the mid afternoon, he now posed stalwart, clean shaven, and full of life.

Why am I not surprised he'd do that. :ajbemused:

Trixie shrugged. “You get used to it after a while.” She took a deep breath through her nose, then sighed, “In fact, it’s almost kind of nostalgic.”

I feel the same when it comes to the weather in Arizona and Minnesota. I've been to both states for much of my life to visit family or vacation. :ajsmug:

Sunset grit her teeth and slowly managed to extract herself from the hug as the rant dragged on. What the hell was she supposed to say to that, anyway? Was that really a thing humans cared about? She had such a hard time remembering what was and wasn’t taboo here sometimes.

Best to just go with the flow. :unsuresweetie:

Sunset stared at the whole exchange, her mouth hanging open. Had they really said all that? She should have stepped in, said something, done something. She still could. Although the first thing that came to mind was punching someone in the face, which was probably not the appropriate response.

Still a lot to take in. :twilightoops:

Gritting her teeth, Sunset leaned over the pool table, and pocketed another ball. In a few minutes, she’d run the table. That was one way to blow off a little bit of steam. She stood and wiped the sweat off her brow, triumphant

triumphant.*

“All fries made with 100% beef tallow!”

https://m.

Sunset watched her leave, then heard her climb down the stairs.

That did something alright. :facehoof:

“Uh-huh!” I used to go play down by the creek all the time. I’d come home covered in mud, my mom would get so mad.” She pointed down at the inlet, her eyes alight. “That grotto down there was my secret hideout. I’d gather up all sorts of sticks and logs and leaves and build furniture and stuff. It all washed away a long time ago, but I was super proud of it at the time.”

"Uh-huh! I used to go*

It probably wasn’t the crowd Trixie dreamed to play for, but she certainly performed like they were the only crowd in the world that mattered. She’d nailed it all almost perfectly, and the few slight mistakes Sunset had caught had been played off as if it had all been on purpose, much to the delight of the kids.

It's the thought that counts. :twilightsmile:

Her geode flashed with a bright light. Something like this took a little bit more effort than simply readings someone's thought, but in the end it was just sharing communication in a few more directions. Memories flashed between the three girls, of pain, of struggles, of hardship, of understanding.

Now there is something I wish she did in the show!!! :pinkiegasp:

Ngl, I wasn't sure I'd end up liking this after getting halfway through, but in the end I did. While this doesn't change my overall opinion on Trixie, I enjoy stories like this where Sunset is shipping with someone that isn't Sci Twi. Nevertheless, well done. :raritywink:

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