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Shimmer Shy


"I know. And counting on my own experiences, they'll forgive you." ~Sunset Shimmer :heart: SunLight FriendShipper. Sorry guys, I'm not going to be active here anymore!

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Sunset's had enough. After enduring weeks full of nightmares, hallucinations, and sleepless nights, she just wants it all to stop. In desperate need for a solution, she does the first thing that would make sense...but was it the right thing to do?


An idea I had while writing my other story, Fall Apart. Hope you like it?

On hiatus because I may or may not continue. :derpytongue2:

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 13 )

Please continue this it is amazing so far

Yes, please continue this! I really want ot see what happens, and if Twilight can fix THIS mess WITHOUT it taking two and a half years to do so!

The Great and Powerful Trixie urges you to continue, a brilliant mare such as myself can't bare the thought of this story being discontinued!

This raises a lot of questions. Why was the portal open? Why did Twilight not answer? Where did Sunset get that brilliant idea? What is going on with the poor girl? I MUST KNOW...

Please continue. :twilightsmile:

Please continue! This chapter was so good and I can't wait for a possible more!!! :heart:

I am curious now. Hopefully you'll add to this.

This is great so far, please continue ;u;

Excellent concept, but I don't think anyone (actively writing) in the community has the skill to pull off such a story without being a oneshot or immediately faceplanting into a generic 'high school girls doing high school stuff with MLP names'-story.

Wait, what? It's over already?

Yeah, this has no business being marked as "Complete." As it currently stands, it's super unsatisfying. But as the first chapter of a longer story? It's a good hook.

Call me crazy but I kinda like the ending. You get eased into Sunset making the choice, then it hits you with like this sudden, strong pang of instant regret and dread, and LEAVES you with it. That HURTS

But it's still a strong ending.

Abrupt? Yeah, no doubt. Not necessarily a bad thing, though.

Does it feel incomplete? Maybe. I could see it as complete but I totally get why it seems otherwise.

Good? Y e s.

You're not the only one having nightmares, Sunset
(my nightmares are 100% related to my nemesis)

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