Lightning Derp

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Lightning Dust suffers a life changing eye injury during a solo attempt to perform a Sonic Rainboom, leaving her unable to see straight. One kind gray mare hopes to help her overcome this new impairment and get back on track.

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Dlaf rferg

Dlaf rferg #1 · Dec 15th, 2016 · 1 · 1 ·

This better be a ship.

Also, great story!

Game-BeatX14

Game-BeatX14 #2 · Dec 15th, 2016 · · ·

7796689 Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.

I wanted to hint at some light shipping in this story without it being too serious. Like a little sailboat instead of a giant cargo ship.

Dlaf rferg

Dlaf rferg #3 · Dec 15th, 2016 · · ·

7796706 Yusssssss ship.

Fire Seeker12

Fire Seeker12 #4 · Dec 16th, 2016 · · ·

Unexpected but... I like it. Maybe see more of this kind of unexpected ships.

Game-BeatX14

Game-BeatX14 #5 · Dec 16th, 2016 · · ·

7797133 I love to write about uncommon pairings, keeps things interesting. Thanks for the follow!

Fire Seeker12

Fire Seeker12 #6 · Dec 16th, 2016 · · ·

7797167 No problem. If I may suggest a uncommon pairing. Spitfire and Fluttershy. Comment back to see what you think.

TerraZeal

TerraZeal #7 · Dec 16th, 2016 · 1 · ·

Awww. I've never seen a Lightning/Derpy fic. Please continue or write a sequel. I liked Lightning Dust. She was like a more honest version of Rainbow Dash. Braggart, yes, but she lived up to everything she said. Too bad she was so reckless. She could have been an awesome Wonderbolt, and I would have loved seeing how Rainbow dealt with having to work with Lightning.

Game-BeatX14

Game-BeatX14 #8 · Dec 16th, 2016 · · ·

7797182 It's a good suggestion, but I don't really have any ideas for what kind of story to write with them. Plus there are too many other fics that I've already started writing that need to be finished first :/

Game-BeatX14

Game-BeatX14 #9 · Dec 16th, 2016 · · ·

7797323 She's one of my favorite characters, despite her relatively short screen time in the series. I'm super glad you enjoyed it :D

Not sure if there will be a sequel, since this was intended to be a short one-shot. But there is always a possibility if I feel like expanding on it later :D

reflective vagrant

reflective vagrant #10 · Dec 16th, 2016 · 1 · ·

kinda reminds me of my own story with Lightning Dust and Derpy. (I refuse to call her muffins unless I'm somehow in a court room) It's not my best work, but I don't regret writing it.

libertydude

libertydude #11 · Dec 16th, 2016 · 1 · ·

That was actually a pretty decent story. I think maybe it would've worked better if it was longer; that way, the transitioning might've been more natural and flowing. But as is, it's a sweet tale. Good job!

Fire Seeker12