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After another long day court and Celestia is ready to just let Luna take over for the night. It's not until she receives a surprise visit from her former protege with some pony she never thought she'd ever see bearing a message she'd never thought would be true.
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Aww, so sweet.
Sunset Shimmer at least once needs to return to Equestria to see her former teacher, or mom in this story. But somehow I think her true home is in the Human World, with her friends the Human Five so sadly I don't think we'll likely see this come about.
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Thanks for the positive feedback. I agree with wanting Sunset to go back and at last talk to Celestia but I doubt it'll ever happen. As I mentioned in the notes; it's part of the reason I made this fic.
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Thing is... Sunset clearly miss having magic. She ecstatic in LoE when she find that she have powers. So my opinion that sooner of later she return.
Damn, just damn.
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Is that a good damn?
Wow. Just...wow. This was good.
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Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it.
I somehow skipped over her age in the story. I thought twilight was bringing her over to be taken care of, when it was just her and dew. Oh well. Still heart warming.
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Damn right.
Aww, this is an adorable stor--
"There was an accident. They were coming back from celebrating their anniversary and the plane crashed. They died instantly and this was left in her will along with instructions on how to contact this world's Twilight. It came with a letter as well just in case."
....damn.
Wow! Incredible story! I loved it.
I read this and realized that I had a tear dripping down my cheek. I am not at all the type to do that sort of thing, but here I am. I guess that's all there is to say here.
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Wow, that has to be the best response to a story I've written ever. Thank you for enjoying it.
I'm not crying....
I'm bawling. It's just...
Yeah. It's great. Nice job. I'm going to go dry off my desk now.
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Thank you. Glad you liked it.
The title reminded me of Ink Rose's "Little Sunshine" song, and damn this gave me feels, too.
Personally, I'm not a fan of characters thinking their thoughts aloud, but that wasn't the core of the story.
This was enjoyable, if a bit too quick and light on details for me.
Thanks for writing :)
(And definitely check out the song, if you haven't)
THIS WAS SO SAD BUT SO GOOD.
SO MANY FEELS, AND SUCH GOOD WRITING.
NOW PARDON ME WHILE I GO CRY.
Sad story hits you right in the gut, but oh so very wonderful
This needs some work.
First off, you should take some steps to improve your dialogue punctuation. Here's a handy guide from a handy guy on how to do it correctly:
Second, learn your proper its/it's forms. "It's" is always a contraction and nothing else.
And finally, none of your semicolons should exist. Some should be colons and some should be commas, but none should be semicolons.
Underneath all of these mistakes is a pretty reasonable story. It's just hard for that story to shine in its current state.
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This sure aged well