After so many years, Sunset Shimmer is finally ready to return to Equestria. At long last, she will be able to reconnect with the land she was born in and feel the magic flow through her body once more. Most of all, she’s ready to face the mentor she betrayed, to apologize for everything and beg for her forgiveness.
Princess Celestia is eager to see her old prodigal student as well. Finally, she will have the chance to forgive her and reaffirm her love for her. What’s more, she will finally be able to give Sunset Shimmer what she has earned for herself and fulfill all the dreams she had since she was a filly.
At least, that’s how it was supposed to go.
Cover art by Bluse
Chapters (2)
Wow... that was good. When the pain was introduced, my first thought was that Sunset was dying and going back to see Celestia for the last time.
If this isn't a setup for a sequel, then I'll eat the hair of a Sunset Shimmer pony figure.
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This one, to be specific.
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Bon appetit. This story is a stand alone; however, it does allude to events that will happen in new, future stories.
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And I was looking forward to a sequel too
Well crud
Also, I think you meant stand alone, not along.
Alot of readers here don't take too kindly to the "Twilight not wanting to be a princess/alicorn" business but I always had a thing for the concept of not just Twilight but other ponies too. Some writers try to make a unique story that makes it seem like it's not another whine fest while another good chunk just keeps giving us the same thing over and over again. Sadly almost all of them end the same where the character just accepts and everything is hunky dory after that where it just comes off as a temper tantrum instead of "That's not what I stand for" rebuttal. With Twilight, that's pretty much where the stories get boring and repetitive because it's almost formulaic and end the same because she has her friends keep coaxing her that her new role is a blessing. Yeah... to them. And it never comes out as her own decision either of what she wants, it's always her friends coaxing her into the role. With Sunset, there is still a sense of getting the upgrade but still saying "F this, F whatever this stands for and more importantly F the idea of princess-hood". Sure it still comes off as ungrateful to not accept the role from the princess of Equestria, but it's also ungrateful for throwing ponies who don't want change into the role. If there was a choice system where you could be either a princess or some other job honor because you turned into an alicorn, i feel that alot would pick the latter. That way the whole princess schtick wouldn't come off as cheap and groan worthy.
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I have encountered pleanty of fics where Sunset became an alicorn/princess, but I was unaware that having her reject it was such a common trend.
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Maybe I dashed your hopes a little too soon
. Don't worry, I'll make it up to you somehow, Pinkie Promise. Also, thanks for the spell-check, the mistake has been corrected.
6720655 i might have seen a couple others but honestly, this one was one of the better ones. Not Sunset rejecting the role alone, but ponies like Starlight (some reason), Fluttershy (ofcourse), and a few others. Also this is the only one I know she rejects the role.
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Good to know that I at least provide a quality version
Huh, that was sad, seeing their reunion end up like that. Not the darkest Sunset/Celestia reunion I've ever read, but in a way this is even sadder since the past arguments were forgiven, but now there's a whole new rift between them. Its always interesting seeing how redeemed Sunset might react to getting wings in fics, but this is probably the harshest reaction I can think of. Though based on Luna's dialogue, once Sunset reached a certain level of harmony/enlightenment her ascension was inevitable, but she's understandably wary of actually being crowned a princess now. I would hope Twilight could get her to come around after some time passes, but I can understand this fic was meant to focus on Celestia's disappointment more.
Sad fic, but glad there were at least a few bits of humor (what didn't happen with Rainbow and too bad they had to skip the musical number).
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Here's one with Pinkie. It's called "Princess Pinkie Cometh... Not" It's really good
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I'm wondering if Sunset will come back with a temporarily-pony and introduce him or her as her 'special somepony'. It might help Celestia a little if it turns out that Sunset has many strong ties to the Human world.
Also... Destiny loves its jests. Could it be that Sunset was always meant to be the first Alicorn Princess of the human world?
This felt kinda silly as I read it.
Twilight doesn't inform Celestia, who based on that thinks that Sunset is going to equestria for good.
With that assumption, instead of informing Sunset of what was happening, she surprises her with it. As does Luna.
Like, I can see Luna doing it as a surprise, it makes sense as far as she knows but Twilight only giving Celestia half the story? Really?
It just felt off. I can see what you were going for but it didn't work for me. I think how fast it seemed contributed as well.
I don't buy it
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Everyone, I have made a decision. If enough people want it, than I will write a sequel to this story. It won't be amything big, just all of Sunset's friends helping her come to terms with what happened and realize that it isn't as bad as she's making it out to be. Also expect to see:
an explanatiom for how Twilight and Flash were able to make their relationship work...
a look at how SciTwi grew into a strong and self-actualized young woman without becoming a clone of pony Twilight...
and some hints about what I have planned for Princess Sunset Shimmer.
If I do write a sequel, than it won't go any furthur than that, but most of my ideas will be used in my upcoming series.
6720254 Is there oing to be a sequel for this?
Well, this was a lovely little piece that disturbingly matched my headcanon's version of Sunset Shimmer on being a princess. Still, an interesting read that explored a little of Sunset's character.
While there was not a huge amount of material to go on, most characterization seemed pretty good (especially Sunset's human friends). Rainbow Dash's reaction particularly stuck with me, and seemed just so genuine.
The one exception is Celestia. While I cannot pinpoint it exactly, her reaction to Sunset's rejection seems a bit too emotional, in my personal opinion.
However, I must comment that the overall situation seems a little contrived. I mean, I can understand Sunset not wanting to be a princess, but Twilight not informing either Sunset or Celestia of what's going on or even hinting at it? I get that a surprise was wanted, but this is one hell of a thing to surprise on anyone.
But, hell, I'm using my own interpretation of Celestia here as a comparison, so who knows.
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I firmly support there being a sequel to this. The writing style is just exquisite, and I would love to see how Sunset's friends react and support her, as well as how they have turned out.
HiddenMaster out.
Im not generally a fan of stories with outcomes like this, but this was certainly well written.
One thing always bothered me though. It appeared here and in some others.
Namely some supposed law that Alicorns have to be princesses. How utterly unworkable is that, if you think about it for a minute.
Sure, Alicorns will stand out, and you can write a title into some records, but you cannot force princessing, in the way that matters. I mean, what would you even do if sunset or whoever just went "no" and didnt do whatever duties shes supposed to have? Throw her in a dungeon? What would that do to the public, nevermind that as a princess, whats stopping her from ordering her way out? Threaten her or her friends with... something?
"Good and Harmonious Ruling" is not something i see as possible to force someone unwilling to do, ever.
Nevermind the problems of giving someone massive power in a system they dont want to be part of.
Is this... related to some other stories I'd need to know first? Because Flash Sentry discovering anything magical at all on his own and without any functioning knowledge of magic really stretches my willingness to suppress my disbelief. I think I'll stop reading for now until I know for sure if all the other references are just flavor text or required reading for this to make sense.
Not saying anything bad about the story itself, I just don't get where all of that came from.
That was a pretty interesting story. Keep up the good work.
sounds like one of my conversations...
Actually, it points out Ponyville's superiority. when faced with a rampaging monster, most of the residents sigh and go about their usual business, only changing their schedule so that they can pick up groceries before the monster wrecks the store.
an alternate plausible reading of this sentence implies a second Princess Sunset. which would be intriguing
Her reaction was kinda like her version of Twilight asking if there was a book on the subject.
I'm not that interested in a sequel, but rather a prequel, as some of the other stuff mentioned as having occurred, such as Flash actually being a magical MacGuyver, is simply outrageous at worst and very fun at best.
Though I am VERY interested in the fact her alicorning was actively ongoing on the human side of the mirror, which implies physical changes to that form as well.
my main complaint is the process of alicorning actually. if it is an intrinsic spark that eventually happens naturally, then why does the magic of friendship matter? It's implied that Friendship is necssary to ascend, while also saying that it would happen anyway. which is it?
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It's not so much that Flash conciously creates anything magical. Rather, his own emotions cause a reaction in the magic around him, which, lets face it, is pretty much how it works in the Equestria Girls universe. Basically, Flash Sentry's magic is a study in how Equestrian magic responds to human emotion, not of his own nonexistant understanding of it. He literally has no idea what he's doing when it happens.
And yes, the text in here refer to stories that have not
and probably never will beyet been written.6724117 Gotcha. I feel it's too much headcanon for me, but you seem to be doing quite well with the story regardless! Thanks for clarifying that.
At the behest of my fans, I have decided to continue writing for this story, but instead of posting a sequel as originally planned, I shall simply add more chapters taking place after Sunset returns to the human world, hence the Incomplete status. There will probably be only one more chapter unless I decide that it is too long and split it in two.
This sounds like something I would definitely read if you ever made it! I liked the whole story though and I could understand Sunset's anger at the situation. Another good job.
Good to see a story where Celestia acknowledges this. Almost every story I've read or heard of where someone goes through what Sunset's gone through also features Celestia forcing them to be a princess and getting all bitchy when they run off to take a day for themselves. So many people fail to consider that Celestia doesn't roll like that, and forcing someone to do high level government work when they really don't want to is basically give them motive and opportunity to create some serious trouble.
Epilogue?
6723263 When did I say that the magic of friendship was necessary for alicorn accension?
6743497 I don't remember if you/b] did actually. The show itself has, with Twilight explicitly stating that the magic of friendship is what strengthened her magic. Which would presumably be a part of her spark reaching where it needed to reach for the ascension.
I may have made incorrect assumptions about this story. I don't remember.
6743442 New chapter.
The concept of rejecting alicornification is definitely a new one for me. The story's a little rough around the edges on the technical side, but I can look past that and say that this is definitely one to watch.
6724117 6727918 Now, don't quote me on this, but this has potential. If I don't get beaten to it, I might end up making this story a reality.
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Yay!
I love the hints of things we haven't seen, and the story in general. I feel like there's a whole world here just waiting to be fleshed out.
Oh, and Sunset's reaction? Perfectly understandable.
Woah. I've never seen a drama tag so accurate.
LOL
Ugh, destiny
I love this Sunset Shimmer!
very movingand touching fic
6985521 Thank you.
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Just two friendly point outs...
1. You seem to have lost control of your italics about one-quarter into your writing for Chapter 2. I would recommend a corrective search & revision.
2. Regardless of dimensional crossings, the characters would not address SciTwi AS "SciTwi." You do not use fan-applied labels in speech (SciTwi, Mane Six, etc.). The more correct application to separate the two would be "Princess Twilight" and "Twilight", or even just "Twilight" for each character-mirror, such when "SciTwi" is alone with Princess Celestia.
Hope this helps.
(Bah. Double-post. Deleted one.)
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It's an affectionate nickname. I'll be justifying it as soon as I can. Also, thanks for the heads up about the itallics. I'll correct that as soon as I can. And don't worry about the double post, happens to me all the time, mostly when I'm using my Nook.
Oh, I loved that bit where the Celestias double-teamed Harshwhinney. Pinkie joining in was just icing on the cake.
Not that I dislike Harshwhinney, mind, I just thought it was hilarious.
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Yay, continuation/conclusion! I thought this had been marked complete before, but glad to see this story wrapped up. Although sure seems like a lot already has happened off-screen (compared to the first part which seemed more like a standalone), but as your author notes mentioned, guess that is in reference to other stories.
Happy to see Sunset and Celestia reconcile. Though Sunset's temper tantrum dragged on a bit, but at least they finally made up (and had some fun with her counterpart). Interesting way of describing Sunset, that she was always a great person, even before being hit by the friendship laser. She was just too greedy and arrogant to see herself accurately, which is why she ran away from Celestia and resorted to dirty tricks.
Curious to see what else will happen in this fic 'verse, with Sunset accepting her alicorn status, even if she's going to stay in that world.
One thing Tia really needs to learn is not to hold back when she knows something, no matter how much she wants to give her students and Little Ponies freedom of action.
Personally, I suspect that, if it is Sunset's destiny to be a Princess, it is to hold the title, at least in a ceremonial fashion, in the human world as one of that world's Bearers of the Elements of Harmony.
6997625 ...dang it, not everything is meant to be innuendo. It was late and I was writing quickly.
It's very jarring to have characters refer to the human Twilight as SciTwi (and even she identifying herself as such!), please change that.
6998209 I'll think about it. It's just a nickname you know.
That duel Celestia messing with Harshwhinny was hillarious. I can't wait to read more.