A Canadian brony with too much free time on his hands and too much of an addiction to the internet and video games
Just a normal day for Connor, nothing unique about it. Then he decides to go somewhere for lunch, and his entire life gets changed forever. He isn't complaining about it, but he is having some trouble adjusting to this. . . newfound world, shall we say?
NOTE: I know that is a rather cliche description, but eh. It works.
Sequel: The Second Journey
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ok. i've read your first chapter and i have to say it seems 'fairly' decent so far. as to my complaints i would have to say you need to space the paragraphs better. other than that you pretty much have everything good.
now
time to read chapter two
seems good so far. you got my like and for now my fav. good luck to writing the next chapter to you
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Yeah, my spacing between paragraphs has felt odd to me. You should have seen it in the first drafts. 
Thank you very much!
hey mine was worse when i started posting because i used notepad to write it and i just copy pasted it over to the site before realizing how bad it ended up in post
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Oh, I did write mine in another program. A cheap free one called TextEdit. I typed it up, copied and pasted to here, edited, saved, edited, saved, published. lol
yeah bad news for me is that i didnt edit and save multiple times after copy pasting it over. so i had to spend 2 and a half hours going through and correcting my grammarless ass *this was before i got a proofreader* so i learned my lesson
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lol, nice. But no, I like to think I at least have a pretty decent grasp on the english language and know how to use it. My biggest problem is often circumlocution. But I'll have to check out your story soon. Right now I'm writing Chapter 3, so gimme a bit.
alright. good luck with writing the next chapter
hope you like my story for what its worth. 
have a good day and here;
may the stache be with you
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Lol, thank you.
interesting idea with the town hall and the mailing hub.
can't wait for more! 
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Thank you!
I have about 8 chapters total at least somewhat planned, so expect a few more within the next week (I hope).
alright! can't wait for it! *grabs a weeks worth of food* alright im ready! *sits down and stares at screen patiently*
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lmao, nice. The 8 chapters are all just introduction, getting the characters in and connected, and trying to set myself up for future events (if i can think of any). After that, I hope for the chapters to become much longer, and much more interesting. I am really getting into the FimFic groove. It's the first thing I check everyday when waking up.
thats funny because thats my routine *wake up to alarm at 5:30 am* *make coffee* *check fimfic until 5 pm* i am pretty determined
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lol, nice. Anyway, only half-ish done chapter 5, put I will publish it for now. Got other stuff I want to do today.
Like, you know.
Eat.
yeah i always forget to do that
i can remember once i forgot to breathe for an hour and whoo boy that was fun
can't remember having so much fun other than when i read stories on this site
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lol, any form of fan fiction for something you like is a great way to pass the time. There is always some you haven't yet read. It never ends.
Exactly!
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Chapter 5 done.
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Also, midway through the next chapter. I will have to stop soon though; need to get ready for work.
good luck!
and i know i used this one liner too much but what the hay!
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sorry if the pic is too big mods i can't quite fix it if it is
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D'awwwww!~
Thank you. 
oh snap
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lol, chapter 8 is almost ready. As in, MAYBE half done. Also, will be longest chapter yet; expecting it to surpass 3 000 words.
Also, to all who read this, if you wouldn't mind helping with the grammatical errors as you see and/or remember them, it would be greatly appreciated.
I know I have a problem with past/present tense is one thing I have noticed at least. 
Well, shite, that chapter is HUGE compared to my other ones.
lol, I could not shut up this time. However, expect more this length from now on; because everything is situated and introduced (for now), I will start getting into the main story. I hope you enjoy! 
Incoming transmission. Cortex 'Sixteen' loading.
Alright, let me get this straight.
This is good, got it? So keep writing, you glorious bastard of a meatbag.
And I hope you will do everything in your power to reach what you said, and ship our lovely organic protagonist with Luna.
The only problem I have with this is that at first, the Protagonist was called Digit, and suddenly you changed it to Ink, which confused me to no end for a long time.
That's all.
Logging off.
-Sixteen, The Binary Scourge
Transmission terminated.
you might want to space it out and make it less of a giant wall of text. its still good. a few spelling errors and a sentence or two that didn't make sense. you might want to do a once over on the chapter but other then that it's really good.
keep up the good work.
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But yeah, I was originally going to name my OC Digit, for being a 3D Digital Designer, but I was having trouble designing a related cutie mark. So, I simplified the idea a bit; he is simply an artist now, still 3D art as a human, but he is reflected as an artist who uses multiple mediums now. Kinda. 
Thank you!
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Like I said, I kind of ranted with this one. Wrote it when slightly sleep deprived. And thank you. 
Yeah, I suppose.
EDIT: Do you maybe think I should split it into two chapters? I still have to do another spelling/grammar check, but it would be good to get peoples thoughts on this.
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i think you should keep it as one chapter.
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Okie! Just doing the spell check now, and holy crap, you were right. Didn't realize how many typos there were.
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well like you said. you were sleep deprived so that had its role to play.
ya i am pretty laid back
pff.. who needs food these days
Words cannot describe how i feel about this two words might suffice though "fucking awesome"
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Now that everything has more or less been introduced, I am working on adding some suspense and a couple more OC's. I actually came up with her as I went, but. . . Like I said, exposition concluded. Now we need an initial incident and rising action. With this chapter, meet initial incident. 
lmfao, thank you.
soo.. the average guy has a motorcycle with a jet engine in it.. WHERE THE HELL IS MINE!?!?! XD
The only thing that concerned me is that Pinkie usually throws parties as a surprise. Oh well though lol.
"After a few moments, a bleach white pony walks out of a room with some material floating in the air around her, surrounded by a purple aura."
Correct me if I'm wrong, but I thought Rarity's aura was blue of a sort.
Awwe, no more chapters to read :c. I was really getting into this one too lol. Welp at least I get to sleep now lol. Keep up the great work!!
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Thank you for alerting me to that. Just checked, and yes, it's blue.
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I was going to start chapter 13 last night, but I need to think about were I want to go with the chapter first. I have an idea, but there are a few points to work out yet. 
lmao, thank you.
hey, i like stucco walls. they provide adequate pain in case of colliding-into-wall incidents. what's an injury without getting hurt, eh?
Yay next chapter! I'm guessing Chroma may keep her word and teach Ink how to draw with his wings or something soon?
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I just think stucco is hideous, lol.
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Yep! Pretty soon.
Just a quick chapter this time; a bit of filler stuff until I hit the next main plot event.
Nooooooo! I hate catching up on new stories I find!
I have to say though, for a first fic I'm impressed! You have made me love your OC's from the first moment you introduced them! For now I can't wait for more!
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Well, thank you! Although, there will be. . . *cough* *cough* six *cough* more OCs to come. Soon. 