[C] Gala Take Flight

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SuperPinkBrony12

SuperPinkBrony12 #1 · Jul 21st, 2016 · · ·

Not bad, though it probably could've worked equally as well as with Spitfire.

Snugglebug

Snugglebug #2 · Jul 21st, 2016 · · 1 ·

For the love of god, PLEASE learn the difference between it's and its.

“No no, it’s not that. It’s just...”

Out of the 11 times you used the word it's, this is the only example where you got it right. Every other time where you use the word it's should be its.

Just read this: http://www.grammar-monster.com/easily_confused/its_its.htm I've noticed that your inability to differentiate its from it's is a big issue with you. I pray that you fix it, because it really ruins your stories for me.

Mix-up

Mix-up #3 · Jul 22nd, 2016 · · ·

This was a good read I almost wished that there was some clop add wit the two of them in diapers. I always love your work Scribe-feather.

rainbowdarth

rainbowdarth #4 · Jul 22nd, 2016 · 2 · ·

It's = (it is / it has) only
its = used for everything else.

KinkyPony

KinkyPony #5 · Jul 25th, 2016 · 1 · ·

If Soarin is into licking pussies, he may be surprised... it's hard to wash the smell away. :D

LivingBL

LivingBL #6 · Jul 25th, 2016 · · ·

Other than the minor gramatical errors (which I honestly don't care too much about unless they reach critical mass and make the story difficult to understand,) another fantastic read. It flows well, the prose is smooth, and there's none of the out-of-character plot manipulation so many of these stories are known to have. Even the non-fetish content was fun to read, and I generally avoid those parts of the story.

scribe-feather

scribe-feather #7 · Sep 2nd, 2016 · 1 · ·

7423243 Apologizes for the late reply, but I would like to take the moment in thanking you for your compliments. Story flow is always a top priority of mine and can often be one of the biggest things I struggle with when writing. I was pleased how this story turned out in the end and I'm glad I'm not the only one who thought so!

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