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Other fillies and colts that are flying all around her that are her age. Some are even younger. She wishes to fly and wants to feel the wind in her mane. The time isn’t right for her to fly. No one takes her seriously or tells her to be careful. How does she feel with everything going on or is told? No one really bothers to ask the filly but she still runs the thoughts through her head in a mental diary.
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Anything for bashing on Diamond Tiara is meh insta thumbs!
But in all in all divine story meh friend!
It's ok, but it feels a little rushed for a diary...
773733 yeah i was pretty tired when i wrote it.. i'm going to be fixing it here and there at a later date.
773455 yeah i'm not a huge fan of diamond tiara and her friend silver spon. it's like they are always going to be stuck up. lol
very good. it did feel rushed but it worked kinda for this story, anyway, good job.
keep readin'
Its a very good piece of work. There are a few grammar errors that kind of break the flow, such as "This I my right to have as a Pegasus...."
As for the rushed feel, I think it fits Scootaloo's character. Given her personality, I would think that she would write a diary entry with a "flow-of-consciousness" appoach instead of contemplating and ruminating about what to write down (that would be more like Twilight; only writing things down once they are all organized and outlined in her head). Your diary entry has that feel of someone writing down exactly what comes to their mind at the moment; different ideas, feelings, and thoughts are all intertwined together. I like it.