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Citrus Recluse


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Nice, and Twilight finally accepted her pervert side :3

I knew when It said "breast expansion" that I was going to enjoy it.
It does has some grammar errors but over all it was great!

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Grammar errors?

... where? Point them out to me, so that I may hunt them down and scour the earth clean of their unsightly presence.

Now that was enjoyable.

Why are there no character tags?

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That is a good question, and the only answer I have for is that I overlooked them in my eagerness to get this out the door and published. I'll go and fix that up.

Well then. I accidentally hit the 'unpublish' button when looking over it and trying to save a grammar edit. I don't know what that's gonna do.

I feel so... kinky after reading this... Is there something I missed or something... because now I started to think about too many questions...

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You're supposed to feel kinky! It's, well, smut fiction. It's not supposed to make you think too hard.

But I'm always happy to answer a few questions, if you feel they're worth asking. :twilightsmile:

having to breath through her nose as she swallowed lumps of Midnight’s orgasm.

Yeah, if stuff is coming out of there in lumps you might oughta see a doctor about that.

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Well, I didn't know how else to describe it.

Pints?

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Streams? Mouthfuls? Spurts? Lumps makes me think of something at least semisolid. And I don't know about you, but the only solid thing I've been pleased to see come out of a vagina was my daughter.

Before I read, what is the Dark tag for ?

Is it jest because of the bad-end ?

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The bad end, and well, some people would think a woman slowly losing her mind and body to lust and going completely under someone's mental control is a bit 'dark.'

This same answer applies to all of your comments like this, btw.

I just skimmed this story, and the ending didn't seem that bad to me, since Sunset's life is still kind of normal during the day.

“I was wondering …” Twilight said, walking up to Sunset with her hands behind her back. “If I could get you … to think about Midnight Sparkle’s boobs?”

Twilight you GENIUS!!! A for effort.

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