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"I am the Aloof Hermit, the Lord of the Empty Seat. I am the Alpha and the Omega"

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Cover Art by ponygoddess.


Twilight Sparkle is a simple student from Equestria Elementary, mostly content with keeping to herself and focusing on her studies. But all that changes after a field trip to Belle Industries where she finds herself on the receiving end of a genetically-enhanced spider bite (due to the bumbling of a certain wall-eyed girl).

As the side-effects become more and more apparent, unknown to her several of the other spiders ended up getting free and have escaped into the city! Over time the victims of their bites start to surface, each one stepping up to defend their city.

But as time goes on, more superpowered individuals start to surface as well... and not everyone will use their new powers responsibly...

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 42 )

You have link to PonyGoddess's DA page, could you also give us the link to the original piece that you're using for the cover art?

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The link itself is in the cover image.

Also, thoughts on the story so far?

....First this story had my curiosity but now it has my attention

REALLY good job on this first chapter. The exchanges, action, characterizations and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. Twilight DOES, indeed, make for a great Expy of the Peter Parker Spider-Man (right down to the bad luck and the wisecracking in action) and I ESPECIALLY liked the scenes with Spike (who is human in this universe instead of a dog) and Sunset and Flash (Sentry NOT Thompson). And I'm guessing Shining got killed by a crook she failed to stop when she had the chance judging by her reaction to the picture.


VERY definitely going to be looking forward to more of this.

I seem to recall a story with the Mane 6, Sunset, and Trixie all being bitten by radioactive Spiders, and gaining the powers of different Spider-men. And the power-sets the cover implies they'll be getting just happen to be the same ones.

Wow, an Equestria Girls/Spider-Man Crossover. Color me intrigued.

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Haven't come across a story like that myself, however I can assure you that the events that lead to these characters getting their own powers will be vastly different.

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I think it's called "A League of Spiders"? I don't remember it being as well written as yours.

Also, Sunset as the future Superior Spider-Girl makes sense.

Twilight hurried out to the cafeteria rushed to her locker, she quickly pulled out her duffel bag… only to stop as she turned her attention to a picture taped to the wall of her locker. One of her, her parents, and a young adult with white skin and blue hair wearing a police uniform…

Her older brother.

Oh no... Shining Armor was Twilight's Uncle Ben, wasn't he?

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Behind almost every hero is a tragedy... :applecry:

Wait...is Sunset evil in this? I can't tell.

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I have a feeling she might be starting out as a jerk and a bully (like in canon), but gradually changes for the better (albeit NOT until Twilight and her future friends give her a bit of a humility lesson).

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Oh....hmm...that's a bummer. There's so little evil Sunset stories anymore.

Well, I might stick around for the FlashLight stuff. That's why I looked into this in the first place. That and it looks like some seriously fun Spider-man stuff.

Comment posted by KingJoltik deleted May 5th, 2019

Kinda guessing that Trixie as Venom is gonna start as a villain. As Venom's more often than not do. A really dangerous rival with little care for collateral, at least.

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That's assuming Venom was forcibly bonded to that warlord before ending up Bonded to Deadpool for a minute before meeting Trixie. Venom's species are peaceful by nature but take on the personality of those it bonds with.

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Maybe. Maybe not. Maybe in the middle. Maybe never.

This is a really good start to the story! I'll definitely be interested to see where it goes from here. :pinkiehappy:

...I just wish that I'd been quicker to get my own Twilight-as-Spider-Man idea written up and posted. :twilightsheepish: Ah well, such is life.

So who will be this world’s Sinister Six? The Shadowbolt Six or someone else?

I'm liking this so far!

Keep it up! :pinkiehappy:

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Good question. Pretty much the only villain(s) I can guess immediately is either Filthy Rich or Spoiled Rich PROBABLY being the Norman Osborn/Green Goblin Expy (which would make Diamond Harry) and Trixie as Eddie Brock/Venom. Sunset is either going to be Otto Octavius with some elements of Flash Thompson or Flash Thompson with Otto Octavius's intelligence (one of the two, but we don't know which one yet).

I came for two reasons. One, post-Endgame withdrawal. Two, FlashLight. I stayed because this story got good. :twilightsmile:

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So I'm fairly certain that all the images in the cover art are indicative of eventual character power sets. Meaning that Sunset is going to end up with the Superior Spider-man powers, which was Otto's mind in Peter's body in the comics, but the suit itself was more of a regular Spider-suit with the Iron Spider legs. As for the Osbornes...I could honestly see Blueblood taking the role of Harry, with an OC being Norman.

That transition at the beginning was pretty abrupt, but I was starting to get into it once I figured out that we switched protagonists for a little bit.

REALLY good job on the action, exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up here. Yeah, I like the bit about Rainbow's backstory in the future (and considering how far in the future Rainbow is from, it stands to reason that Spider-Girl IS a pretty legendary hero by that time, so that thug that called Rainbow/Spider2099 "a Spider-Girl wannabe" might have been a case of Right For The Wrong Reason). And Rainbow's first meeting with Scootaloo and her Aunt Holiday was some wonderful stuff. Yeah, Rainbow being an escaped test subject from the future definitely makes far more sense than her being a scientist despite her loose basis on the Miquel O'Hara Spider-Man. And the detail of Rainbow's future pursuers (one of them the friend she is trying to get back to) definitely makes for some great set-up for a future adventure.

Great work! I really like this handling of Rainbow Dash as Spider-Woman 2099.

Wow, this was a very suspenseful read! I enjoyed it very much. The characters were a slight bit confusing, but I don't think that's much of a bad thing. Maybe try developing the characters some more, so we can follow along even more than we already can. There honestly isn't much wrong with this other that though. Great job!

The first two chapters are great. So Rainbow's a test subject. Well. Makes sense. I don't see her as the scientific type. Not like Twilight who is the Peter expy. I really like how she's characterized as an escapee trying to survive. Good meeting with Scoots. The Spidergirl wannabe thing was a bit hilarious. There's already two if the first chapter is believed. Spider-2099, while not imaginative Rainbow, works for you.

Also, "escaped to" not from. Rainbow didn't escape from a timeline to Alchemax, she left ftom Alchemax into another the timeline.

616 and 1610 (Scorpion), I wonder who they are. Scorpion is likely Fluttershy due to the various powers of Miles Morales or Applejack due to the green eyes. Though, that begs the question of if they enhanced Applejack to have Scorpions powers as well as Spidergirl's.

Who's 616 though. Can't wait to see who this is. Is this the girl Rainbow is talking about or Scorpion?

Characterization is fine so far. Since Belle Industries is the one who gave Twilight her power (who's the snippy one, Sunset?🤔 ) I'm guessing Mrs. Belle is Norman, but 65 version not the corrupt, insane, prick of the usual version. That makes Rarity, Harry then. Noir suits her for her love of noir films/lit.

Sunset doesn't have her goon squad. Guessing this shows how she cates for them more than lackeys. Superior Spiderman, Ya that's Sunset alright. Ego to prove she's better than Twilight in everyway.

Anyway. A solid two chapters. Can't wait to read more.

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Ya. Cause Trixie's ego, competitiveness, and showboating issues wouldn't have a negative effect on the poor symbiote.

Edit: forgot the review part of the review.

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All quite well said. Yeah, I too am thinking that 616 is either Applejack, Fluttershy or Gilda. But if you will look at the picture more closely, it seems more likely that Rarity will be the red-and-yellow version of the Iron Spider (which would also be quite appropriate) with Pinkie gaining the Spider-Man Noir costume and abilities (though still retaining her largely light-hearted personality). And good catch concerning Fluttershy (indeed, we KNOW she is going to have the power set of the Miles Morales Spider-Man, but we don't know yet if she's going to be Scorpion, 616 or neither [only the author does and that falls into spoiler territory, so we'll have to wait and see]) As for if Applejack, we know she will gain the costume of the Scarlet Spider, but we don't know if she will have the powers of Spider-Girl, Scorpion or a combination of both. That IS an excellent question too (though if she DOES get both Spider-Girl AND Scorpion's power, it would probably cement her place as the physically strongest of the future main hero group) .

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That's an interesting take. I just think she's using the iron man suit possibly have Mattie's powers, but still calls herself Noir due to her love of detective films. Pinkie Pie, I have no idea what powers she'll have. The whole powers thing is already confusing as it it in EQG. If Rarity and Applejack are the two brainwashed lackeys, what the hell became of their little sisters?Are they slaves too? If so. Are they going to attack Scoots for seeing Rainbow?

Excellent job on this latest chapter. The action, exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up are all quite well done in all the right places. Yeah, I have to say Applejack/Scarlet Spider working as an underground metahuman wrestler to help pay the bills for her family certainly makes sense. And I feel REALLY bad for her getting her rear handed to her by that masked thief with a robot drone and knockout gas after she worked so hard against Vermin. Though, admittedly, that just shows how prepared some of these criminals are for spider-powered interference (kind of like some crooks in Metropolis getting so used to fighting Superman that they ALWAYS have Kryptonite and/or weapons powered by red sun light). Still, I DID enjoy the family moments with Mac and Bloom and I AM glad that, at the very least, Pear Butter is still alive in this universe (even if in prison). And, yeah, that thief's chat about how true geniuses shouldn't be dependent on anyone but themselves or their families DOES provide some possible clues for later on.

It might have taken a while, but it was well worth the wait and I am VERY certainly looking forward to more of this.

Let me get this straight. Each of the Mane 6 or 7 is a Spider-themed metahuman, and we're getting snippets of how they are each using their abilities before everything eventually ties together, correct? So far, we've already covered Twilight, Dash, and AJ.

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Indeed. Which means the next one is going to be either Rarity, Fluttershy or Pinkie Pie with Sunset being saved for last of the seven (since she would probably be the one that would lead the other six into teaming up and then, after she gets beaten, they all encounter something that leads to the six forming an initially uneasy alliance with Sunset).

Of course, that IS just a guess and is much more likely to be wrong than right).

Oddly enough, I am getting this odd image in my head (and I am fully aware that it is far more likely to be wrong than right, but I can't help the image right now):

Sunset starts calling herself "the Superior Spider-Girl" because she gets genetic material lifted off all six of the spider-powered heroines and uses the formula to give herself all of their powers combined, making herself physically superior to any one of them (or even any FIVE of them combined) and being arrogant enough to think she is INTELLECTUALLY superior to any of the heroines too (though, to be fair, she is NOT wrong by MUCH - she actually IS smarter than any of them except Twilight). Since she is as powerful as all six of them combined AND is smarter than any of them except Twilight, all six of the heroines have to team up to take her down. Of course, it takes a while for the six heroines to get their teamwork down enough to win against her. But they pull it off (and actually make such a great team once they get the hang of working together that they agree to work together on a more long term basis [calling themselves "the Spider Six" until they can think of something better]).

Of course, it becomes "the Spider SEVEN" after Sunset reforms and earns the heroines' trust, but that's another story.

Again, though, that is just something bouncing around in my head and is far more likely to be wrong than right. Sorry. Just can't help it.

O, AJ is the Scarlet Spider. She's a underground fighter fighting for her mother's medical bills. Sad that some thief ruined it. Good emotional moments with Pear Butter. Interesting that she knows the cop so well.

The thief is likely Sunset, I'm guessing...

Well. My theory of her being one of the brainwashed goons is flushed. Since Applebloom mentions Sweetie Bell. Rarity is most likely safe as well. So that means Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie are the two enslaved Spider Women. Those two are likely next.

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O, AJ is the Scarlet Spider. She's a underground fighter fighting for her mother's medical bills.

Her mom is in jail.

The thief is likely Sunset, I'm guessing...

You'll have to wait and see... but trust me, you're in for a surprise! :raritywink:

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Pretty much what Alphamon said. But I think you're only HALF right on the brainwashed friend thing. Pinkie's outfit seems more based on Spider-Man Noir, which means she is more likely to come from the past than the future (though still unlikely to come from either; it is much more plausible that the Noir outfit was something she was wearing to a costume party with a 1930s theme when she somehow got her powers).

Fluttershy is still a definite possibility though. Of course, so is Gilda. And Lightning Dust, for that matter (Dust, especially, would be quite appropriate for the Evil Former Friend trope if she were Scorpion).

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How’s the status of the next chapter going?

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Yeah, where’s the next chapter?

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I'd say relatively soon (given the progress mentioned on the "writing" part on this author's link to the appropriate site). That being said, "relatively soon" is still very likely going to take months.

Though it would actually be Chapter Four, not Chapter One.

Also, if the author is having trouble on coming up with a chapter title, given I have a hunch either Pinkie, Rarity or Fluttershy will be the one featured:

If it's Pinkie: I Love the Night Life (given her costume basis on Spider-Man Noir)

If it's Rarity: Stylish AND Practical (given her costume's basis on the Iron Spider)

If it's Fluttershy: Feeling Invisible (given both her personality and the fact she will probably have the powers of the Miles Morales version of Spider-Man - including the super-camouflage).

But I will respect the author's right to pick your own chapter title.

REALLY love the work going into the dialogue, action, characterizations and future chapter set-up here. This took quite a while, but was VERY WELL WORTH the wait. Absolutely loved the stuff with Rarity spying on the other spider-heroes that have debuted thus far in addition to the stuff with Fluttershy making her own debut (and, like Miles concerning Peter, Flutters has every power Twilight has shown thus far PLUS super-camouflage and bio-electricity. Absolutely loved Fluttershy doing so well in dealing with those three capers shown in this chapter and then get that sweet scene with that lady at the end. Judging by this chapter, I would say Rarity will be the next spider-heroine to be introduced, with Pinkie coming in just after her and Sunset being the last one.

Anyway, very much looking forward to more of this.

"If I were a more crude person I'd make a reference to tentacle porn right now…" Scarlet heard them scoff as the machine's grip tightened. They then started picking up the sacks of money that their little machine minion brought to them and placed it inside the van.

Trust me, I already did

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