In the world of Dragonball, several distortions end up altering the timeline and changing what past. Seeking the strength to help stop these mysterious changes, Time Patroler Trunks gathers the Dragon Balls and makes a wish for warriors powerful enough to help him fix the timeline...
In a distant far away world, six mares who have saved their world countless times are summoned to a to the New World by Shenron and Trunks (with Spike unknowingly hitching a ride), who asks for their help in saving the timeline of his own world, after some debate the group agrees.
However things start to get worse as the ones distorting time start altering it further, causing certain events to happen earlier than usual! Now they must not only adjust to their new bodies, but find a way to defeat these new enemy and save all of time!
Co-Written & Story-Boarded With:
Brother Malachai
Blank Scroll
ShadowLDrago
(Currently on Hiatus while searching for moreco-writers)
Cover Art By: Me!
Now has a tropes page!
*these new enemy
Enemies.
great so far.
glad you know team four star. By the way could you use my time patroller character in this? Or at least for a chapter? I can give you all his information.
color me intrigued.
youve piqued my interest.
Hay that's Demon God Dumplin.
This is already off to a promising start! I especially like how tied in the not only elements like DB Online with what presume to be a Time Breaker, but Heroes and Dumplin as well. Am I right in guessing that EVO timeline is based on Dragonball Evolution? Interesting reference. Also poor Twilight just got done with an dimension hopping adventure. Oh well at least the whole gang will be along for the ride. I will earnstly wait for the next chapter.
Very interesting story. Will be keeping on eye on it.
Okay, why is this not at least one of the more popular fanfics in this crossover category? This was very well written, only a few grammar mistakes here and there. The premise is also very good, though I guess not entirely original, since I saw another xeno verse did. But you really made me interested. In curious to see who this Masked Saiyan is. Is it someone we know, or a completely new Saiyan?
Anyway, I really hope you continue this soon, because I can't see when this was first published.
You have earned yourself a favorite.
Stay frosty.
I am interested as well, a fairly intriguing plot for now and I hope to see more soon. :)
Awesome!
when is a next chapter going to be?
Dumplin is in the one Universe that truly needs his special brand of "help". Godspeed you little gray terror.
although kudos for remembering that Dragonball Heroes exists.
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I'm genuinely surprised, I didn't think anyone would get the heroes reference!
6123815 How could I not remember it exists when it constantly has new additions, updates, trailers, and its own weekly manga Dragonball Heroes Victory Mission by Toyotaru? Just because its not a thing stateside does not mean it still there isn't news of it. It also helps that I a massive Dragonball/Z/GT in general, and check Kanzenschuu almost daily for news. Then again even outside Dragonball I have a knack for noticing things. Anyways can't wait to see the Mane Six's, (& Spike's), reactions to Trunks, Supreme Kai of Time, Shenron, and Toki Toki City in general.
A good start, looking forward to seeing more of this as it comes out. I'm genuinely curious to see how the next parts gonna turn out, if the mane six are gonna stay in their pony forms, or shift species, like the cover image seems to imply. And on that note, let us pray that if Pinkie becomes a Majiin, she never discovers the ability to turn things into candy.
Interesting start. If the ponies shift species, will they get clothes with it, or will they need to be gifted them?
6118118 Don't blame yourself. I fell off towards the end of the prologue because of IRL issues.
Speaking of... I'm sorry I couldn't go through and fix any of the grammar and spelling mistakes. I'll do better with the next chapter.
I'm gonna Dump!
6122523 Hey Bardock, I didn't knot you were a Brony
Great Chapter!
Seems kind of stupid to send them out before training is completed. Not only that, but it was hinted that the reason all six were summoned was due to the Elements. ...Shouldn't they explain to Trunks and Supreme Kai or whatever his name is, just what the Elements are? And stick together? Seems to me that the elements would be a whole lot more useful than two barely trained individuals.
Sorry I couldn't help much. Money problems still. Two jobs drains me
Welp, Twilight's doomed. Also, calling it now, Twilight's death will cause RD to go super saiyan since they don't know about the dragonballs being able to revive the dead yet.
Anyways, looking great so far! It'll be interesting to see how the mane 6 react to each of their respective races special traits, if it's ever brought up, of course.
I smell Dead Zone Abridged with Ponies...
when's the next chapter?
Do I have to say anything?
would be that
Are warehouses extinct here?
It's like when I take a nap inside a cloud...
I'm assuming they're just joking, since Rarity's coat isn't a perfect white but more like extremely light gray. And since The chamber is pure white, she would still be visible, even if a bit harder to see.
Clap Clap Clap.
Alright, I say this is quite the good one, although, I am surprised at the change of race between Twilight and Rarity when compared to "The Xenoverse" story. If you were to ask me, I'd have made it Applejack and Rainbow Dash who'd be Sayians, while Rarity and Twilight were humans. So, will we be seeing personalized moves? Like in "The Xenoverse"? or will they all be using existing moves?
I enjoyed this story and the idea of not all of them having to go on a mission at the same time is a good idea as well. This story has a lot of potential, and my complete approval.
Please give spike transformations I'd be so happy
(reads description)
Thus... messing up the timeline even MORE.
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RUN FOR YOUR LIFE IT IS DUMPLIN!!!!!!!!!!
Dumplin: I will send you to the fuck box!!!!!!!
Dumplin. GREAT. Don't get me wrong, I love TFS, they're hilarious, however, they've shown time and time again, that they're not very good at video games, more often than not almost deliberately choosing a bad options just because they can and out of stubbornness. For example, keeping the Final Flash despite it being a very lackluster Ult compared to say, I dunno, the Special Beam Cannon. That, and they're really not that good at the same. In that anyone who knows what they're doing and is high level enough could destroy them.
And if they're anything like Buu, can regenerate, and damn near impossible to kill and have an affinity for magic. And can easily copy techniques they see.
Well, that, actually kinda makes sense. She IS the Supreme Kai of Time, she has a lot of experience, makes sense that she's capable of freezing time even if for a bit.
Bottom line, the difference is that an AU is a whole different universe. Alternate Timelines are the same universe, it's just timelines where things went differently.
Dammit Dumplin.
At best.
Considering that in pony form she can match the Wonderbolts, and can fly at supersonic speeds with ease, she actually IS. Unlike Vegeta, most of the time when she's bragging, she can very much back it up.
OK, see? THIS is how you do a good TFS joke. It's just that, I've seen a lot of people reuse TFS's jokes. But you're doing it right. You're also making your own jokes and using those jokes well and with good comedic timing, not just because ou can.
Probably. Just a whole fridge filled with capsules of food can outdo a warehouse.
Smart.
Smart. Plus, being a Saiyan means that her gung ho attitude might be a good thing as she's get hurt more and that means more zenkais and she might be able to go Super Saiyan.
... Damn. I didn't expect that.
Shit.
monocles.
Very useful for finding those capsules to make healing items until I have so much money I might as well buy them.
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Well, he is a defender of various life forms at the end of his arc (except for the TFS Version, which is just mad that he got sent back in time
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An unorthodox choice having Intellectual Twi and frou-frou Rarity being Saiyans, but I can see some good comedy coming from this, especially if they have to train under tougher trainers such as Vegeta while learning how to become Super, etc... Plus, I'm sure RD is going to be infuriated over the whole "Saiyans becoming stronger after a fight" thing. I'm starting to think I'm seeing bits of that now w/ Twi giving her trouble in training.
Since Twi was selected to be "YOU" does that mean Rarity might go Super after seeing her kick the bucket?
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One Problem, RD is human.
Also, from Twi not having experience w/ Time Travel and alternate timelines yet, I'm going to assume the Starlight Glimmer Villain Arc hasn't come to it's conclusion yet in the G4 MLP Timeline.
7537356 RD is a SAIYAN.
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It was a simple mistake. Slow your roll there champ.
6703965 My bad for the errors I'll go correct those.
6610554 And the next chapter should be upload soon. As soon as Alpha gets on.
Oh snap! Next chapter is ready for everypony... I mean everybody
At least Equestrian names are usually puns or somewhat clever.
Says the one named Twilight SPARKLE.
Buddy, you made a huge mistake. NOBODY threatens Goku's friends or family. Ever herd of the original King Piccolo? He got a hole through his chest after one of his cronies killed Krillin.
Small nitpick, Raditz's scouter is green. Also, the bands are light brown.
Remove "their".
Mostly due to how tanky Tirek is and that he has no defense against magic and while Tirek can hold that form, SS3 drains Goku very quickly.
Magic. And Pinkie Pie is known for being able to make reality her plaything. Be glad you're not dealing with Discord. Also, no double space between a and lot.
Comma after house.
No caps.
Comma after kid and decapitalize let's, or exclamation mark after kid, but remove the extra space anyway.
No caps for arms.
Gis.
No caps.
2 spaces too many between beans and nimbus.
Comma not period, decapitalize in.
I understood that reference.
Popo. No extra cap.
Comma after course.
Popo's great, he's as snarky as his Abridged version, but he does actually care about Kami.
Yes.
again, no caps.
onE HFIL.
No need to capitalize the S in south.
If Garlic Jr wins, the world is screwed.
ThAnks.
7580233 Ouch, I can't believe I missed so many errors. Thanks for catching those, I'll get right to it.
Also,
That's exactly what I said when I read that
7580233 quick question, bro. I checked over the doc and couldn't find that last error. Where was it exactly?
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Woo! And it's up! Sorry about the delay, dearest readers.
Pinkie Pie is going through a fase huh? And those DBZ abridged references.
Ah, it's good to see someone remembering who Goku is and how much ass he can kick, namely, yours.
Not quite, he's stronger than he ever was with his tail, and you give him a couple of years and he will be able to transform into something far worse than a Great Ape.
This. A thousand times this. It'd be so easy for Chi-Chi to be left on the sidelines and be simply angry that this happened, but she's not, she's angry at Garlic, not Goku, she's in her old armor, or at least her helmet, and even though she knows she isn't as strong as Goku, she's gonna give it her goddamn best. And woe betide any who hurt Chi-Chi in Goku's presence.
Now she's damn near unkillable.
That's stupid.
I get it.
Which gives you an idea of how strong Ox King is.
I'd say a bit of all.
RosHi.
That has GOT to hurt. Also, didn't know Krillin knew the Tri-Beam, his shtick is the Kienzan.
Pinkie.
He's not wrong. Also, good to see you remember that Yajirobe is a decent warrior in his own right considering he chopped one of King Piccolo's sons with ease.
Good work.
Shenron, you're an Eternal Dragon who can only be summoned once a year, you don't get paid at ALL, and what would you even NEED money for? Also, I see we're working with Abridged! Shenron.
Nice. Also, quicklY.
Oh dear.
Eh?
You're goddamn right.
Evil Buu form.
HOW are you still alive? You used the Kikoho at least 3 times, and a Kamehameha in quick succession.
Fighters.
She absorbed him. Another reason to fear Pinkie, damn near unkillable, vicious when angered, operated on Toon logic and can absorb others to gain their power, abilities and knowledge.
Stuck The new sword, and no extra space between the and new.
Exactly. Humans may be very versatile and stubborn, and Saiyans may hit extremely hard not to mention can go Super Saiyans, yes Spike being an Arcosian means he's very hard to kill, but Pinkie is FAR worse.
Do as he says, Goku may be merciful, but even his mercy has limits.
That ball, split the guy in two, how does that work?
You'd be right, as bad as Beerus is, he's rarely actively malicious, Discord can warp reality to his whim, Beerus would just kill you.
I get it.
Abridged! Nappa, a joke that has gotten old.
Break Through The Limit did it.
7631485 abridged Nappa will never get old. For me at least
Pinkie tapping into Pinkimena for a bit eh? This was the thene that went through my head when she transformed.
you think that's bad, Pinkie's not only related to Dumplin, one of the most powerful beings in the universe to ever exist, but she's born from the same Buu that not only destoryed the earth, but millions of other planets. Nobody tell Pinkie about her heritage.
You know. I'm really surprised at the interactions between Pilaf and Garlic Jr. While never addressed in the series, they were once apparently the same being. Apparently Pilaf is the childish side of Garlic which he cast away.
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"Stupid" or not, it is a reference to both the TFS and Official films. They would yell out food products related to their names when they bulked up.
Ok there is zero reason twilight would perform better at hand to hand than rainbow. Ki I can accept as it falls into magic-like abilities. Rainbow has studied ponyform karate (got a black belt if I remember right) and because of her love of flight gives her quick reaction speed. She is athletic to a fault. Twilight's best known physical accomplishment is pacing herself on a marathon. Literally all other accomplishments have to do with magic and mind. So it stands to reason she should not be better than rainbow in h2h. Again ki makes sense h2h does not.
ok soo i meant to comment on this before but if we're being technical twilight is right warrior and fighter by definition are the same. However, this ignores general nuances that follow the english language. Warrior has always been used to describe either a soldier in an army or an honorable fighter. While on the other hand fighter is usually used to describe combatants who don't use weapons also fighter points more towards literally anyone who fights in literally any way including dishonorable and cheap fighting. So yeah while the definition is technically the same the way they are used are extremely different.
Also I don't expect twilight to know the difference since her people/pony's (whatever) don't value fighting in same regard as we do. While they may understand self defense, they don't appear to capitalize it into a sport or art form. Rainbow may know karate and enjoy a fight, she seems more of the exception than the rule for their culture (I would suspect Gilda's influence here).