DUDE! WHEN DID THIS GET HERE! WORDS, RP, CLOPPONIES! That is all! I HAD TOO MUCH SUGAR AND STUFF!
Lyra Heartstrings, A Young mint green unicorn pony with a special talent for the lyre, but ever since she was a little filly she was always fascinated by these creatures called "Humans", Her Dream was to find and study Human beings and when she met a chestnut colored stallion her whole life change.
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Capitalize the letter I when it is by itself.
Interesting. The Premise is close to mine! I shall read.
I may plan on reading this if you can get more likes....
dude! more, please write more, i love it already
Alright make sure you state who says or said this. I don't know why there are thumbs down, well I seen them a lot so they are commmon. Anyway, captalize I all the time and I guess you will be alright.
I am not a great person when it comes towards perfect grammer and Punctuation. But, I hope it help at least.
800046 Of course maybe around friday or saturday
(*Ive been reading this and so far,Meh!*)
it's not 100% but not 60% eather. I see some miss print's and spelling mistake's but you got
me hooked to keep reding.
nice job! cant wait to read more from you ^_^
From:Tia
It look s great man, it really does. a little short though. There also seems to be a bug or something, when to write this up, because i've noticed that at several points the sentence jumps for no reason.
For example:
"...and trust me
when I say this ,Run."
One thing that i just thought up; perhaps one pony - nopony in particular - could steal Applejack's stetson, put it on with a flick, turn to the doctor, and say:
"Hello, Sweetie."
Or when its time for the Doctor to leave, he could say:
"I don't want to go"
Just a thought or two.
Anyway, really good, keep up the great work
somehow I feel the phrase:
"Blimey! Its like 'This is Your Life'...."
doesn't quite cut it.
Anyway, great job. Only thing though (and I know this is already difficult for quite a few writers) when I get short chapters like this, it makes me think that the rate of more chapters would be higher than other stories. Its just an impression I get.
Also, I love Vinyl's apparent imunity to alcohol. It would make some sense being a 'party-pony' and all
860435 well school is crap and helluva lot of homework
it's k. "There's only on thing anyone can truly ask of you.......your best"
MOAR!
i really enjoy the story.
maybe a proof reader could help be better.
outside of that i think its really good
seems like a good idea and a good start, but you do need to slow the story down.
like instead of the flash back have it play out in real-time. what caused the tardis to malfunction, what was bonbon arguing about with lyra specifically about humans. and just slow it down in general...it feels like it is moving at too fast a pace.
that was awesome!
you really did good your grammer great to. you have inspired me to do a docterwhooves thing! 
i rate this 5 mustaches and facehoofs 
sorry for the lack of updates but my pc died on me
and exams (that i have not studied for)
and being lazy 
Love it.