After not seeing Twilight Sparkle for years, Princess Celestia is surprised when Twilight shows up at the castle, needing a foalsitter for the daughter Celestia never knew she had. Princess Celestia agrees to foalsit for the young filly on short notice with deeper motives than a simple foalsitting job. The little filly is far from normal and the more Celestia learns about her and Twilight, the more she wishes she hadn't.
Celestia is determined to find out the truth about this young filly. But will she like what she finds?
Sex tag for the mention of sex but there is no sex.
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Chapters (4)
Reads really nicely so far! *insert stamp of approval here*
~Dragon
Interesting start. Looking forward to seeing more.
Is what happened between Celestia and Twilight going to come up at all? They don't seem mad at eachother persay, but any of their friendship seems to be gone.
Chicken does sound good right about now.
Ooooh! I like this!! I'm also imagining a half-pucca, half-kitsune yokai...that would be awesome.
Back to the story..why doesn't Twilight feel comfortable telling Celestia? Honestly, lying to her and cutting her off is the most suspicious thing.
7156380 You will soon see in the later chapters. Did you also just reference yokai as in yokai watch?
Hmmm, seems Twilight might have meddled in things best left alone.
7156408 Perhaps...
7156399 maaaaybbeeee~
7155765 If Twilight was possessed, I wonder if she was even the one to say the things that broke off their friendship to begin with, but you can tell Celestia knows of it because she's so much colder to her while Twilight acts flustered and then suddenly "You'll never see us again" so either she knows of it and is trying to act cordial, or she's desperate to let Celestia know potentially..
I mean why would she leave Spirit with Celestia rather then say Fluttershy?
Funky
In just a few years it already has two tails.
How odd. Kitsune only gain an additional tail for each century they live until they have reached 9 tails at which point they are called kyubi no kitsune.
Celestia should scan Twilight's magical signature for the tell-tale hoshi no tama of a kitsune floating about in her thaumatic field. Those are one of the things a kitsune cannot hide from one experienced in their tricks.
Indeed, should Celestia managed to seize one of the hoshi no tama, she will gain control of the kitsune as the ball contains a portion of the fox's spirit and it will be bound to perform a task to retrieve it.
They tend to avoid outright killing and are instead tricksters who may lead a person to ruin by other means. White kitsune, however, are servants of the goddess Inari and bring good fortune as well as possessing great power to dispel evil. They also take lovers in other forms and the offspring often possess great supernatural powers.
If they wish to know when Twilight boinked the foxie, they should inquire about the occurrence of a rain shower with the sun still shining. Such is the tell-tale sign of a 'kitsune's wedding'.
*chuckles* I am quite the authority on this subject, being quite the otaku.
Like I said, LOOK FOR THE FLOATY SPIRIT BALLS!!
No balls, no kitsune!
In that case, you take her to the Tree of Harmony and whack her against it while screaming, "LET THE POWER OF PAIN COMPELL YOU!!!"
Hey, it works in that new (awful) Ghostbusters movie!
7159820 I like Kitsunes too. However, I do not know as much as you and with the other chapters written already for the most part, I have no intention of changing them just to 'play by the rules' as one would say. Basically things won't be accurate in Kitsune lore I suppose unless I accidentally wrote it right.
So prepare to be disappointed. Kitsune lore wise anyways.
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Yeah, you're telling me. I mean she sort of agreed to watch Spirit, bit she seemed kind of ambivalent otherwise. Also, she had the guards *escort* Twilight out, which seems a bit pushy. Honestly I feel like the first chapter is an insufficient introduction and could use some flashback or something to let the reader in on some of the details of Twilight and Celestia's present relationship. Either that or it'd be good to have some of that in the next chapter or two, because the story seems a little weak so far. It seems odd that Celestia should be so in the dark, since in the show she's just popped in more or less unannounced before. Even considering alt universe, Celestia as a character seems prone to direct intervention if she can justify it to herself.
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Because Spirit eats chickens and Twilight/? has probably been making off with Fluttershy's animal friends and feeding them to Spirit. I wonder how long that would take to get out... Clearly Rainbow Dash knows more than she's telling and is probably hiding stuff from Fluttershy.
Well, that puts a completely new meaning to "one night stand." For shame, Twilight. Even Fluttershy wouldn't stoop to that.
7160023 Yeah. Finally! Criticism! I knew I'd get some eventually.
I will track this,
Oh....oh...oh...
7161948 What's with the ohs?
7162178 Just realization. calm down
7155953
well, at least you're not stuck in an underground facility trying (and failing) to code things...
I like where this is going!
7166267 Ya got a point
Not sure any knowledge would take Twilight to this extreme, unless she was in a situation where it was necessary...
I smell implied rape.
7175076 That isn't what happened. She agreed to have sex with him.
7174969 Welcome to the world of imperfect fanfiction. I tried my best.
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Well... you could try growing the scope of the story to reveal the why of Twilight's desperate need to learn Light and Dark magic.
7175090 Celestia makes it sound as such, though, and so does Daredevil.
This seems really ooc for Twilight, though i guess it's au so it doesn't matter. Also Twilight already knows black magic she uses it in the crystal empire episode to find the crystal heart.
7175076 You can smell that? Wow. Amazing.
7175171 Yes, because I have a knack for it.
7175166 Only because Celestia showed her how to use it first.
7175101 Maybe in the sequel. If there's going to be one. Sequels always end up either better or worse than the original and sometimes it's best to just leave things where they are.
7175102 Oh. Well, it wasn't and was not my intention to make it sound like that.
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Guess that means there aren't gonna be too many more chapters then?
7175209 Smelling it or actually partaking in it....?
7175263 Writing it. I have written implied rape before.
7175254 Eh, alright.
7175256 Yeah.
7175284 Yeah. Rape's wrong.
7175299 And yet, there are people who write it and fetishize it. I write it, without the fetish part.
well i'm enjoying this
Wow. Celestia's really being a dick to Twilight in this chapter.
7176226 Good for you.
7175333 I know. It's awful that people would do that. To each their own of course but it's still wrong. Not much I can do to stop them however. I would never put rape in story.
Yeah, I'm on Celestia's side here. Twilight is a danger to everyone around her and to herself, and now she's actively resisting Celestia's proposal for a peaceful and civil solution. She's actively escalating a conflict out of pure stubbornness. If this is the mare who Celestia deemed unready to deal with dark magic, I can really see why.
7176297 Here's how I see rape: IRL, it's bad (unless in the rare event that it's sexual foreplay to pretend you're a rapist or something; don't ask me how that works). In fiction, it's equally as touchy, but done right (and the reactions of the characters after the deed will help to sell it), it can be good. In literature, it all boils down to execution.
7175299
If only it were so easy to prove what's rape and what isn't. There is an awful lot of room for ambiguity. There's a limited scope of circumstances, in my opinion, where it's truly clear cut.
7176295
Well, Twilight committed a crime in the eyes of Equestria Law. So, while handling it personally is a little bit of a stretch, Celestia is, depending on your perspective, the source of Equestrian legal authority. She is therefore entitled to act directly pursuant to her own laws. She might be overdoing it, but enforcing the law isn't "being a dick" and the Kitsune possessing her isn't exactly going to hang around so they can try the body/pony he's living in.
I am a little concerned that she doesn't seem to be making any efforts to protect the others. Also, she's totally discounting Smokey's involvement here. He wasn't particularly bothered about waltzing Twilight's body wherever he wanted. Regardless of what she did to him/they agreed to, he certainly isn't blameless in this. Enticement to learning and use of dark magic is hardly a light thing.
7178692 "Oh by the way, you had no way to know this because it's all classified, but that spell you cast was illegal. Also, the spells you were trying to learn were illegal in addition to being hidden away. Also, I've decided from two minutes testimony that you're a bad mother, and I'm going to take away your daughter and never even let you see her again.
"I know you're unbalanced from the corrupting forces of dark magic, but I've decided to deliberately antagonize you as much as possible."
She is being SUCH a dick.
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Well, when you put it that way...
Anyway, the actual actions really aren't that dick-ish, it's mostly just her attitude. There's a bit more than two minutes testimony here. Remember that she had a chat with Spirit earlier and Twilight's daughter doesn't have much incentive to lie here. Smokey is also telling the same sort of tune, despite the fact that the two have presumably never met physically or in the sense that Spirit knew anything more than that her father was obviously a Kitsune. Although it could all that could admittedly be conveyed a little better/ Also, 'never even let you see her again' is very much reading something in that isn't necessarily there.
I sort of agree, antagonizing the less than stable pony (alicorn!) is not really the best for that pony or anyone else.
Well of course a half-fox would like chicken. And of course Twilight would try to hide that, considering that carnivores aren't exactly common in this world (although I don't think that they're really looked down upon in the show - not that it's discussed).