Deep in the Everfree Forest, in a tucked away secret lake, there lives a creature who is not quite fish but not quite pony. Legend has it that if you spot the creature and do not run away in fright, then it will grant you three wishes but at a devastating cost.
Scootaloo has discovered this creature but is she willing to pay the price? And if she refuses to pay the price then who will?
This story was edited by a good friend of mine who does not have an account on this site but is a good friend and editor nonetheless. The picture is from google images.
Flutterpriest was kind enough to do a reading/review of this story for me. You can go watch it here. Enjoy!
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The long description sounds too repetitive. I'd recommend changing the highlighted words.
7484757 I'm going to if you don't mind if I change it to that.
I'm with Featherweight; his story was pretty good.
Huh. This really was good. Better than I expected it to be for some reason.
Thanks for writing the story!
7538151 No problem! Any helpful advice to improve?
7538623 I don't know... I did enjoy it. I guess I would say how the story started was a bit boring - for me anyway. Take it with grain of salt though, I don't think I'm in a position to give people writing advice yet - I'll feel like a hypocrite.
At least YOU have an original story. I just write crossovers, because being original is hard.
I found this fic by watching this video If you liked it and want to watch it get picked apart abit check it out it's done by acouple of the guys that run 'The Good HiE List'. Three Wishes Or How Scootaloo Screwed Up by Raichu - Writer's Workshop Also Thanks for writing, I enjoyed it!
7823752 I know! They were nice enough to review it for me. I actually asked them to.
My Little Kelpy. (Kelpie?)
Not a bad little story.
Might need to add a dark tag for that part where Dash gets eaten. 😅
Good story though 😄