When she married Discord, the lack of a normal life that was planned out day by day was aware to her. After half a year of marriage, a year of dating before then, she was used to it...almost. When her husband suddenly drops the news of his pregnancy, it was more than obvious to her that it would never be normal.
Twilight now fights to try to raise a draconequus hybrid which is outcast ed by society as well as a legal battle to try to keep not only Discord's citizen ship, but his right as their daughter's father. She was definitely not expecting this when she gave up her sanity.
Sad Tag: Due to the nature of the story (Social out casting and Custody Battles) the Sad tag is used to warn these.
Sex Tag: Twilight and Discord are married, you don't expect them to get frisky?
Language: Slut and Whore will pop up occasionally and used against Twilight. Be aware this is not to offend anyone, but to give a feeling of what is currently happening to the family at this moment in time.
Other notes: Will Penumbra get laid? Spoilers (I guess?) she will. But, I obviously will have her and the other of age for obvious legal reasons. I don't need FBI on my ass, thank you.
cover art source?
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Here ya go
I like the concept and the story so far
7169924 no offense, but this seems very rushed...which is very odd for someone of your writing talent.....is this just to get back into the swing of things?
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This was written about a month ago and was after a long haitus, So some of these chapters will be slightly rushed. hopefully I can get into the swing of things in later chapters so that it lasts a little longer. Example, Chapter two is at 1.3K right now, but Chapter 3 is 1.5K and isn't finished so it is getting better. By how much will have to be seen.
The first thing my mind went to when the description said that Discord was pregnant was one of my favorite childhood shows, The Fairly Oddparents. Haven't read a single word other than the description and I already love it.
7170041 i was just wondering is all...im glad to hear that its gonna be continued
>revealing to red orbs
two*
Wow didn't expect Twilight Sparkle I expected Fluttershy
I'm kinda curious about the whole never consummated the marriage thing. Are we gonna get any kind of backstory to their relationship?
despite what we will put you through you.”
one ''you'' too much?
nice story tho :)
One thing I don't like is that it took 3 months for the child to be born. 3 is such a round number, so why not π months? You wouldn't even have to change much.
7171828 τ, darn it!
*shakes hoof!*
Oh Twicord, why did it have to be Twicord?
My faith in Fluttercord has been shaken
I like this feeling
The concept is pretty interesting, and I always enjoy story about Discord family life
TwiCord is probably my most favorite ship.
That said, let's get to my opinion of this story.
While it's implementing nice ideas and promises to continue in doing so this story is just not well written. It lacks any emotion or chemistry except for the tidbit we got in the last part of this chapter. This story seems to be also plagued by rushed writing that doesn't only show in the absence of details and the poor pacing but also in many mistakes in orthography, grammar and composition.
I'll tune in from time to time, to see how it's going since I think you're able to improve yourself, but until then I just can't gain any enjoyment out of reading your story.
Sending you the best regards and hoping on having been able to help,
~Nightjar
7172067 Haha, the π vs. τ wars are on again! Though it would have to be τ / 2.
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Pff, who cares about pi vs. tau when e is clearly the best transcendental number.
Ooop, you have a few "nobel"s where you should have "noble"s.
Good idea guys. Threaten a princess of Equestria and the daughter she's had with Discord, of all creatures. That will totally go over well. I hope you have unlimited reinforcements...
All nobles should be were the wrath of discord
Pah, just strip the nobles of their titles and exile them to an island someplace. It's much simpler.
Whoa.
(All I can squeeze out.
Down for Repairs)
I think the speaker got flopped around here
or
you were trying for a subversion joke with discord and twilight pretending discord had twilight's control problem but it came off wrong
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Or
Twilight dialouge + Discord reaction
Discord dialouge + Twilight reaction
7470681 ah, I see. That is, from what I've read, not technically a wrong way to write but it can be confusing because of an implied speaker convention.
Full disclosure I suck at these in depth grammar rules but I recognized it from reading this sites writing guide and doing some digging on the internet.
Source on the Quote: http://writerlylife.com/home/2010/09/how-to-use-dialogue-correctly/
Might make more sense if Dicord's and Twilight's reactions were tacked on to their dialogue. I say might, it might not. Go with what fits best to you.
Please make more, this is so good ❤️
No pressure tho
7470681 so is it cancelled for good? Or will you continue it at some point?
please more!!
Welp, the timeline is bucked. I'm moving into Pinkie's outside chaos proof bunker/party planning area.
But seriously, this is very interesting and I have high hopes.
I'm sorry but I've always thought that Discord and Fluttershy would have children.