As Woona found herself amongst more snow covered trees at the top of the underground cliffs, she came across a large banner that proclaimed, 'Welcome to Snowdin' in big letters. "I guess this must be a town," Woona deduced. "I hope the monsters here are friendly."
They are, Chara informed her silently. There's a shop right there. Maybe you could buy some snacks or something.
I've got plenty of spider donuts and cider...but okay. Woona stepped into the shop.
As she stepped into the shop, Woona found a bunny-like woman behind the counter, smiling at her. "Hello, traveler," the woman greeted. "I can't remember the last time I saw a new face around here. Where did you come from?"
Don't talk about the surface, Chara quickly cautioned Woona. Most monsters by now have been conditioned to believe that danger comes from the surface.
"...the Ruins," Woona offered.
"Really?" the woman asked, shocked. "Been a long time since anyone left there. Are you here by yourself?"
"Not entirely," Woona replied. "Sans and Papy are looking after me."
"Oh, the skeleton brothers," the woman replied good naturedly. "Nice guys, if a bit strange. You're safe with them."
Woona smiled, glad to hear that Sans and Papyrus were well liked. "What's fun around here?"
The woman scratched her chin. "Well, there's Grillby's if you want good food and company. There's also the library if reading's more your thing. And my sister runs the inn next door if you want to take a nap in some clean sheets."
"I'd rather take a nap in Sans' hood," Woona replied. "That way I can curl up and his walking steps rock me to sleep."
The bunny woman clutched at her chest. "You're just too adorable," she groaned.
Woona smiled, even though it couldn't be seen through her human mask. "What's for sale?"
"Well, I've got some bisicles and cinnamon bunnies," she replied. "Bisicles are two popsicles made together, so it's two servings. And the cinnamon bunnies are my own recipe."
Woona thought about it for a time, then shook her head. "I don't need any food just now. Anything else?"
The bunny woman shrugged. "Papyrus stopped by not long ago and bought out my only tough glove and manly bandanna-" She paused when she notices Woona flinch. "You okay?"
As Woona shuddered deep inside, she felt Chara slip past her magic. "I'm okay," she heard herself saying. "Just a bad dream I had. I'm...gonna get some air."
"Sorry for upsetting you," the bunny woman replied, her voice concerned.
Woona found herself nodding before leaving the store. As she got ahold of herself, she felt Chara's grip on her body fade. How'd you do that? she demanded angrily.
What she said shook you, Chara replied. Your grip on your magic, your body, your soul weakened. I acted to remove you from the situation. If you were a monster, you would be in danger of 'falling down'.
...'falling down'? she asked worriedly.
When a monster loses all hope, their bodies cease functioning, and turn to dust. It's called 'falling down', and...is the monster equivalent of death.
Woona whimpered. Please don't let me fall, Chara! she pleaded.
I won't, Chara promised.
Woona slowly brought her emotions under control. So...you can just...take control of my body when I'm in emotional turmoil?
Only if it's to the point of you being catatonic, Chara explained. Or if you allow me to.
What about my magic?
Only if your HP drops too low.
Woona nodded to herself. While it was somewhat reassuring that Chara was trying to take care of her, it was less so to know that there were situations where he could take over her body. Deciding to push past that, she continued to explore the town.
Since she wasn't feeling tired, she walked right past the Inn to see a tree decorated like the Gyftrot had been, with presents under it. Next to it was a young, gecko like, orange skinned monster in an orange and brown striped shirt, the sleeves hanging empty. "Yo!" he greeted her happily. "You're a kid too, right?"
"Uh...yeah?" Woona offered, confused.
"Cool! Nice to meet you! I'm MK!"
Woona smiled. "I'm Woona!"
MK grinned widely. "I'd love to talk more, but I'm a bit busy just now. See ya later?"
"U-huh!" Woona agreed happily, continuing on through town.
Grillby's turned out to be a rather homey restaurant run by a monster made of fire, wearing a butler's garb. In addition to the dog monsters she'd befriended on the way there, she also saw a few other monsters. However, they all seemed to be busy, so she decided to come back later.
To the north of town, a large dog or wolf like monster was throwing blocks of ice into the river as they came off a conveyor belt. The logic of these actions were not immediately apparent.
Woona decided to pass on visiting the library, however. She was uncertain how reliable the information could be in such a building when the sign was misspelled.
Beyond the library was a house with two mailboxes beside it, one overflowing with junk mail, the other labelled 'PAPYRUS'. Realizing this was where Papyrus and Sans lived, she tried to go inside, but the door was locked, as was the garage beside it. Seeing nothing else she could do in town, she moved further east.
As she moved along the path through the trees, fog began to flow in, making it hard to see even the path, or even her own hooves. However, not far in front of her, she could make out the silhouette of a tall figure, and heard a familiar voice.
"HUMAN...I DON'T KNOW HOW TO EXPLAIN THIS. WE...WE'VE BECOME SUCH GOOD FRIENDS, SOLVED PUZZLES TOGETHER...WE BOTH LOVE PASTA...IT WOULD BE SO WONDERFUL JUST TO STAY THAT." Papyrus seemed very conflicted as he spoke. "BUT...IF I DON'T CAPTURE YOU...THEN I'LL NEVER ACHIEVE MY DREAMS. NEVER BECOME A ROYAL GUARD. I MUST DO THIS! TO BECOME POWERFUL! POPULAR! PRESTIGIOUS!" He spun to face Woona. "PREPARE YOURSELF-"
Unnoticed to Papyrus, Woona had slipped up beside him while he spoke, and she now glomped onto his leg.
Glancing down at her in shock, Papyrus tried to shake her off his leg, but she wouldn't let go. "HUMAN! I CAN'T FIGHT YOU IF YOU DON'T GET OFF ME!!"
"But I don't wanna fight my friend!" Woona proclaimed happily. "So if you gotta capture me...then I surrender!"
WHAT? Chara shouted in her mind. Are you INSANE?
Asked the voice in my head, Woona countered.
Elsewhere, Sans burst into laughter for no apparent reason. No one really thought much of it.
"S...SURRENDER?" Papyrus asked, stunned. "YOU...YOU CAN DO THAT?"
"Yup!" Woona confirmed. "After all, you never said you had to beat me before capturing me! And I don't wanna fight my friend!"
Papyrus struggled to find some reason to make Woona fight him. "WELL, MAYBE I DON'T WANT TO BE YOUR FRIEND!" he countered primly. "I'M A SKELETON WITH VERY HIGH STANDARDS, AFTER ALL!"
Chara, at this point, had given up trying to reason with Woona and decided to help her. Try to think of something you know he likes you can impress him with, he instructed.
Remembering all the fuss Papyrus had made about his spaghetti, Woona decided what to say. "I can make macaroni!"
Papyrus blinked at her. "WHAT IS...MACARONI? I HAVE NOT HEARD OF THIS."
"It's like pasghetti you can play with!" Woona proclaimed proudly.
Papyrus' eyes goggled and his jaw dropped, nearly falling off his skull. "YOU'RE EXCEEDING ALL MY STANDARDS!" he wailed. He remained silent for a time, before finally speaking. "I...I CAN'T DO IT! IF I CAPTURE YOU AND TURN YOU OVER TO UNDYNE, I'LL NEVER SEE YOU AGAIN!" Sinking to his knees, he began to cry. "YOU PRETENDED TO BE HUMAN FOR ME...BUT IT WAS ALL A WASTE!" Reaching out, he removed Woona's human mask. "I'M SORRY MY LITTLE PONY FRIEND...I'VE BEEN A TERRIBLE FRIEND THAT I CAN'T EVEN ACCEPT THE NICEST THING YOU DID FOR ME..."
Frowning, Woona nuzzled him. "It's okay," Woona offered consolingly. "I forgive you."
"BUT HOW CAN I MAKE IT UP TO YOU?" Papyrus wailed as softly as he ever got.
Woona scratched her chin. "...swimming in pasghetti?" she asked.
Papyrus brightened up. "THAT'S RIGHT! I PROMISED YOU A PLATE OF SPAGHETTI BIG ENOUGH FOR YOU TO SWIM IN AND AS DELICIOUS AS YOU EVER TASTED! AND SO I SHALL MAKE IT FOR YOU!"
Grinning, Woona kissed Papyrus on the cheek. "It's a date!" she offered happily.
She didn't know why Papyrus rushed off back to town so quickly after she said that, but it was adorable, and filled her with DETERMINATION.
Aww, how cute.
Library? Don't you mean LIBRARBY?
DUDE I HALF SQUEALED HALF GASPED WITH JUICE IN MY MOUTH. I NEARLY CHOKED. DOES THIS SHOW MY LOVE FOR THIS STORY???!!!!!?
DO THE SPAGHETTI DANCE!!!
*Plays music*
Really? Monster Kid's name is MK?
You could give her macaroni
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His official listing as a character is "Monster Kid". Considering he seems to be the only 'kid' in the entire game aside from your character...
6930319 To be fair, a lot of Monsters in the Underground are terrible at naming, particularly Asgore.
Papyrus defeated and spared by a hug from a little pony princess of the moon! Ha! How (I can't believe I'm saying this...) humerus!
6930334 Fair enough
Umg I love it, it keeps getting more and more adorable!
don't you mean spaghetti?
I'm curious...Hvae you guys watched the Gametheorist video about Sans' identity?
6930383 pretty sure that's deliberate to show how Woona is pronouncing it.
Is "pasghetti" gonna be a running gag?
ya know, Chara is being A LOT more helpful than i thought she would be. i was expecting her to try to be a bit more against Woona in the whole befriending everyone.
6930396 Self preservation is my theory.
6930396
In this timeline, Chara is male.
So yes, Woona has a human boy inside her.
6930332 well....there are two others. The lady at the hotel has her daughter, and then there's Asriel.
Ooh! Are we going to try this?
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Pffff, details.
6930332 Don't forget the little bunny hahahah
6930332 I like to call him Mikey. ^.=.^
6930482 The bunny girl in the hotel? Or the "little brother"?
6930494 The "little brother"
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out of context, that does not sound right, Anyways Moving one
if Luna had told Papyrus she was a princess, he jaw probably would have fallen off in shock.
Why fight Papyrus when you can just hug him like Woona did? I'm glad the fight was averted. The part where Papyrus broke down was a bit emotional, considering how nice Woona was to him and his brother, but I'm glad everything worked out in the end.
Papyrus: IT'S TIME TO CREATE A SPAGHETTI LARGE ENOUGH FOR THE LITTLE PONY TO SWIM IN! NYEH HEH HEH!
Sans: make sure that you use the right noodles, or you'll get an...impasta.
Papyrus: SANS!!!
6930306 Spaghetti Dance!!
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*GASP!* But Cinnamon Bunnies are Red's favorite food! You can't just skip such an incredible opportunity like that!
Hmm... it's interesting to know that Flowey isn't the only ageless adolescent who's sorting through his feelings for Woona.
Wait, you mean like that guy from Into the Badlands?
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Oh, wait, that's "M.K.", you're talking about "MK". But you know, I've heard that his name is actually "Kid"... but I'm not sure if it's really true or not.
Huh, almost like another story that's in a second person perspective that seems lame at first, but sucks you in the more you progress... what was it called again? House Fastened?... Eh, I forget.
This made me smile.
And this made me chuckle.
I wonder... will the next chapter involve Papyrus actually falling for Woona? That'd be pretty zany, to be honest.
6930406 Tatsurou... language...
Did someone say spag heddy?
Seems like Papy... Mist his chance to catch a human. Probably for the best.
Sans probably likes Woona curling up in his hood one could say he is... Having a ball.
Sometimes Woona acts like a filly possessed.
Papyrus' relationship with Woona is positively... Swimming.
I'm sorry I love the premise but I can't help but cringe at the... let us say, exaggerated cuteness? Not to bash to harshly, but I, personally, feel as if Chara has been misrepresented, too nicely; Chara is a demon, let it be so. Other then that, I understand several people love and support your work and for this I congratulate you. I am no writer myself so take my criticism with a grain of salt, have a nice day.
THIS FANFICTION IS EXCEEDING MY STANDARDS!
but weren't you just expecting it to be the undertale story cut-and-pasted?
SHUT UP AND LET ME SAY MY THING, SANS!
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Chara isn't actually a demon at the start of the game.
He only becomes a demon at the end of the Genocide Route. Up until that point, he's just the narrator.
At the start of the game, he's just a specter with no soul. Not all that different from Flowey...or Napstablook, for that matter.
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I'm not sure if it's foreshadowing, or just stating a fact.
I'll have to wait and see
MK... I'm sure it's a reference or something, but all I can think of is TK.
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6930954 it's a Chekovs' Gun! it's been mentioned, now it has to happen! incoming tiny Nightmare Moon!
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holy flump. I think this is actually cuter than ur fortresshy story
6931172 Not a chance.
6931441 you cant tell me that the thought of tiny woona riding and sleeping in Sans hood is less cute than filly fluttershy in a paper bag. even without a picture the mental image alone is more daww inducing
6931454 Nope. Flutter D'Aww takes...
*shoves Tomislav into your mouth*
The fucking bullet, yeah?
6931474 hmmmm not sure what a Tomislav is but
-eats it anyways- cuse you never put something into a half dragons mouth and expect it to not be eaten.
and woona dawws always win for me. filly fluttershy is cute but nearly all powerful alicorn princess in filly form. the dawws are just so much more impressive.
6931492 God, you really need to fucking play TF2...
Tomislav
6931515 i do play tf2 about 8 hours of it every week with my buddy whos been playing it for years. just havent run into all of the custom weapons yet. the drop rate for me seems to be lower than the norm. it being made of metal though wouldnt hinder my OC from eating it.
THIS ENTIRE POST IS A SPOILER, DON'T READ IF YOU HAVEN'T PLAYED UNDERTALE UNDER MULTIPLE ENDINGS!
YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED!
Dear,
6930873
Thank you for replying to my post. By the following, I will be attempting to clarify the reasoning behind my earlier response. I will be referring to Chara as a he instead of an it, by doing so I hope some confusion is alleviated.
I will first give an overview of Chara's lore in the game of Undertale. At the start of the game your actually not naming Frisk, but instead your actually naming Chara, the first child who fell down Mt. Ebott. By completing the Genocide route you find that Chara, was originally found by Asriel Dreemur, after reaching the underground he was then adopted into the royal family.
Farther along, Chara thought it funny when he and Asriel accidentally poisoned Asgore, caused by using buttercups instead of butter in a recipe for butterscotch pie. Recording the flowers deadly affect, he hatched a terrible plan. Chara poisons himself, he dies shortly after with his last request to: "See the golden flowers of the village." Filled with grief Asriel takes in Chara's soul and proceeds to bring his body to the human village, with Chara fighting for control over Asriel's body along the way there. The villager's, horrified at seeing Asriel parading around with a child's body, proceeded to attack him mercilessly. Despite having the power to kill all of them using Chara's soul he resists despite Chara's insistence to do so. Asriel later returns to his family in the underground and dies shortly after without telling anyone what had happened with him and Chara.
Chara was awakened by the player's great determination and power throughout the genocide route. Chara explains to the player that he is the feeling the player receives when stats raise. He calls himself "the demon that comes when people call his name."
Oxford Dictionary states that a demon is "An evil spirit or devil, especially one thought to possess a person or act as a tormentor in hell." or "A cruel, evil, or destructive person or thing." Chara easily fits both criteria, as he was a demon in life and a demon in death. Now it is possible Chara still retains his soul after all this time, human souls retain form after death after all. Now with the case of Nabstablook, he is simply a variant of monster and NOT a soulless creature, soulless creatures don't retain emotions; Flowey has no emotions. The reason Flowey was revived was due to his essense that was earlier spread across the flowers, and then injected with determination by Alphys. Flowey can reset by using his will to live, which is powered by determination. The player has more determination then Flower which counters his ability to reset to an earlier point.
Thankyou for your time,
CodeX000
P.S. This post was not created to bash anything, except your views on Chara. I enjoyed the rest of your cast and the story in general, but some things are hard to ignore.
6931604
Take a look at this video.
Nearly half of what you're using is fan speculation, not canon stated facts. The only canon bit of Chara's supposed "evil" is him having a hatred of humanity... but he knows from Woona's mind that there are no more humans on the surface.
Also, it never was stated that Chara found poisoning Asgore amusing, just that he "laughed it off". Chara's actual motives for why he does things or why he is the way he is is the one thing Undertale never reveals. As such, that more than anything else is the one thing most open to interpretation.
Also, the fact that he wants the player's soul at the end of the Genocide Route heavily implies that he no longer has a human soul of his own...and that he's no longer technically human at that point. I'd classify him as a wraith, who becomes a demon after feeding on the violence the player does in the Genocide Route.
So, what sort of creature would a wraith left with only his hatred of a humanity that no longer exists become after feeding off the kindness, sincerity, giving nature, loyalty, joy, and friendships of a five year old alicorn?
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Well, I imagined there'd be some sort of "Nightmare Chara", like from that one comment I made about breaking the Pinkie Promise, but that was before him and all this zaniness got introduced, so he'll probably just be in the same boat as other characters in your stories are; confused about the odd chain of events, yet willing to go with the flow as best he can.
He'll be like "Everything you do from this moment forth is pointless," from time to time, but he'll still be like "Hey, we're in the same body, there isn't that much to accomplish, so I might as well be civil," for the rest of it.