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Rainbow Dash, on one of her usual visits to the library in pursuit of Daring Doo's adventures, is rather surprised by a series of sounds coming from Twilight's basement; finding one of her books to be quite disturbing, she decides to investigate. In doing so, she finds herself confronted by what appears to her to be a terrifying secret.

My first ponyfic. Please keep in mind that I don't speak English as my first language; neither do I have the slightest fluency in Latin. Feel free to correct my mistakes and help mend defects in my economy of style.

The second half of the story has been involuntarily rewritten, so I apologise if it seems rushed in places.

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Comments ( 21 )

This is odd... and more than a little amusing.

I want to see where this goes. Faved and liked.

There are some weird things in the passage like a random % somewhere. but this is rather interesting. I'll keep my eye on it for now.

wthat hell? i liked

*laughs more than he should* Oh, how false friends can give you harm...:pinkiehappy:

Umm... I can't read whatever that last line is, that color might as well be invisible.
I can mostly guess from the context though:pinkiehappy:

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"Je suis en train de faire sortie pour le viol!
ps. big mac irai"

'I'm forming a party for the rape, Bic Mac's coming along' in terribly butchered French.

HAHAHAHAHAHAAAAAAAAAAAAA

RAPE PARTY HAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAA

Even Google Translate is better at this than Rainbow Dash.

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False friends are a notable case where machines do better than human beings at translation: for a gangster to boast '我是一个妈的法科' to a Chinese person, for the sake of example, requires a kind of stupidity that only a man or pony could possibly ever have.

Okay.... Awkward moment when you try
Writing something in another language
and write something inappropriate
Unintentionally.....:twilightblush:
Side note ;RD knows what clopping is !?!?!?!:rainbowderp:707438

TROLOLOL. :rainbowlaugh:

Rainbow just trying to make things better. But screwing up. And thinking she made things better. :facehoof::rainbowlaugh:

Well, here's my hope that they get this little misunderstanding cleared up as soon as possible.

ugh i hate clopfics espaecially with rainbow dash. why does she have to be the lesbian shes best pony and yall know it!!!:applecry::flutterrage:

Oh Rainbow... Don't try speaking or writing in languages you don't understand.:derpytongue2:

Couple things. You have "3hook" instead of "shook" and "!nywhere" instead of "anywhere." Those were the only two errors I could find, however, in an otherwise hilarious little story. Ah, RD, rushing in before thinking. :rainbowderp:

Rape party! :pinkiegasp::pinkiesmile::pinkiecrazy:

706937 "I was a damn Law Branch"?

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'妈的法科' is pronounced 'madefake' - four syllables - the closest possible transcription of 'motherfucker' possible in Mandarin.

The construction 法科 iterally means 'law school'; one would essentially be boasting "I am a mother's law school".

Trivia: 法科 is also the Chinese name for the smallest department of Cameroon's Région du Sud-Ouest, Fako.

Thank goodness for Google translate!

you misspelled Daring Do, that's all

she indeed was preparing to impale herself with the sword for the slightest extractable bit of pleasure%2 just like in Daring Doo and the Eye of Madness;

I don't think that %2 is supposed to be there.

Dash stepped back a bit, almost crying in shamee3B nothing could possibly rival the sheer horror she felt at that point. "I—I just wanted to—"

I suspect you meant "shame"

[color= #C9C909] Je suis en train de faire sortie pour le viol!

ps. big mac irai

There was no end color mark?

Other commentors are noting errors I didn't see so I am going to call this story haunted.

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