Applejack, the element of honesty, discovers that she is starting to have feelings for a dear friend of hers. Will her friend respond to her signs and acts of love and will she feel the same way? This is the story of two mares and how they became more than friends.
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407598 Well thank you, it's my first story ever written, not just of Pony Fiction, I've done scripts before but an actual story was a big stretch to me.
Please note that i'm on almost 24/7, well... besides sleeping, i haft to do that. So feel free to ask any question that you want to.
Also guys don't forget to like the story if you want to, it helps me out allot and it motivates me to make more.
~~~ MrDynasty
I'm not sure yet wether I like this or not. I'm going to wait for next chapters to pass judgement. It looks like it could be good though. Keep at it
Not too bad. One thing I definitely have to say is that you need to work on grammar and spelling a little bit. Your story is definitely readable, but the grammar and spelling mistakes are a little bit bothersome. I noticed a few mistakes throughout my reading which I'll note later, but I definitely recommend that you either get an editor or just edit the story better yourself.
“She wont mind me being late, she knows me… although I was wanting to get some training done this morning” - the "wont" should be won't or else just spell out will not.
“Rainbow! I though I told ya to ask before you took my Apples!” -should be thought
“Spike! You know better than to run off with out my permission! Why did you leave anyway” - "with out" should be without
“Uhh… its um… nothing, I just really…” - "its" should be it's or spelled out like it is
“So, Rainbow… you are a bit… late, even if Spikes apatite never got hold of him, I would have finished my study by now” - "apatite" should be appetite unless that is some strange British spelling I am unaware of.
organise, analysed, and colour are just British spellings in case anybody was confused or brought it up.
But anyway I'll be following this and can't wait to see where you take it
408359 Well... you don't want to see it before it was proofread
Yeah, i actually have a proofreader, these are just minor mistakes that don't really matter in a way. i'd like my story to be as grammar correct as possible, so i'm sorry to have these in there, but my proofreader tried as best as he could and he could have just slipped past these. 
Anyway, i hope people like what i have for the next couple chapters. I found a good way to get the pair to bond, but i hope its not to much of a hike i'm taking with this. I was contemplating on putting in a sad tag, but i decided not to.
Anyway, i hope you enjoy the rest of the story, its my very first one so i hope you can forgive me for some of these mistakes.
~~~ MrDynasty
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Yeah it's pretty hard to correct all mistakes, there are usually a few that slip by without anyone noticing. I just like to note and correct mistakes that I find unless there are just too many to correct. I definitely forgive the mistakes because, as you suggested, it is just fanfiction. Pointing out a few mistakes are just one of the few small ways I like to help out writers here. I don't mean to come off as nit picky and I am not at all suggesting your story is bad because of a few simple mistakes. I'm not perfect at grammar or spelling either
408488 I'm the proofreader
Sorry, those mistakes slipped by me. Usually I can correct the whole thing, but evidently I suck
Sorry about that.
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I think we all know where this gonna lead up to right?
S£x ;O. 2 peeps =
408571 Your wrong on that part my friend, i assure you that there is no Clops what so ever in the entire story. I'm not a ClopFiction writer and i don't think i'll ever be, but i have been thinking about writing a Clop Fiction in the future. So yeah... just wanted to point that out
~~~ MrDynasty
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Didn't notice tht reply there. Justin Bieber jst won an award (FUUUUUUUUUUUUUU)
And Thatrs nice! No clop means Love, compassion and true feelings to one and another (Talking about AJ AND RD)
408596 That's what i aimed for and i aim to please my good man
I will explain allot more in detail in an Author Notes chapter after the story is finished on here. I still have one final chapter to write... i should really get working on that. I don't like promoting myself but let me just say, you should follow my blogs because i explain allot that goes on in my real life and i also try to connect to my Viewers as much as possible.
~~~ MrDynasty
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I can't explain in words how much i enjoyed this so, here is a Pinkie and Deadpool comic!
HOOORRRY Sheeeet.... big picture... heh heh my bad
408827 Don't forget to rate and favourite, i'm uploading Chapters daily... unless the Chapter ain't proofread yet
~~~ MrDynasty
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Thanks for reminding me!
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I could become a proof reader!
Srsly! I know how to spell and all that crap. Example: The pony jumped into the hay as the charging unicorn was chasing the pony because he stole all of the pancakes on the kitchen desk.
408923 Thanks for the offer, but i already have a proofreader. Hope your not upset, i just already have someone that i know in real life and get to talk to basically every day.
~~~ MrDynasty
408931
Ohhz. Ok :D.
Cantz wait for next chapter. Aren't you supposed to put the ponys in the chapters into the character thingy. FlutterShy and angel aren't in it D;. Pinkie Pie and Scootaloo to.
408942 Yes but you see, i put in the characters that play a big part in the story. Trust me, Twilight and Spike play a huge part of keeping the story stable and readable.
~~~ MrDynasty
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"ImmaSpikez gets his hoove>> /) and slaps his head /)-_- with it. He feels stupid and why didn't he think of that. He is also typing on his keyboard which makes him even more angry so he slaps himself Double power :D /)-_-(\
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You do not suck! Mistakes slip by everybody, including me. That's why it's typically good to get multiple people to look over what you write.
it's Ditzy not Ditsy, with z
Is there going to be another chapter?
But you've done a really good job
411654 Oops... my bad
411912 Yes there will be another chapter, coming tomorrow!
Hope your all enjoying this, i put allot of my time and effort into this story
~~~ MrDynasty
Keep up the good work.
Alright guys, don't dislike the story because of this chapter. I don't like this chapter myself, but i found it a good way to bond the two mares together. Show some support for this chapter if you can, i'll upload chapter 4 tomorrow hopefully. But right now, i'm tired...
I have a headache too so... 
~~~ MrDynasty
Right, cripple RD, how original.
Still, first two chapters were ok, so will track for now and see how it goes, no thumbs yet though.
416080 Yes... original, sorry but i'm going for an emotional shipping story here. It doesn't haft to be original, and anyway, if i never did this, the story would be allot harder to write because of the fact that well... Rainbow Dash does nothing all day already. I've barely seen any story's where Rainbow Dash gets crippled. This plays a big part in the story in the two mares bonding with each other , if i never added this, the story wouldn't be twice as long and it would be stale and boring.
Hope you understand now.
~~~ MrDynasty
What's Your Favorite Color? - Living Colour
416264 Uh... well... okay i guess?
I don't think this comment needs a signature, but i'll do the face anyway.
i think I saw a spelling errors here and there
411654 not, her name is derpy hooves
wow, this chapter took me a long time to finish reading
interpret that anyway u deem fit
417498 Actually my good man, her actual name is Ditzy Doo.
Derpy Hooves is a fan given name because of her lazy eyes in the first episode. She is mainly known as Derpy, so i forgive you for not researching first, but her real true name is Ditzy Doo.
Trust me, i research allot more than anyone else would. *True Story*
~~~ MrDynasty
417516 research what? shipping?
417531 No, i research the show and all of its background characters. Example: In order for me to make a good Lyra and Bon-Bon story, i need to know all i must about them, so i research. I see the show as art and i imply it as a lifestyle, i'm researching to know how to act with every character. Ditzy Doo is Derpy's official name, its even said in Winter Wrap Up.
~~~ MrDynasty
*thinks back to that episode* it didn't really refer to her
RD just said ditzy went the wrong direction
she was never on screen at that time
the only time when she was named was in "The Last Roundup", she was on the screen that time>>417540
417565 Well that was her original name, i'm using original names in this story. It may not have been intended to be her, but because of the clumsiness, it was pushed as her original name. Hope this clears things up because i'm going to explain stuff in the author notes at the end of the story.
~~~ MrDynasty
417583 ok, I just thought I'd say that, cause no one else did
o no Rainbow
Twilight BUT Applejack 
Rainbow!
421489 Yep, conflict my good man, will Rainbow show her feelings for Twilight or will Rainbow go for Applejack instead. Its pretty obvious who she is going to go for, but trust me. Twilight X Rainbow... i might make one later... hint... hint?
~~~ MrDynasty
This is actually very good. I'm on the edge of my seat at the moment! Keep up the good work!
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Its me ImmaSpikez brother. He told me to check this out with him. Honestly im Impressed. Just like he did. Followed, Rated thumb up and faved
Please get back.
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Its gosh not god.
Pony's don't know who god is. Just sayin!
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Noezzz!
SpikexDash :(
422496 Uh... Thanks i guess.
Just to let you know, i'm drunk right now... So, yeah 
Spike X Dash? Hmm, idea there... i do have plans on writing something to do with Spike later on in another story.
~~~ MrDynasty
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ty. U read ImmaSpikez story. If you read the chapter (Giving Kindness) u find out why he wants SpikeXDash.
Sometime's hed be on this account.
I know ur drunk. Seen ur blog :p
422541 So you actually saw my blog... well, just to let you know, i drank Vodka... so yeah, i'm pretty wasted
I might do a Spike X Dash story but i don't think i will. But for the time being, everypony give me as much feedback as possible please.
Now if you don't mind... i'm going to try and actually get a hold of myself
I'm pretty stoked... so i think i should try and get some sleep. Tomorrow i'm going to have the biggest hangover ever... 
~~~ MrDynasty
Rainbow noticed that Applejack was uncomfortable, despite Applejacks attempt to hide it. - should be Applejack's
“Oh hey Applejack, sure… I have plenty of time before the party starts and I’d wouldn’t mind having a chat with you” - This quotation and many others do not end with a period, question mark, or an exclamation point. Almost all of the quotations I saw that should have had a period but do not. All the questions and exclamation ones do seem to have them. The "I'd" should just be I, This would read I would wouldn't mind.
“I think your just growing Applejack, your body has decided that its time to find a partner, it seems to have chosen another mare though”
“Its from… uh… I think it was… Celest… Celestia!” Ditsy had the memory of a goldfish, it caused her to forget allot of things. - the first "your" should be you're. "allot" should be "a lot". Allot basically means to distribute.
Ohh Rarity! Your back, you see I was bored, so I decided I should come over to see you, but you were not in. - the your should be you're
“Its right where you left it Pinkie, now please do be careful… I don’t want to have to clean up my shop again after what you did last… time…” - its should be it's. "Its" is possessive while "it's" stands for it is.
“Oh course Fluttershy, we won’t mind” - "oh" should be of
“Oh I’m so excited, what did you guys do, oh hope there is cake, streamers!” - there should be an I before hope
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I have to agree with this, all the times god is used should either be gosh or possibly even celestia.
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I think both of those are correct. I believe ditzy is the American spelling and ditsy is the British spelling.
Just some corrections/ suggestions. Don't take this as me saying I hate the story or judging anybody just because I'm posting these errors. I've been enjoying the story so far, keep up the good work!