Waking up in an unknown place is bad.
Waking up in an unknown place in a big purple body is even worse.
Waking up and being lost in a unknown place with a big purple body and a headache is the worst ever.
(do not expect a masterpiece of any kind i only write this for fun.)
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I really like this, slow it down a bit, Other than not really explaining anything it is a good concept and decently written.
Also if you need a pre-reader I can do it for you.
Final Fantasy behemoth or...?
yeah i know its a bit fast but i kinda suck at slower parts where nothing actually happens but thanks for the thumbs up.
and yes it is a final fantasy behemoth tried to add a picture but well i have no idea what happened
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eeyup big purple and horned
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hey nice of you to offer yourself to be a pre reader uhm however it works lol im not the smartest and its 2 in the morning here
696900 Then why are you not asleep silly
Had to look up Final Fantasy Behemoth on google images.
And i noticed there are different versions.
Which one is closest to... um... Person (?) in this story ?
There is: http://images.wikia.com/finalfantasy/images/5/5c/Behemothffix.jpg
http://www.everway.homecall.co.uk/Fantasy/behemoth10.jpg
http://www.fftrealm.com/content/pics/behemoth.jpg
But still you get +1 like from me
Please, proceed with more story.
whoa really what the actual hell? 7 thumbs up? and all i did was a slight remake of this shit story?
well thanks guys feels good to have a story with so many thumbs up lol
oh yeah i got a pic but i cant add it in this lol stupid url thingy
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okay it is the first one of your pics that is the one i tried to use.
699006
Then let's leave it in comments for now? It can be removed later. If needed to be removed.
images.wikia.com/finalfantasy/images/5/5c/Behemothffix.jpg
And about thumbs up. If it keeps going at this speed you might venture into the... Feature Box!
what the actual hell 8 thumbs up and favorites keep coming in.
is this story really so unique?
is behemoths just the most lovable creatures?
has really noone done a story like this before?
oh no first thumb down and the dick didnt even give a reason.
Looks promising.
To character: Keep going!
To author: Just let the character go on. Things will start happening. If you have a world inside your head. And even if you don't, then let things happen.
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heh yeah but it feels weird the other stories have a meaning this one i just make up stuff as i go
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Ooh! You are 4th wall breaker too
This gets even more interesting
You don't know where to story will go just because it goes without you! Try to sneak peek to that world again and write what you see. Just a moment. A fraction, maybe?
Just don't change writing style or Point of View (POV).
And if you get idea about what will happen later, write it down anywhere, just to have it. It might come useful later. Or useless.
God help us all if you were omega or Ruby/Emerald Weapon
this is getting rediculous 15 likes and numerous favorites wtf guys this is not a good story lol
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Actually "Fav" usually means story is getting tracked. It is more stable than "send me an e-mail" thing.
And it is a good story.
*Starts hypnotizing*
Write more. You see likes, you are liked. People want more. Give them more. You will like being liked.
...
Where is Discord smile?
Oh well, have this one: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IawuzUUYV7E
well to be honest it is actually kinda fun just to write about nothing lol
needs more cowbell
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a lot of cowbell
also hes a fucking behemoth, ya know those GIANT MONSTERS WITH AN ASSLOAD OF HP AND ARE ABLE TO FUCKING SHOOT LASERS OUT THEIR MOUTHS.
even if he doesnt know how to shoot a laser hes fucking huge hence the name behemoth
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so true but knowing nothing about his body other than it is huge and strong is hard against a flock of timberwolves
and for the sake of it wtf guys 21 likes? are you high?this is so ridiculous apparently everyone loves behemoths
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1. Story is fun.
2. Story flows in good way.
3. There is enough information and it gives senses as if being near where actions take place or even having POV of hero.
4. Chapters 1-2k words long are usually easy to read. Like small Japanese food. Small bits, but each is tasty.
5. ...
6. PROFIT!
So far so good. Didn't noticed any mistakes and story keeps going on and on. More, please.
Oh, and FIRST!
Edit.
Found this image. Added!
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They're lucky they didn't get a meteor counter for knocking him out.
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THE FIRST TO DIE!!!!
lol i am happy to have such weirdos as you guys as my readers, stil got a thumb down without a comment why
Big Mac and Fluttershy sitting on a tree...
Other than obvious few strings of next chapter, writing is good. Maybe there are sings of beginner, but I can't place my finger on it.
And as usual, you get one more "MOAR!" from me.
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yay lol , and yes it is fluttermac since i love that couple, why i dont know maybe because 2 quiet ones fit well.
if the nam isn't FF don't even bother
I have more important things than sleep! Read it!
Ah... Good new chapter. Lulz, lulz all around
Nap time.
851963 SLEEP IS FOR THE WEAK
From what I can tell the main 6 seem characterized right. Also what happened to Fluttershy? you've got me worried since they don't just go confirm the story right away. DID SHE EXPLODE!?!?
TWICE!?
(bows to new god)
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thrice actually
i'm annoyed he took being tied up and assaulted so well after saving a ponies life. i'd be just a little more pissed
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well something i noticed he is kinda like me and i accept alot of shit.
and i just love that everytime i update this story i get 4 more favourites lol
hahahahahahahahaaaaa!!!!!! Take that ya beasty!!! Your backa fin is a broke, try to swim away now!!!
Oh no! Short chapter!
Oh well, tasty words! Om-nom-nom!
Even though it is only 800 words, it is still good one. But you know what crows always says... MOAR!
And check i's in your chapter. Some that should be capital are not so much capital.
"That`s not fair you made me broke the roof."
good chapter.
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shit lol will try fix it
899792 no problem.
Aaah yes a behemoth screaming like a little girl.
Though to be far I share his distast for needles and other pointy objects, but only those that are pointed at me, specially to my face XX.
Seriously? What is wrong with needles and pointy objects. My blood was taken for different tests more often than I ride a bicycle (literally).
So I don't get it. I mean I do understand that some people (or not people) don't like needles and being poked... But why so much?
There are enough places to take blood from in most bodies. And it does not hurt unless medic is very low skilled or you are jumpy (or both).
Not to be a grammar nazi but I found a few errors nothing to worry about but just to inform you.
There seems to be a some I's not capitalized like i'm should be I'm.
I feel his pain, I hate~~~~ neeeedlllessss... Uuuh haha llaolaoloallalaaaaa. ugh la ahhahahaahaa. I hate the word even. bluh.
anyone with invisible vains like me know that needle fear is completely justified.