For Hunter Cunningham, life was simple and filled with as many surprises as an empty box. He played video games in his small but comfortable apartment, paid for by the wealth his parents gave him, read books, chatted with friends on Facebook or Steam, but not much else. He never felt the urge to go do things everyone told him were "exciting" and "fun". Books and games were all he needed, thank you. Everything was controlled and predictable, and that was how he liked it.
As you might imagine, waking up one morning as a dragon in Equestria was a bit outside his comfort zone.
Chapters (3)
Huzzah, another story of a Dragon that isn't our little purple and green friend!
I love the chapter, short, but very well written. It's funny too, because he's a dragon and he can't be burnt, I expect he'll feel really silly for running from fire that can't hurt him. Also, it's raining, it's a thunderstorm and he's COMPLAINING about a little extra warmth :P
Keen for more, this story...
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2954045 :D
I'm glad you liked it man! Compared to everything I've written in the past, this is definitely the best, at least objectively.
Thank you a bunch~!
First, I just want to say- wow. I almost passed this up, thinking it would be another generic HiE, but the writing here is really good. Please update soon, because I would love to see where this goes.
And now, a bit of advice. Your pacing is a bit fast. I didn't feel like we really got to know the character here, although maybe that's what you're going for. Still, I felt like this was too short for a full chapter. Maybe stretch it out a bit, give us some more detail about the character or the world. Also, you might want to get another image for the story, because the one you have right now put me off a bit.
This is just some constructive criticism, which you can totally ignore
. It's a relief to see an HiE that has both a decent, original idea and proper spelling and grammar. Keep up the great work!
P.S. Love your username
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2954513 Constructive criticism is something that there is never too much of, don't fret. I appreciate every word of it!
Pacing has always been my biggest problem, especially a couple of years ago. I couldn't take things slow when I was trying.
My plan is further establish Hunter's character once he's interacting with other characters, so you'll get more out of him than 'afraid of thunder' soon!
yes another human turned into a dragon story this site has very little of them so it's always refreshing to see a new one and it has a very good start very different i give it thumbs up as well as a fav and a like ^.=.^
2955028 I was hoping it was something like that. Can't wait to read more!
i lurves it
GIVE ME ANOTHER CHAPTERRRR
This Chapter, I Like it, Another please.
Nice this is new keep it going!
2955794 SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON
2956824 ok.
Another human turned dragon story?... OK I'm in.
YAY DRAGON STORY!
Instant fav+like for HTD(human turned dragon) in equestria(should be much more of it in my opinion). BUT i think u should work more on it (longer chapters preferably)
2958434 I'm intending to make other chapters longer, but the first was written mostly spur of the moment.
cool sounds like it will be a cool story but the only complaint i have is i don't like it when the human knows about mlp but that's just me if he dos not tell anyone about the show and if he knows what will happen in the future that would give him a mysterious vibe that would be nice but if he just goes and says ''hey your all a TV show to me'' something like that would be a turn off to me for the story but again that's just me. i cant wait to see were this story is heading keep it up
Mmm, hot damn! I'll be watching for an update on this one! =D
first story with character as a Lydenwyrm not bad my friend
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MOAR!
Also why do so many Brony stories have the brony lie about where they from? 
2965969 Because the alternative is a little unbelievable. At the worst, they don't believe it and think he's lying and is doing it on purpose. At best, they think he's crazy.
Without proof, and having information he shouldn't know will just make him look like a stalker, they won't believe him.
2965969 How would you react if someone (somepony) told you that they were from a universe/dimension that had you as a tv character. And this is Flutters'. imagine her reaction to being told that she's being watched by a bunch of random people?
Simple, don't say the TV part. Just say you didn't used to be a dragon. 2966070
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How would you react if someone told you your life was just a work of fiction?
Let me be more clear, about being a human. I never said anything about the TV Show. ABOUT BEING HUMAN
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Would probably be similar to someone walking upto you and claiming to be from Mars then
awesome, I love Fluttershy, and i think you got her just right.
Nope because that world is full of magic. And those mares (that means Fluttershy) have experienced first hand that stuff such has transformations exist. It's kind of different when talking about Equestria. Because it has magic! Get what I'm saying? I guess I just wanted to point out that no matter how unique a story can get, plenty of them still conform to the same situation. Specifically HIE stories. 2966193
You have just earned yourself an upvote.
[X] Brony in Equestria
[X] Faked Amnesia
[X] Way too calm over being in a new body on a new world
[X] Fluttershy immediately accepting him, nevermind the fact he's a dragon (She was scared shitless in DragonShy episode)
While you have a promising start and good grammar, your approach and the above cliches detract from it. I'll be keeping an eye out, just be extremely careful of how hard and far you treach on those cliches when moving forward.
2965969 Why do you think? "HEY, IM AN ALIEN FROM ANOTHER WORLD WHOM HAS TAKEN AN ENTIRELY NEW AND UNFAMILIAR BODY!"
..Would that sound like a sane thing to you?
Sighs, I'm done. I've tried to explain how a world filled with magic kind of changes things. Who's to say that inter dimensional travel is not unheard of in Equestria at all? But really I'm done. I never said this was a bad idea, it was a simple question I asked. Oh by the way, the OC could simply use information that he should not have as evidence. Say stuff that happened to the Mane 6 when no one was around. 2966487
Well, you have people arguing in the comments, so that's a good start. Thanks for the update, it's a good chapter and I'd love to see where it goes (although you might want to watch the cliches, as Monsieur spacecowboy said). The pacing here feels a lot better, although you could have used some more time to let Fluttershy to accept him.
Still, this is just some advice. The story itself is really great. Please, keep 'em coming!
2966497 Yes, because that would work out well. Probably be arrested for stalking or something, to be honest...And if multiversal (Not dimension, we're all in 3-D here..no matter what the show looks like) travel is possible..well...it is highly unlikely, to be blunt.
How could you stalk certain scenes? Such as Twilight and Spike in front of that Mirror Sombra had? No one was with them, literally. There are plenty of examples of this, stalking would be pretty difficult in some cases. Also, are you saying taht in any story with their dimension it is automatically 2D and cartoon like? I'm confused... 2967028
2967042 First off, that is exactly WHY. How would he know? That in and of itself would lead to some serious negative reactions. And second, dimension refers to space, such as Length, Width, and Height. Dimensional travel is inaccurate, because it means that we would be losing one or more of those three, or gaining more. A true 2-D would have No depth. Quite literally. I am saying that it's multiversal travel.
2967148 Still..Mostly, not a positive first reaction. And the first ones are usually quite important. What would happen if, say, RD chased him? He is a dragon after all..Nothing good would come of it.
If he is a big or medium sized one, he could probably withstand a kick. If I was him, I'd let her kick me a few times and then scream to get her attention and kindly ask why the hell she is doing that
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2967295 Well, he isn't a BIG dragon, i imagine he's a bit bigger than a pony...prooobably gonna hurt.
Moar
So, running out into rain, which I assume is cold, is like a rush of cold water? Or should I say, getting soaked with cold water clears the mind like a rush of cold water? A little redundant, don't you think?
On a side note, I am enjoying this story and want to see how this works out. My only complaint is that the character has knowledge about the show. Under no circumstances does that turn out well UNLESS your character is a Gary Stu/Mary Sue.
2966895 I know, right? I feel way more proud of that fact than I should.
I am aware that having him lie is definitely cliche, but i did it because it seemed in character with Hunter. Still, I'll try and keep this story more unique than most HiEs.
Great start. Usually this is where transformation fics or HIE fics die burn hard and fast. Congrats.
ok....you awoken my curiosity ...more please,if you would
this is, interesting. My attention is achieved
Ooohh interesting...will read.