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Wandering Pigeon
I came here to eat breadcrumbs and indiscriminately shit on cars. And I'm all out of breadcrumbs...
Wandering Pigeon
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Love the comic, awesome job
Not gonna lie, that was kind of cruel for Moondancer to do all that. Even if Twilight was stalking her.
If I were Twilight, I'd so arrest her after that. Physical and mental abuse of a Princess, yeah, she'd be so screwed.
i want a sequel.
Is there going to be a sequel
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Maybe. If I get the inspiration for it I'll continue it.
She's screwed. All Twi needs to do is run crying to Celestia and Moondancer will be in a dungeon.
6679376 what $20 for sequel?
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No, no money or anything like that. Just if I get an idea and the drive for a sequel/continuation, then I will do it.
This is great, I was hoping someone would turn this comic into a fanfic. Hope you can come up with something for a sequel
6681633 perhaps moon dancer gets the idea to do a study on the physical, mental, and even social effects of long term exposure of a pony to deviant culture (ABDL, bondage, etc....). and she has the perfect subject to test with.
6683021 WAIT WAIT WAIT THIS IS A COMIC?!!!!!
oh. just re-read the description
>finally a fic for that pic....
>Contains diapers, diaper usage, and ABDL themes
>....wait wut , i don't remember any of that being in the comic :l , guess that's what you meant by loosely based on.....
Well.... somepony's going to prison....
I'm not disliking this but its kinda on the bad side. Sorry but sometimes being honest has to come first
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Well if you're going to be honest with your criticism then can you at least be constructive as well? Just saying a story is bad doesn't help an author improve at all.
6694036 Sorry, how about this?
I feel that the story was unfair to Twilight as it is outside someone's character zone. Moondancer should've known that twilight was a alicorn and the consequences of doing such a thing as that. The idea of the spell was a good idea and i was planning on doing a nice funny story regarding it. But the idea that Twilight has to go through all that seems just wrong. If anything i fell that Moondancer should've let twilight go and at least give her a chance for making her go through all that and later twilight forgives her for being stubborn. That way, when they think back at it they would give a laugh of how it was ridiculous. I hope this was a better understanding on how i think on the story.
6683858 well and a nsfw version with bondage and "toys".
I love the idea but it's too short. It's one point after another, try things like Twilight resisting or Moondancer getting sadistic ideas about it. Maybe Moondancer could draw an additional character to torment Twilight or they can have some sort of fruitless conversation.
try putting your key moments apart and try to fill in things that happen between them. Also try to be less exact and more vague in your descriptions. It helps both to expand the story and make it feel more natural.
Something that could work is try to reach 3000+ words without drastically changing any of your key moments.
Well, I can see Twilight going all DBZ on Moondancer once she gets out. Sorta like how she was with Tirek. I know I'd beat the ever living snot out of anyone who did that sort of thing to me.
Hhe yeah this was funny story about being in book. almsot wnat o make on like i only a litte longer. don know Trxe zng twlght no a book and abl to baby her just by speakng the words.
Well, this was a lot of fun. A simple idea, well excecuted, and short enough that it doesn't overstay its welcome.
Kudos!
Wow moon dancer was being a JERK... Even I wouldn't go that far if I wanted to be left alone
6694036 sequel?
7407823 Probably not for a while, if at all. I just have a bunch if other things I want to work on instead right now.
Really wish there was more stories like this uing that in a book spell.
Now this certainly is an alternate way in which the scene at the library could go. What makes it interesting is how believable this could be. Moondancer giving into her frustration of Twilight stalking her while feeling so much pain that, after so long, she was just now getting some degree of acknowledgment for the trauma Twilight caused. It's so easy to see her get carried away with her "Edits" until she feels she, in a way, has gotten back for being reintroduced to such negative memories by the one who feels a simple apology is going to fix so much internal damage.
Dark, yes. Believable, certainly. Not everything turns out peachy keen after trauma has settled deep in the mind. Fortunately Moondancer was more passive aggressive than aggressive in trying to berid herself of Twili.
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So updates on sequel?
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No, not really. There isn't really anything I want to add to this story in any form of continuation. Sorry.
Honestly, being stuck there for 8-ish hours will probably destroy her mind and regress her in my headcanon.