This fic is a human AU, characters hair colors and names are changed to seem more human.
What happens when Shy's mother takes in another troubled delinquent?
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flutteredchaos
I like writing stories about childrens cartoons and I'm highly medicated, how are ya?
flutteredchaos
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This sounds like a good story. I can't wait for more.
I'm really enjoying this so far!
I hope to read more soon!!
Hm... it seems like you're putting a lot of effort into this, so I'm gonna help you out!
1: Do not describe what your story is in the title. Take out the words "Fluttercord AU" from the title, and capitalize the first letter of every word so it looks like this: "Nothing Like You" This is just me, but I would do this: "There's Nothing Like You"
2: Your description is extremely basic and doesn't do a good job of attracting readers. You've written 13k words for this story, surely you can come up with something better. You have to write something that'll grab people, draw them in, and keep them.
3:
Delete that from your description. Also, changing the characters' hair colors and names to make them seem more human is a bad choice, and it could be the reason why you aren't getting that many readers. It's completely fine to write humanized stories, but when you change the characters from what everybody knows and loves them as, you're pretty much shooting yourself in the foot. I would go back and describe them as they are in the show.
4:
This part of your description is rather lacking. We don't know who Fluttershy's mother is, and simply leaving it at that won't do your story justice. Go look at how a lot of the big writers write their descriptions: http://www.fimfiction.net/search/users?s=followers and see how they structure them. Find someone who has a romance story and imitate their style while describing your own story. You have to make it unique, and you have to make the potential readers wanting more.
5: This last point is a very big issue. You haven't put your story into any groups yet, which means that you're only getting views from when your story shows up on the front page whenever you update it. I'm sure you'd love to get hundreds more views, so click this link here: http://www.fimfiction.net/manage_user/groups?group_name= It shows all of the groups on fimfiction. Go through the first twenty or so pages of groups and join them, and put your story into the relevant groups. It's very easy to do, and there are hundreds of groups. A lot of them have hundreds of people, so just imagine this: If you put your story into the FlutterCord group, (http://www.fimfiction.net/group/198345/fluttercord), 703 people will suddenly have access to your story. There are also so many groups for new writers such as yourself, and you could benefit greatly from joining them!
6: If you want to attract more readers, find some cover art for your story. It's very easy to find something for your story, and you can pretty much use anything you find unless the artist specifically says that you can't use it. So long as you give credit to the artist and provide a link back to their userpage, you won't have any issues. Usually, artists love it when people use their art for fanfictions, and by using fan-made art, you give that artist free promotion while you attract more readers with it. It's a win-win for both of you, and it brings the community together.
If you have any questions, feel free to reply to me and I'd be happy to help you out.
Great chapter. Was Discord's mom in love with someone, then chose to be with this Gerard person because of money? :( The next chapter should be interesting though :)
update soon
plus I really hate discord father
6756860 An update should be coming in the next few days
when will you continue
6946558 I currently have a bit of the next chapter written, I'm hoping to have an update up soon but no promises.
can't wait to see more
Can't wait for more soon
UPDATE!!!!!! Please?
You better not let Discord die!
If you do, I wouldn't know what to do. 
what happen next
Why can I also hear Discord saying that?
6668474 Oh hey it's Abyss. Hey man :)
Dang it this was a freaky cliffhanger! So this story was one I always skipped over when I was looking in the Fluttercord Group, but I'm glad I decided to read it because it's good so far.
DISCORD IS DRACO MALFOY!!!!!!
I don't think that Sombra killed himself, and I also don't think it was Shy who killed him, but what about Nora???? Yeah, probably not.
update please
can't wait to see more soon