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Must. Have. MOAR!!!
That was seriously messed up. I'm not saying it was bad, it was a great chapter, but it was also just...ouch. Sombra's 'dad' was a total **** ****. Seriously, that was really messed up.
Though looking at this chapter, it does make sense why the book Fluttershy read earlier described Sombra like that. He truly became an animal because of his father. Guess it wasn't a lie like Fluttershy thought...but I can't help but think that Fluttershy isn't going to be able to convince him to stop being a monster. Going through something like that...hard to change someone after that.
Great chapter though.
Wow, this chaoter was intense. I didn't expected Sombra to have such a tragic childhood and the way Fluttershy listened to the sad tale and comforted him was very sweet. I got to say that I like this version of Sombra as he's very capable of doing vicious things as his story to Fluttershy proves, but he also feels remorse for some of his actions. I got to say, Sombra's dad and his half-brother give a Game of Thrones vibe in terms of cruelty, though I do feel curious about something. What happened to Sombra's stepmother (the second Queen)? Anyway, thanks for the chapter.
Omg! I'm being Fluttershy right now! ;0; I'm such a crybaby! XD But splendid chapter!
Geez you've managed to create a believable and incredibly sympathetic backstory to King Sombra as a character. I love the way you had him deliver the explanation with little details of prose, especially with that one line "more guards came, and more guards died" as if reading from a storybook of his own life.
Can't wait to see where you go with this.
hands down best sombra story ever.
Great origin story. So Sombra is the legitimate ruler of the Empire and Equestria placed a foreign pony to serve as a puppet as they annex the Empire and make it into a tributary state? Wouldn't be surprised. Hardly surprised that he killed his father and half brother, the shits.
7975865 I'm guessing she's dead. Probably in a gruesome twisted dead way as well.
Wow...
There is no words to describe on how messed up that is, to think that his whole life was filled with pain and suffering from his people and his own father no less
Fluttershy did the right thing by listening to his tale and it might have helped their relationship by doing so, to be labeled nothing more than a monster or a demon when he was just child and torturing him is sick
But I love this chapter so much cause u get to hear his side of the story and what he had to endure in his life, wonderful chapter, can't wait to see what happens next, keep it up?
I dubbeth thee, 'Hitler Sydrome.' Hitler was a massive d*** because his father was a d***, and he couldn't get into art school. Same witbh sombra. Also, symphony for the devil is a fantatic song. Moar pls.
7976043 season 6 was all about political manipulation. Celestia doesn't know when to leave well enough alone.
This chapter was painted with beautiful tragedy and hopefulness in tandem. What was shown here is proof that monsters are created, not born.
What sucks is knowing that when Fluttershy's friends inevitably come to what they believe is their rescue, they will undoubtedly pay no heed to her pleas as she defends her king. Such is a tragic tale of love.
Speaking of love, that's the best part of this story: While the start for Sombra and Fluttershy was less than desirable, it showed that in most (if not, all) cases, love takes time and work.
7975865 I almost thought that was Princess Platinum
Very sad backstory. I can't wait for more.
Oh 2 chapters in 2 weeks, I'm being spoiled. Loveing this story so much, easily in my top 3 Sombrashy stories!!!!
Damn sombra.
I want yo hug him now lol.
Poor guy i hope his dad is in hell.
7976043 Sure, just like Discord is the 'rightful ruler' of Equestria. It's just that they were complete monsters and their people had to be liberated.
The actual right to rule in any system of government comes from the will of the people, anyway. Without a significant pro-Sombra (or pro-Discord) faction, there's no reason to call the current government illegitimate.
This version of Sombra could *conceivably* become the rightful ruler again, but it's hard to see how he'd get there from here, since he was a total monster to the Crystal Ponies for a pretty long time.
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So simply being an Alicorn is qualification enough to rule? Considering his predecessor, Sombra isn't too strange from the norm for the Empire.
Also Discord is a spirit. Hardly appropriate to apply mortal morality to him.
I hardly think that any monarchy no matter how benign cares about the 'will of the people'.
7977722 Top three? There's only, like, four of them that I know of. I'm glad mine wasn't the odd man out.
7978616 there are a few more than 4, sadly the others are either inactive, on hiatus or have been cancelled. I also ment to type Sombra instead of sombrashy but I guess my brain was in ship mode. Oh well. Ironically Sombrashy stories still top that list as well even though I first wasn't all that big a fan of this ship.
7978391 What does being an alicorn have to do with anything?
It's not whether the monarch cares about the people, it's whether the people accept the monarch as their ruler, and the Crystal ponies do not accept Sombra, so he's not their rightful ruler.
7975782 well you have to take into account that the crystal empire was in the medieval times and sombra had been born different, im not defending the father king but in that era being different was a sign of demons, witchcraft or, plain and simple, being destined to be evil, heck someone suffering an epileptic attack was considered to be possesed by demons. That was the mindset of the medieval times here in our world, which is reflected in equestria so, to us it is messed up but to a person of old its normal as breathing.
All in all its a perfect plot device to make Sombra as a normal, if different, pony without the cannon supporters complaining that he is an Umbrum in the show, just a pony with bad luck upon birth who finally snapped after decades of abuse.....any human would flip like that.
Sombra doesn't seem to regret killing his family, and I think he hates the Empire by association because they were his father's subjects so tormenting them was a form of catharsis for him. Not saying it was justified, just trying to understand him better. And again him being born in a different time, his morals and values would be very different in the present.
7980580 That is true. I was just...this story does make me feel bad for Sombra but it also justifies the book Fluttershy read earlier. It said he was a monster back then, and we saw how he became one. Though...I'm still not on his side in this. He still is pretty evil even now, especially what he did to Fluttershy at the start of this. The only difference now is we know he does take after his father in a way and we know why he acts the way he does.
7981042 we both can agree on that
7981071 Thanks.
Man, this is definitely one of the best stories on the site, great job!
Great origin version. You rly should complete this piece.
wonderful job creating sombra history really great work can't wait to see what happens next.
This is one of the best origin stories for sombra I've ever read and I love sombra as a character
Hopefully Fluttershy gets her friends up there to visit and see how it isn't terrible before they bust in there to rescue her and mess everything up.
Following the phrase:
"Why do the bad boys get the good girls?
My rage demons spawned again while reading this chapter. Shame the bastard of a former king died instead of witnessing what he had sowed.
7975865 She died in childbirth.
Sombra's struggle to be better makes me think of the song Releasing the Demons by Godsmack
Damn...that was an intense chapter...and I LOVED IT!
I have to say, I think he was justified in how he reacted in his madness. I mean his father tried to kill him so many times, even hiring a dragon and then getting his new son to try and kill him too.
Plus as he said he'd been driven mad as a result of the realization, so he can't be fully blamed for what he did.
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It's not bad
It's badass.
God damn this is a good chapter
Thoughts at the start of chapter:
I'm getting Sombra as a version Tyrion Lannister who ended up looking more like the Mountain than the Imp. I imagine this might have played out much the same, had Tyrion been the firstborn, not the third. That, and if Tywin wasn't such a bloody evil genius.
And this chapter is the beginning of what I was waiting for. Congrats sir and enjoy a like and fave.
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Tywin died as he deserved to die:
Betrayed by his forgotten son on the shitter.
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I was about to say Tywin betrayed him first, but his father never was on his side to begin with. The only crime Tyrion was ever guilty of was playing the card he was dealt.
Hell, his father probably would have given him to the sea as a babe if his fear of the gods' wrath hadn't swayed him to do otherwise. He pretty much said so himself in the second book.
Ok- even IF Sombra was half-demon, it didn't give anypony the right to call him evil because of it! Merlin from Arthurian mythology was fathered by an incubus (that's why he was so good at magic), and the mother of Abe-no-Seimei (a famed exorcist and sorcerer of ancient Japan who is worshiped as a GOD in some places) was said to have been a fox-demon! Actually, in all the mythological research I've done, Judeo-Christian religions are the only ones that consider demons pure evil. Most religions think of demons as a lot like people: some are good, some are bad, most are a bit of both (which makes A LOT more sense to me... I mean, think about it: is it REALLY possible for an entire species to be evil?!) Anyway, great story, keep it up!!!
"That sounds a little like my Stare."
"Your... 'Stare'?" Sombra asked, puzzled.
"It's where I glare at somecreature and they, um... back off."
"Like what?"
"Um... well... I once Stared down a Cocktrice."
"... You what?"
(Imagines the power of their foal's Stare) Mother of God...
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I'm glad you brought this part of the chapter to my attention. I didn't like the way the last few sentences in that paragraph were structured so I revised it a bit. Thanks for helping me improve, even if that wasn't your intention.
There was a lot to unpack in this chapter, including someone who actually understands how blood spatter works! I also wonder what happened to Sombra's stepmom, since it does seem to gloss over her once her husband and son are killed? You continue to have strong emotion, vivid prose, and establish a great world here. The Sombra of your stories is also one that continues to develop wonderfully and stick out a lot, which is always something to commend because he is usually handled so poorly by other writers or just a passable expanded-from-show version. You've really crafted a compelling spooky horse king here, and made him one of the highlights of this tale.
What happened to the old queen? The new one that Sombra’s father married?
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yeah Im really liking the story, but wasn't expecting AU from it, especially not after the first chapter.
Its a pleasant surprise despite my unmet expectations, and while clearly juvenile is still good
Sombra is actually spanish for "shadow."