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... I swear to God, if I feel- *feels face and finds waterfall of tears* -... God-fucking-damnit... this will number 3 to do this same thing to within the last month.
P.S. you did great with the song, just finding the proper beat was bit difficult.
I. SO. LOVE. IT!!!!!
This is so far the best chapter of this amazing story! Seriously, I love every word here! The best part is the first time Starlight sees Fluttershy the Queen (with a little heir already under her heart), and followed by an even better confrontation of the husband and the wife! I so can't wait on the conversation between Fluttershy and Starlight, maybe followed with the awakening of Twilight and the others. Heh, wonder how a more civil visit from the others Mane 6 would go, not to say about Discord learning that his buddy will have a baby with the once greatest tyrant known to ponykind.
Please make the next chapter come soon! I'm starving for new glorious content!
And now she is with foal.
There is so much mystery and plot going on it's getting a little hard to comprehend. I heard Chekov's gun being cocked, but I couldn't tell what for. I loved this chapter and I really want to read the next one.
Oh poor Starlight. What you understand as ass kissing is sincere adoration and loyalty of the citizens and guards for their king and queen.
FINALLY!
*adds to read later*
Wow, this chapter was epic. I have to say that Sombra has become quite the beloved king since the timeskip and Starlight’s beliefs that the subjects were asskissers seems to slowly be dying. I got a laugh that the currency is now a coin of a mongoose eating a snake, as it seems that Fluttershy took Etey’s analogy of Sombra to heart. Seeing Fluttershy sing a love song in public while pregnant and then have a married couple argument with Sombra was the epitome of funny and awesome. It was great seeing her cow bloodthirsty guards and funny that she and Sombra do nothing but argue in one moment and then become sweethearts on the next while Starlight can only stare. Overall, I really loved this chapter.
It takes a strong mare to deny what's right in front of her, and if the truth is undeniable, you create your own. The truth, Starlight, is that you're here because you wanted to feel like something you're not: a hero.
. I lost it there. Lost my mind right there!
Okay, I feel like Starlight is the only sane one around, considering everyone’s okay with Sombra keeping Twilight Sparkle, the Princess of friendship as a prisoner, in a coma, after beating her within inches of her life. As in, the one pony who has saved the WORLD As they know it from being destroyed entirely several times over. Not to mention he’s effectively neutered the only weapons that were capable of doing said saving of the world. What were to happen if another Tirek were to come along? (Maybe just Tirek considering when this story seems to be taking place) there would be no one to defend everyone but Sombra... so it would be Sombra’s hubris and The fact that everyone seems so willing to forgive him for wanting to murder the Crystal Empire after having been ousted as their Slave King.
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It's possible most of them haven't heard of the deeds Twilight has done as they were slaves. The ones who do know however, probably wouldn't care as they still tried to commit murder. You don't let a guy who saved a few people from a burning building away with murdering someone a few days later.
Also, I still don't think they care about what he did with the crystal empire, he's saved them from a fate worse than death and has Fluttershy to balance him out. Many might not see what he used to be.
I love watching Sombra and Fluttershy bicker with each other, truly the signs of a healthy relationship. Curious about the pregnancy, how far is she, what will the baby be and what gender. A certain mare who threatened the fabric of reality through her flagrant abuse of time travel should be a lot less self righteous. Otherwise great work.
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She still in high school though
Okay, I know this isn't what actually happened, and he probably just lifted her into the air, flipped her and dropped her. But I can't help but imagine that as Sombra suplexing Starlight.
...And Sombra suplexing Starlight is now my favorite series of words.
I may or may not, have rolled around on the floor like a idiot in joy while reading this.
i was not expecting flutters to have a kid well not yet anyway good job
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I was really mostly talking about Fluttershy herself for most of that, probably should have clarified that in the original draft
Well well! Our queen is preggers!
The song was beautiful. To your credit, you did well. The lover's quarrel was funny, too
I'm just gonna say it.
Starlight is being a MASSIVE hypocrite considering actions nearly wiped out the universe. Also, great update.
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They're obviously asskissers. Terrified that he'll snap and murder them and going out of their way to be even more brutal to keep on his good side. It looks like only Fluttershy gets a free pass, and the rest are ruled by fear.
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Or they could just be violent ponies. Assuming they lived their lived in the peninsula, they're probably used to violence and were probably thugs before becoming guards. Since Sombra has only been back for less than a year, there's no telling how long it will take the idea that "murder is the best solution" to fade. Assuming it ever will.
amazing
can't wait for more
I see that Rains of Castamere reference slipped in there
*sigh*...still waiting for the Discord invasion...
I use getting to read each of these new chapters as my motivation to finish my homework faster. Oh Starlight you fool, I can't wait for your realization at how stupid you've been.
There is just too much to love about this chapter to put into words!!!
Also Pregnant Fluttershy!!!
You know, after some deliberation, my earlier comments have been a bit brash and hard. I am still left with one question though... why does sombra do such a complete about face of character? I would like to see the reasoning explored in future chapters, but after re-reading, I would like to simply say: “happy reading”
8716820 I see that you used a Spec Ops: The Line quote. I applaud you.
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And then Sombra does this
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I'm choking! XD
Oh, don't worry, though I had difficulty with finding a beat, once I had, it is a very pleasant little song. You don't want to see the songs I wrote. Now, those are terrible.
I... I don't know what to think anymore... what hath thou done to me, author?!
True
I love this story.
God damn it. I read this whole thing today, and just as we get to a part I've been waiting for for a while, I AM NOW UP TO DATE.
What's the plan for the rest of this, i.e. length and release schedule?
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Aye. But he wasn't stupid enough to do what Sombra's Father, who I will refer to as "That Fucker" from here on out, did. He was a cold bastard, and he obviously hated Tyrion, but he didn't outright desert or abandon Tyrioon because family loyalty is the Lannister way. At least, not until it came down to choosing between his hated son and his daughter. That Fucker didn't even have the decency to pretend the family was unified.
There are only three questions that I have now.
1. Where the hell is Discord in all this? He's been mentioned, but so far he's a total no-show.
2. What will the royal family's newest member be like? I'm on pins and needles wondering whether they'll be a colt or a filly - as well as what they will look like. Sombra is considered handsome by Pony standards, in a very dark, otherworldly way, as mentioned. Fluttershy is a top-contender for the prettiest Pony around - as is mentioned by many characters, including her husband.
3. What will Twilight and the other Mane 6's reaction be when they discover their friend is not only happily married but also expecting?
Anyone else see the comedy gold for Zephyr to come in and try to sponge, and Fluttershy passed him off on Sombra.
Fluttershy is PREGNANT???????When did that happen!??Anyway awesome story even though it's a little.........um..............teenish,
Just finished rereading this story again. It makes me feel happy when I read it.
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Glad you like it enough to read through it a second time. Its flattering, really. I'm doing stuff with my Nerd Rage story right now, but I'll get started on another chapter soon.
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Second time....haha.... This is like my fourth time rereading it. I reread most stories a couple times so I remember details later on.
I'm suspecting that Starlight sees too much of herself in Sombra right now. I could be wrong though.
AHHH!!!!!SO CUTE!!! I HOPE ITS A COLT!
OK, found and read this story very quickly.
I loved it heaps, but I honestly don't like the time skip. It's too weird and doesn't feel very well scripted like the rest of the book. Although, it obviously makes sense if you wanted flutters to be pregnant.
Also, questions:
Where is discord in all this?
Where is the rest of the main six?
Why did you do the time skip? I hope you continue this story, but it really, really doesn't feel right for this story. Especially since you seem to want to go for extreme detail and usually these stories don't do well with time skips.
If I where you, since you've had such a massive break from writing this story, maybe do a rewrite of newest chapter? If you want to keep the idea of flutters being pregnant, then keep the time skip, but try make it way more plausible. Right now it feels so off beat and so different to the ideas I was getting from literally the rest of the entire book...
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On holiday.
In Ponyville.
Because detailing Starlight's every snore and stir for six months would have been awfully boring.
No.
How gracious of you.
The "book" isn't even finished yet.
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Hehe. Love your comments. All my shit was suggestions. Imo, the time skip feels weird, but this book is fucking fantastic, and I'm going to be reading the hell out of any new chapters no matter what happens. What I mean by: why did you do the time skip? I was implying that you didn't have to 'knock' twilight and her entourage out for 6 months because we, as readers, miss out on all the little details in between across the other characters. Like what was Sombra and fluttershys reaction upon pregnancy? Or what actually happened with Sombra and Celestia, and how, where, when and with whom did fluttershy make the DIS? And the character development with fluttershy, Sombra and the rest of the main 6? Weren't they worried about twilight? Wasn't discord worried at all about fluttershy when she was first taken?
You have the certain habit of over explaining scenes which for me, is a much craved writing technique and I hope you continue using it because you paint images and scenes quite vividly, but a time skip kinda ruins the point of it because you're skipping a huge amount of interesting information.
It doesn't matter anymore I guess, I would have just liked to keep the consistent, day by day ish format which felt way more real and vivid with the way you wrote it.
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Rereading my reaction to your comment, it comes off as a little douchier than I intended for it to sound. Props for not letting my terseness rustle your jimmies.
As for the story, I wanted Fluttershy's pregnancy to be a big reveal. The story is being told through the perspective of Starlight Glimmer as an arc, because I wish to emphasize how much Fluttershy and Sombra have evolved as characters and how much their love for one another has bettered them as individuals.
Case in point, the latest chapter reveals that Fluttershy has triumphed over her stage fright, as she now sings on a regular basis for her people at the local tavern. She's not afraid to order her guards around or even threaten them if the need arises. She's not afraid to square off with her husband either.
Sombra has adopted a few of Fluttershy's traits as well, and they become more apparent in the next chapter. But I'm not going to spoil anything.
This explanation has gone on longer than I intended, so for now I bid you adieu, and thanks for reading.